Advice on a true/first time story?

[JamesSD]

I'm working on a true story of the only virgin I ever slept with besides the girl who was gracious enough to be my first. Luckily for me she was 19 so Literotica's rules aren't a problem.
Unfortunately I'm having issues with the story flow. Real life doesn't always flow like a good story, and though you can speed up and slow down time you can't change the way events occurred. I feel like it's a story worth telling.

I guess I'm looking for general advice, especially those with experience writing first time or true stories.
1) What makes a good First Time story? In particular when told from the point of view of the person who has experience?
2) Do true stories have appeal? Does it help or hurt a story to include details that disrupt the "sexiness" but are both accurate and make the events more "real"?

The story is 2/3 done but still needs the critical "first time" part of the story. Mostly I'm just debating how to set up the events that occurred as a nice, readable story.

 

[Quiet_Cool]

You're better off receiving answers from people other than me, simply because that's not my category (in fact, I don't even read it). However, I'll toss my .02 in there anyway, simply because I do things like that.

Here's my suggestion.

Perhaps, in terms of how the story flows and whether or not the parts that make it "unsexy' are necesary. If you're concerned about writing good stroke, just say "it was her first time" then dive into the sex. Nothing else is required for that. If you want to write a good story, then the extra information is, in my viewpoint, entirely necessary, whether it's sexy or not. It's what makes the story "real."

Consider this: Instead of writing the true story of what happened, go for a First Time story based on true events, giving you the ability to move things as you see fit. Might be helpful to add and remove things as needed to make the story flow better.

And if I haven't seen you elsewhere here, welcome to the AH.

Q_C

 

[neonlyte]

JamesSD
My advice would be to hit the First Time section and read a few. I've 2 posted, you can find them from my sig line, one is RL based.

How much factual event you include really depends upon the structure of the story and what you are wanting to tell the reader. To a large degree, First Time is a seduction, though it can take many different paths as with all stories.

When you've finished a draft I'd be happy to look it over and provide comment for you.

 

[JamesSD]

thanks for the input

I do like the idea of playing up the seduction elements of things. And since I'm far more worried about the story than the stroke factor I won't worry too much about disrupting the "sexiness".

I've got some ideas and will likely update this thread when I've got more of a draft done

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Do a little thought experiment. Think of some story you've read here that you liked. Now imagine that at the end of the story the author appended a little note saying, "Everything that happened in this story is true. I swear to God!"

Does that enhance your enjoyment of the story?

Probably not. If the story seems realistic, then you don't care whether it's "true" or not. If the story was outlandish, you just figure the author's bullshitting you. In either case, whether a fact is true or invented really does nothing to enhance the worth of the story.

First-time stories are a little different because by nature they're often confessional. But personally, when I write, I'm more concerned with turning out a good piece of fiction than I am with producing a piece of accurate journalism.

 

[Kirk482002]

If the story seems realistic, then you don't care whether it's "true" or not. If the story was outlandish, you just figure the author's bullshitting you. In either case, whether a fact is true or invented really does nothing to enhance the worth of the story.

First-time stories are a little different because by nature they're often confessional. But personally, when I write, I'm more concerned with turning out a good piece of fiction than I am with producing a piece of accurate journalism.

I agree with dr_mabeuse.
You first and foremost are trying to write a good story. A true story, word for word and blow by blow may not really be the best writing. I've used a lot of people I've known in the past in my stories, simply to help me develop a character. I've never 'bared my soul' and told a real incident, but some have been pretty close.
As the dr. said, if you read it and it doesn't seem interesting or believable, no matter how well written, no one will buy into it.
I also would write the story from the standpoint of the one that’s having their first experience. If both are new to it, then chose the character that you feel more comfortable being for writing purposes.
I couldn’t write my own real first time experience because both of us were too preoccupied with birth control.
“Condoms?”

“Check!”

“Delfoam?”

“Check!”

“Time till first parent arrives home?”

“5:00!”

“Synchronize watches!”

“Check!”


Of course, there’s the ever famous; “Is it in yet?”

“Check!”

“Shit!”

 

[Lovepotion69]

I've only written one First Time story, but received nice reviews for it. I think it's all about trying to make it realistic. Even if you draw from your own experiences you may need to add stuff, change things around etc. Embellish here and there, add details and so on. My first story on Lit was pretty straight from reality and I pretty soon realised it sucked to write down everything that was real. It just made for a crap story (when I wrote it).

Keep the story realistic, add the thoughts, the hesitation, the fears, the fumbling etc.

Hm, I should try to write another First Time. They're kinda fun to write.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

Hm, I should try to write another First Time. They're kinda fun to write.

How many first times have you had, darling?

 

[Lovepotion69]

How many first times have you had, darling?

One for myself

And let's see here...deflowered two guys.

 

[Weird Harold]

1) What makes a good First Time story? In particular when told from the point of view of the person who has experience?

The things that make a good First Time Story are the same things that make any story good: Active Voice, Dialogue, grammar, spelling, sentence structure, etc.

The adivce to read a few (high rated) First Time stories to get a feel for what elements appeal to fans of First Time stories is good, but don't get caught up in "filing the squares" and writing to fit fan expectations.

2) Do true stories have appeal? Does it help or hurt a story to include details that disrupt the "sexiness" but are both accurate and make the events more "real"?

For me, the truth of a story is far less important than whether the story is interesting. There is also the "Yeah, Right!" factor; I don't believe that most "True Stories" are anything close to the "Truth" -- especialy "True Porn Stories." When I see a claim of "this really happened," as an intro to a story, I pretty much expect a bad story.

Write your story as a story first. Make up dialogue that fits your memories even if it isn't exactly what was said, gloss over "details" that don't advance the story and emphasize "details" that do advance the story and Don't get caught up in the fact that you're telling a 'true story' with constant reminders to the reader about "it really happened this way."

 

[JamesSD]

Asking for Advice is Awesome!

Seriously, the comments here have been great.
I've realized that accurately capturing my memories and writing a good story are two different things. Not mutually exclusive, but eventually you have to pick one.

I've also been reminded that people will always have different desires and it is impossible to please everyone. So at least for the amateur writer it's more important to write something you like and are proud of rather than worrying too much about how it will be recieved.

 

[R. Richard]

One thing that is essential to a good first time story IMHO is why did it happen. Why did it happen is normally not too key an element in most categories, it usually happened because of normal situations/responses. However, the why did it happen is often the key element in a First Time story. You need to pay attention to that element.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

While I agree with much that is said here, I think too you need to step back from your work and eyeball it more often when working with real life events. We all get close to our stories, but when it's relating something you remember very vividly, you are even closer, sometimes to close to be objective.

Step back and try to displace yourself from it and then read it. you may find the flow is awkward because your memories of the events are skewed. they say much of memory is a reconstruction by your mind based on a few very hard and strong memories and a lot of what you remember after that is a kind of "filler". You may find it's awkward because a few very strong memories, her scent, a sound, a particular tactile sensation are very strong and you are writing to them, while the filler memory is not as strong.

It may be wise to look at your filler memories and determine if you are giving them enough emphasis, as they aren't centrally important to your mind but can be critical to a reader in keeping the recollection strong and readable.

-Colly