Adjective rut

[Wildcard Ky]

Do you find that written porn seems to get into a kind of rut when it comes to the adjectives? It seems that pussies are always glistening, and cocks are always throbbing.

Do you use the same adjectives in your stories, or do you try to vary them?

 

[Liar]

I don't think I've ever had a throbbing cock or a glistering pussy.



Eh....



In my stories, I mean. Um...yeah.

 

[Wildcard Ky]

I don't think I've ever had a throbbing cock or a glistering pussy.



Eh....



In my stories, I mean. Um...yeah.

Okay then, maybe I read too much porn.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

I don't pay much attention to my characters' organs in my stories.

I'm more interested in what they do as people.

 

[rgraham666]

I try to vary them.

It ain't easy. There are only so many adjectives appropriate for those organs.

 

[Stella_Omega]

I don't pay much attention to my characters' organs in my stories.

I'm more interested in what they do as people.

Well, obviously, that doesn't work- You have hardly any hot listings at all!

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Well, obviously, that doesn't work- You have hardly any hot listings at all!

And only one published novel (so far).

Teasing aside, I agree with Doc. I'm using fewer and fewer adjectives, in part because of the problem Wildcard mentioned. Most of the time I either just name the body part in question or include a more detailed description as part of the action.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[yui]

Do you find that written porn seems to get into a kind of rut when it comes to the adjectives? It seems that pussies are always glistening, and cocks are always throbbing.

Do you use the same adjectives in your stories, or do you try to vary them?

I think that a proliferation of adjectives works very well for a limited number of very talented writers; mostly, it comes across as wee bit purple. I guess I'm purple, too. I try to be spare, because I recognize the literary value in not saying too much. I think, too, that it all depends on the writer and the style; like poetry, some poets take a single thought and morph it into this elaborate poignant piece; while others, take elaborate feelings and distill them into stark, powerful images.

Both styles have merit.

And both styles can rock your world in the hands of a gifted writer.

 

[BlackShanglan]

I think Yui is absolutely right. There are very few hard and fast rules in literature; most of it's about the effect the author is trying to achieve at that moment.

That said, I have never cared for "glistening" in any context. For some reason it makes me think of slugs and their shiny glistening skins. Something of a buzzkill really.

I have problems with "soft" and "gentle" and with their adverb forms. I overuse them ridiculously in draft. However, I've learned to live with that. I take them as place-holders; "eventually, put something reasonably evocative here." Like Rumple, as well, I'm often working to trim adjectives; usually, I'm attempting to replace them with actions that convey the feeling without excessive use of modifers. Always a struggle, but I think a worthy one in my case. I'm purple as hell after the weeding.

Shanglan

 

[Guest]

I actually sit and brainstorm ways of describing anatomy sometimes when I am in a rut for a story and can't come up with something... it helps when its finally flowing better and I have an idea to have a list of things that I can use instead of the ones that seem to pop up alot of the time but then again there are some instances where throbbing, turgid and velvet are the only adjectives that work.

 

[English Lady]

Erm, I think it show's me up as being a terrible amateur, but really, I don't give it much thought.

I just write, then when i edit, I keep in stuff I think fits and kick out stuff that doesn't.

It's as simple as that...well so far anyways...

 

[arienette]

My pussy glistens!? *looks*

 

[RebeccaBrowning]

Do you find that written porn seems to get into a kind of rut when it comes to the adjectives? It seems that pussies are always glistening, and cocks are always throbbing.

Do you use the same adjectives in your stories, or do you try to vary them?

I'm trying to work "dewy love chunnel" in on what I'm working on now but I'm not sure if it flows off the tongue, so I may have to continue to glisten.

 

[wishfulthinking]

It seems that pussies are always glistening, and cocks are always throbbing.

Guilty Wouldn't have it any other way. [otherwise, knowing me, I might be stuck with a very dry object A touched object C while object B...]. I guess one of the most regular comments I get is that the reader felt as though they were there. if that means a few flowery words, who am I to argue?

There are a few that I fall back on, for lack of a better word that fits the flow of the story. Dewy. Glistening. Throbbing. Pulsing. & channel. shaft. sheath. nub.cock. etc

I once slipped 'love purse' in for the fun of it to see if anyone noticed, only no one commented. Going to have to use it again

 

[wishfulthinking]

I'm trying to work "dewy love chunnel" in on what I'm working on now but I'm not sure if it flows off the tongue, so I may have to continue to glisten.

Try 'dewy love çhute'?