Adjective help

[razor_nut]

Hey Hey~
As the subject plainly suggests, I could use some help coming up up with some adjectives. Normally this isn't much of a problem for me. I've got a firm grasp on the English language, and have an extesive vocabulary.
Where I seem to fall short in my writing is describing the female rear-end.
Any help or tips from you veterans would be greatly apreciated! Here's a pic of they kind of butt I'm trying to write about.
Booty
If you're curious, that's Jennifer Love Hewitt. If there's any rule against posting pics, I apologize in advance. The server is my own.

 

[Guest]

round, firm, heart-shaped, tight, scrumptious, luscious

 

[A7inchPhildo]

Ass is one of the harder ones for myself. I do not like repetitive words in a story, yet vulgarity is not always a good choice either.
I did not run spell check so sorry if the spellings are off.
Ass:
Bum
buttocks
derier
cheeks
gludious maximus
hiney
back door
bubble butt
bottom
biskets
moon
rump
seat cusion

I find myself often times describing a feature close to the area, then relating. Ex. upper legs moving into the curvature, or lower back upon the suple crease.

I try to stay away from words like:
Crevice
leg split
shitter
anal covering
craper
Jack hole
hole
brown eye
anal padding




Hope this helped a little.


Phildo

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

A noble quest, razor nut.

REAR, TUSH, TUSHY, TAIL, FANNY are alternate names.

JIGGLY, TINY (as in TINY TUSH), FULL, SCULPTURED, etc can all be used as adjectives. So can DELICIOUS, INTICING, MOUTH-WATERING, or any other such word or phrase.

Hope that helps.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[razor_nut]

Thanks guys, I apreciate the help. I've knocked out a good chunk of the story I'm working on, and this definitely help touch up that section and others I'm working on.
Kudos~

 

[A7inchPhildo]

A noble quest, razor nut.

REAR, TUSH, TUSHY, TAIL, FANNY are alternate names.

JIGGLY, TINY (as in TINY TUSH), FULL, SCULPTURED, etc can all be used as adjectives. So can DELICIOUS, INTICING, MOUTH-WATERING, or any other such word or phrase.

Hope that helps.

Rumple Foreskin

Hmm, tush, tushy pretty nifty! I will have to really play with words to make it fit properly. Got a great soft feeling in the word.

Tail I like that one I will have to add it to my list. It sounds sexy yet with a small amount of degragation to it, not crude. It is clean cut no doubt ass talk but, a tail.


Phil

 

[razor_nut]

Yeah, I really like "sculptured". A great word for a nice, tight round, firm ass. Ah jeez now I'm getting myself worked up.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Hmm, tush, tushy pretty nifty! I will have to really play with words to make it fit properly. Got a great soft feeling in the word.

Tail I like that one I will have to add it to my list. It sounds sexy yet with a small amount of degragation to it, not crude. It is clean cut no doubt ass talk but, a tail.


Phil

Thanks Phil.

To the best of my knowledge, "tush" is a Yiddish term. A similar one is TOKHES (to-cuss or toe-cuss) but IMHO that doesn't sound very erotic.

RF

 

[NoJo]

Here's a pic of they kind of butt I'm trying to write about.
Booty
If you're curious, that's Jennifer Love Hewitt.

Adjectives -- white, small (not a big fan)

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Tear Drop is one of the adjectives I like best for the clothed ass.

-Colly

 

[Black Tulip]

Has anybody thought to add these to the How To article on Erotic Synonyms by Whispersecret?

I don't know how to do that, but I do find the article very useful.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=39742

Forever helpful,

 

[A7inchPhildo]

Has anybody thought to add these to the How To article on Erotic Synonyms by Whispersecret?

I don't know how to do that, but I do find the article very useful.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=39742

Forever helpful,

That is a nice thought dear,

I do believe you could refer it to Whisper and she alone can edit into the list.

By the way nice set of bicycle buns! Tight as a drum and fine as a perfect peach!

 

[Black Tulip]

Thanks.

By the way, I did send Whispersecret a PM.

 

[gauchecritic]

Personally I would concentrate on the gap. Apart from bemoaning the fact that she is so thin she'd probably break I'd "mind the gap"

I try to avoid just using adjectives and usually mutter and mumble on and on about the subject in a roundabout way.

From my Earthday entry "Hunting Dawn":

When Magda wore jeans I was often hard put to not just stand and gaze at her arse. It was large, slightly out of proportion; I suppose it gave her what women called a pear shape. In jeans her hips came to points on either side making her arse appear even larger, especially since her thighs tapered considerably on their downward journey to knee and calf. And just a fraction below, a line drawn between those pointed hips; the seat curved dramatically inwards to the tops of the back of her thighs, making a very definite, and to me perfect, statement. "This is an arse." I'm told this is a shape that women hate. I love it. An arse that shape is just so grabbable.


But that story has a rating of 3.52, maybe that explains it.

Gauche
Gauche

 

[A7inchPhildo]

Personally I would concentrate on the gap. Apart from bemoaning the fact that she is so thin she'd probably break I'd "mind the gap"

I try to avoid just using adjectives and usually mutter and mumble on and on about the subject in a roundabout way.

From my Earthday entry "Hunting Dawn":

When Magda wore jeans I was often hard put to not just stand and gaze at her arse. It was large, slightly out of proportion; I suppose it gave her what women called a pear shape. In jeans her hips came to points on either side making her arse appear even larger, especially since her thighs tapered considerably on their downward journey to knee and calf. And just a fraction below, a line drawn between those pointed hips; the seat curved dramatically inwards to the tops of the back of her thighs, making a very definite, and to me perfect, statement. "This is an arse." I'm told this is a shape that women hate. I love it. An arse that shape is just so grabbable.


But that story has a rating of 3.52, maybe that explains it.

Gauche
Gauche

No the description of the womans "can"/"Kiesta" was actually very good and erotic. From my perception the story was rated low because you are more of a romantic/humor/coupling writer. Hunting Dawn was good but not racey enough for the category. The readers of that category expect wild wow women!

The description was mentally stimulating if you place it out of context. Describing the ass with little or no mention to the actual ass is one of the better ways to portray the image. I think your descriptions are wonderfully vivid with out being overly possesive as to what the reader should have to think.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

Gauche, Phil,

I'll be a semi-contrarian. IMHO, the description is just a tad too long. Some of it reminded me of Elmo Leonard's line about leaving out the parts readers skip.

However, I agree with Phil that what doomed the story wasn't that description but the category. Incest readers seem to like their stories very explicit plus up-close and personal. The closer the family relationship the better. And when it comes to sex scenes, the more overt and unambiguous the better.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[herecomestherain]

razor_nut, omni posted this link a couple of weeks ago to a list I've found helpful.

Erotic words

cheers, 'rain

 

[Whispersecret]

Thanks, Black Tulip. Hello, all. It's been a while since I've come here. Glad to see there's still an interest in improving writing skills.

I agree with Rumple that gauche's description went on too long. It painted a visual image, but the language in the middle of the paragraph was a bit dry.

Stephen King, whom I consider to be a master of the craft, even though I can't read horror, says that you should avoid adverbs and strive for the perfect verbs whenever possible. Go easy on adjectives too. Too many of those can make your writing feel bloated.

If I were to describe an ass, I'd establish a few images, yes, but also go on to explain what that image made me feel, what it prompted me to do, or think about, or yearn for.

When Magda wore jeans, I was hard put not to just stand and stare at her arse. Like a perfect pear, it was. Luscious, provocative, and, dare I say it? Ripe. I'm told this is a shape that women hate, but I love it. An arse that shape is just so grabbable.

Okay, I didn't follow my own advice, but the paragraph works for me.

 

[Rumple Foreskin]

WHISPERSECRET!

Glad to see you back at the old AH. This word joint just ain't been da same without you around.

Rumple Foreskin

 

[KenJames]

Ass is one of the harder ones for myself. I do not like repetitive words in a story, yet vulgarity is not always a good choice either.

I agree with your list, especially the words to avoid.

The only things about "bum" or "arse" is that they sound specifically European and ring a little false if your characters are American. It's like a Yankee describing someone as "daft."

 

[Whispersecret]

Hey there, Rumple. I'm just visiting. Thanks so much for the warm greeting. It's nice to know that someone remembers me.