TabooTeller
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OK, Finally read part two last night just before bedtime. I thought about it as I was getting ready for bed, I’m sort of surprise I didn’t dream of it.
I want to say first that even though some of what I say may sound negative and some may actually be negative the story is not, over all it is good. Good sex and a good story. Pretty much well written too.
First I want to say that even though not as good as the first one it is still good. evidently some readers who have commented on it had said they expect more swapping. I can understand why many thoughtthis. I counted three things MsSeminoleWind could be setting up things for. Well, two and a half actually. The third thing is just hinted at, maybe that is. Probably not though. Anyway it does sound like --- wants Walker and Claire to have sex again. The second thing, that could be a set up is for Claire and Becky to have sex. The third thing that is sort of hinted at, could be incest but that was probably just my mind getting carried away.
I was a bit disappointed that John and Claire did not talk more about it. I got the feeling that Walker for sure wants a second round, Claire doesn’t, Becky would be OK with it but I have no idea about John. I was a little disappointed that while Becky and Walker were having sex and she says she wants him to fuck her like he did with Claire, that he didn’t have a chance to do it hard like with Claire. It sounded like Becky may have been excited enough to be able to take it harder then usual.
I wa, however, glad with the kissing and the love making between spouses. They do love each other. But speaking of that I thought the blushing by Claire did not fit the way MsSeminoleWind made her last time. However the sex in the water with the other two near by was like her.
More evidently, some thought that MsSeminoleWind was having Walker and Clarie fall in love. I can sort of see why theywould think that, but I don’t didn’t get that. They do seem to be moving closer, but that doesn’t mean they are in love, or will be in love. Walker however, I believe is trying to manipulate his wife and Claire into fulfilling another of his fantasies. If this is true, as reader, I can see you going only three ways to deal with that. One is to let him manipulate the two woman into having sex, two is to let them catch on and do something to reign him in. Maybe by faking having sex but arrange things so that he can’t watch. Maybe he has to be out on the lake but he over hears them say something that implies they will do it while he is out there,
Or the third thing she could do is ignore it, he tries but nothing comes of it. MsSeminoleWind is the writer and she knows where she want to go with him, but as a reader those were my thoughts. Personally I would not like him being able to manipulate them like that even though it would be erotic. MsSeminoleWind does sex scenes good.
There may have been more but I can’t think of it right now. But one last thought, obviously just because MsSeminoleWind seems to have set things up for a certain course of action doesn't mean they have to head that way. Things and plans do change.
If I remember what I was going to say or think of something new there will be a PS.
TabooTeller
OK, Finally read part two last night just before bedtime. I thought about it as I was getting ready for bed, I’m sort of surprise I didn’t dream of it.
I want to say first that even though some of what I say may sound negative and some may actually be negative the story is not, over all it is good. Good sex and a good story. Pretty much well written too.
First I want to say that even though not as good as the first one it is still good. evidently some readers who have commented on it had said they expect more swapping. I can understand why many thoughtthis. I counted three things MsSeminoleWind could be setting up things for. Well, two and a half actually. The third thing is just hinted at, maybe that is. Probably not though. Anyway it does sound like --- wants Walker and Claire to have sex again. The second thing, that could be a set up is for Claire and Becky to have sex. The third thing that is sort of hinted at, could be incest but that was probably just my mind getting carried away.
I was a bit disappointed that John and Claire did not talk more about it. I got the feeling that Walker for sure wants a second round, Claire doesn’t, Becky would be OK with it but I have no idea about John. I was a little disappointed that while Becky and Walker were having sex and she says she wants him to fuck her like he did with Claire, that he didn’t have a chance to do it hard like with Claire. It sounded like Becky may have been excited enough to be able to take it harder then usual.
I wa, however, glad with the kissing and the love making between spouses. They do love each other. But speaking of that I thought the blushing by Claire did not fit the way MsSeminoleWind made her last time. However the sex in the water with the other two near by was like her.
More evidently, some thought that MsSeminoleWind was having Walker and Clarie fall in love. I can sort of see why theywould think that, but I don’t didn’t get that. They do seem to be moving closer, but that doesn’t mean they are in love, or will be in love. Walker however, I believe is trying to manipulate his wife and Claire into fulfilling another of his fantasies. If this is true, as reader, I can see you going only three ways to deal with that. One is to let him manipulate the two woman into having sex, two is to let them catch on and do something to reign him in. Maybe by faking having sex but arrange things so that he can’t watch. Maybe he has to be out on the lake but he over hears them say something that implies they will do it while he is out there,
Or the third thing she could do is ignore it, he tries but nothing comes of it. MsSeminoleWind is the writer and she knows where she want to go with him, but as a reader those were my thoughts. Personally I would not like him being able to manipulate them like that even though it would be erotic. MsSeminoleWind does sex scenes good.
There may have been more but I can’t think of it right now. But one last thought, obviously just because MsSeminoleWind seems to have set things up for a certain course of action doesn't mean they have to head that way. Things and plans do change.
If I remember what I was going to say or think of something new there will be a PS.
TabooTeller
