A young man's slide into slavery

[SubBoy70]

I have a story I would like to publish here on lit. A shy young man becomes the focus of a somewhat older woman. She approaches him in a coffee shop they both frequent. Recently out of college he is unemployed and looking for a job. She gives him her phone number telling him she may have a job for him.
He takes the job. It starts innocently enough but grows increasingly degrading. Soon he is living with her and unable to leave. In the end it (he) is her complete slave and even serving as her full toilet.
The story is complete and in need of an editor. I think the my spelling and grammar are ok. Does everything make sense? Is there a good build to the end? What sucks and what works?
Any help would be appreciated even just to read it and comment.

 

[SubBoy70]

I maybe should have included a bit of the story to give an editor some idea of how I write. So here is the introduction.


He is a shy young man with almost feminine features and manners. Men have been hitting on him but he has rebuffed their advances.

One day in a coffee shop he notices a more mature woman looking at him. She is tall, well dressed and beautiful. He blushes and turns away, embarrassed.

He keeps going back to the same coffee shop, hoping to see her again. After several days she walks in and goes to the counter to order. She turns and sees him staring at her. She stares back but he looks down and away. In a few minutes she comes up to his table.

“May I join you.”

He looks up at her and stammers, “Y-y-y-yes, please.”

She starts to chat with him, doing most of the talking. She gets out of him that he is newly graduated with a degree in literature. He tells her he is living alone, has no girlfriend and is job hunting. Despite the fact that she has done most of the talking he has learned very little about her.

She stands up abruptly, “Good bye, it’s been nice talking to you.”