A twist on the mind control idea

[Green_Jack]

What if it was body control, where the mind of the victim is perfectly aware of what is happening, but cannot control it? Example: woman spreads her legs and exposes herself, all the while fighting it, wondering WTF? It's been running through my mind lately, but I don't know the female mind well enough to describe her reactions. Myself, I think I'd just go with it and see where it led...

 

[MatthewVett]

I like the idea. A prude has her body taken over by an uninhibited maniac, who uses her body to do all sorts of naughty things. Streaking, skinny dipping, gang bangs...

 

[Sean Renaud]

Here's the issue you're going to run into with this story real quick. Not having control of your body would be utterly terrifying. It wouldn't be "What the fuck is going on, this is annoying." It would be more along of the lines of "HOLY FUCKING SHIT I'M GOING TO DIE!" And I don't see how you could get that to a point of being entertaining sexually. It makes for a great horror story sure but not erotica.

 

[jlorthia]

I actually think this kind of exists as a sub-genre

I've read a few stories with this exact premise. It would be terrifying in real life, but "Mind Control" in general is a very unrealistic genre, so the characters are not generally written like real people and more like people from a B or C grade movie, I think with most Mind Control stories there is a certain level of camp involved.

 

[Sean Renaud]

The thing is mind control is very different from body control in tone. Mind control is basically like being drugged. You may be horrified afterwards but while it's happening you're kinda on cruise control. Body control is really a whole different can of worms. I don't even think it's appropriate to call it mind control.

 

[MatthewVett]

The thing is mind control is very different from body control in tone. Mind control is basically like being drugged. You may be horrified afterwards but while it's happening you're kinda on cruise control. Body control is really a whole different can of worms. I don't even think it's appropriate to call it mind control.

You could have the person thinking it's just a dream, at first, to reduce the horror factor. Unless you're a lucid dreamer, isn't it sort of similar? By the time they realize what's going on, something has happened that causes them to not mind it so much. Or maybe it's just an accepted part of their world. Maybe possessions are commonplace and it's just like, "Oh well. Enjoy the ride."

 

[Sean Renaud]

I like the lucid dreamer part, that might be a good route to go with it. Though in my dreams I'm usually in control of my actions. Just not the environment itself save on rare occasion. I'd probably still freak.

The second explanation is would definitely tune down the horror and almost go into a humor route. That could work well though.

 

[Carnevil9]

Maybe the "body controller" finds out the hard way that his victims freak the fuck out when he takes them over. When he finally releases them, they kill themselves! So he figures he needs a new approach.

He starts small after that... just a finger twitch or a toe tap. Then he gradually builds up, but he only does things that the victim probably wanted to do anyway, but didn't have the balls to do. Like asking out the pretty girl, or going in for that kiss that he wasn't sure was welcome.

 

[Everyday_Man]

Maybe his talent is known and women and men come to him to be controlled to see what kind of adventures this guy is going to take them on. Some underground sex fetish type of thing.

 

[blin18]

Maybe the "body controller" finds out the hard way that his victims freak the fuck out when he takes them over. When he finally releases them, they kill themselves! So he figures he needs a new approach.

He starts small after that... just a finger twitch or a toe tap. Then he gradually builds up, but he only does things that the victim probably wanted to do anyway, but didn't have the balls to do. Like asking out the pretty girl, or going in for that kiss that he wasn't sure was welcome.

Maybe his talent is known and women and men come to him to be controlled to see what kind of adventures this guy is going to take them on. Some underground sex fetish type of thing.

Now THIS is Story Ideas at its best. You two have taken an idea I hated and come up with two awesome ones.

 

[Hypoxia]

POV is crucial. Who tells this tale? Do we only get the controller / rider's growing omnipotent self-gratification? What do victims feel? Do victims go from unwilling to eager, and why? How do outsiders react? Do others witness / exploit the victims' behavioral changes? Does the rider pay a price, maybe physical / mental disintegration? I'm leery of MC stories. As with fantasy, anything can happen. Magic needs limits.

 

[Everyday_Man]

POV is crucial. Who tells this tale? Do we only get the controller / rider's growing omnipotent self-gratification? What do victims feel? Do victims go from unwilling to eager, and why? How do outsiders react? Do others witness / exploit the victims' behavioral changes? Does the rider pay a price, maybe physical / mental disintegration? I'm leery of MC stories. As with fantasy, anything can happen. Magic needs limits.

Rules for a more broader and in depth story, but for a sexual fantasy, throw the rules out the window and focus on the sexual buildup. Don't over complicate the matter unless your goal is more than 'how are my characters going to get themselves off and therefore, the reader.'

 

[Sean Renaud]

I have to agree with Hypox. Readers of fantasy are a particularly critical bunch. Your story has to make internal logic or they will just shit on you from such a height you'll think God was hurling meteors at you. Which doesn't mean you have to waste a whole lot of time. I have a series called The Device and it's basically a subsonic 'radio' that you can tune and it makes women uncontrollably horny. Women have different wave lengths like radio so you generally can only get one at a time but like baby monitors, radios or old school tvs sometimes you're in range of more than one. That's as much an explanation as I've given to how it works. And it's not famous because some frat boy discovered it in the 50's and it's been a legend ever since.

POV is also crucial and is something I would never personally have noticed how necessary it is.

 

[Everyday_Man]

I have to agree with Hypox. Readers of fantasy are a particularly critical bunch. Your story has to make internal logic or they will just shit on you from such a height you'll think God was hurling meteors at you. Which doesn't mean you have to waste a whole lot of time. I have a series called The Device and it's basically a subsonic 'radio' that you can tune and it makes women uncontrollably horny. Women have different wave lengths like radio so you generally can only get one at a time but like baby monitors, radios or old school tvs sometimes you're in range of more than one. That's as much an explanation as I've given to how it works. And it's not famous because some frat boy discovered it in the 50's and it's been a legend ever since.

POV is also crucial and is something I would never personally have noticed how necessary it is.

Try reading Steven Erikson, all his rules to magic (and everything else) get thrown out the window the moment after he sets them and he's a bestseller (granted, I don't like his works) . . . but as I said, you're not creating an entire world mythos (typically) when writing here, nor are you making a world that has to make sense ... if you want to do a series set in a somewhat realistic world, then I agree with the rule setting, but there is no law saying you can't write without rules (sometimes rules just hinder). In a short story environment that thrives off sex, it is my belief you can toss rules aside (but lets not get carried away either, there is tossing rules aside and then there is just being completely silly to prove a point).

 

[HonorableRogue]

Maybe the mind control is completely unconscious. Guy falls asleep on a bus has some erotic dreams and when he wakes he finds some people on the bus have lived out his dreams?

 

[Hypoxia]

Maybe the mind control is completely unconscious. Guy falls asleep on a bus has some erotic dreams and when he wakes he finds some people on the bus have lived out his dreams?

That's a good one. He's not to blame -- until he starts researching "lucid dreaming", constructing dreams to fill his desires. But being dreams, thay always go off in unexpected directions. That's how he ends up on the receiving end of a tentacle or unicorn or whatever.

 

[ElliottEden]

Robert Silverberg wrote a story years ago regarding a similar topic. It's called Passengers.