A True Story But Would Love Pointers on Improving How It Reads!

[belleanderson]

I love sucking my man's large cock. I love the way it feels in my mouth and how it fills up all the space so tightly. But when he nears cumming, it gets so big there is no room for the cum to go. And so if I don't swallow it right away it starts to ooze down the sides of my mouth. And this is exactly what happened when I went down on him the last time. I got dressed up in my silky smooth purple bustier and put on my sexy leggings and a thong. Of course, Will couldn't help but get rock hard at this sight. I could see his huge boner poking through his underwear and I knew I was going to get that bad boy in my mouth.

But first, he wanted to bury is face in my crotch to breath in his aphrodisiac as he calls it. Yes, the smell of my pussy makes him even harder. I was to eager to wait much longer, so I pulled down his underwear and watched as his boner sprung out ready for action. So, I started by licking the tip. The precum stuck to my tongue and it tasted mild and salty and I wanted more! I started pushing it into my mouth deeper and deeper. I could feel him enjoying this as his cock throbbed in my mouth as I ran my tongue along his shaft.

My mouth quickly filled with precum and I was excited thinking about giant shots of cum pouring down my throat. I could hear his breathing getting quicker and more intense. He was loving every second of this. And so was I. My pussy felt so wet that I would have thought he'd already filled me up with cum if I didn't know better. I stuck my finger deep inside my silky smooth hole and felt pleasure bolts all over my body. Knowing how much he loves it, I took my finger and put it all over his face to make sure my pussy smell was all over him. He loved this! I could feel his cock grow and harden in my mouth as I took it deeper and deeper.

The feeling of it hitting the back of my throat and gagging me just a little is something I enjoy. I would never want to be gagged intensely, but choosing to push his cock in just deep enough to make me feel a quick tinge of gag reflex gets me wet. I used to feel weird about that like I was such a slut. Now I just embrace my sexuality and that I love his cock in my mouth. If that makes me a slut, oh well. Will was getting so turned on. I could hear his breathing approaching orgasmic intensity and then he said those magic words, "I'm close, I'm about to cum!"

I got so excited! I sucked harder and faster! And then I felt that first blast, and then another and another. This was no ordinary load! He was filling my mouth and I had no where to store all this cum. So, I try to swallow some. I wanted to save the full load to show him afterwards before I swallowed but that wasn't going to happen. It had started to pour out the sides of my mouth and my hand was coated in sticky white cum. I sucked as much back in as I could and in the end managed to save some so I could show him how much I enjoyed eating every last drop. He loves watching me lick his cum off my fingers and from around my lips. And he was so turned on by this, his erection intensified again and he bent me over and fucked me doggy style with some intense ball slapping sticky sounding pussy pounding muff music until he came again inside his favorite place to play hide the boner!

I LOVE GETTNIG FUCKED BY HIM! And I'm glad he loves fucking me just as much!

 

[NotWise]

First, the forums are not for posting stories. You're limited to just a couple paragraphs, so the forum moderator may remove or crop this.

Second, the story is less than 750 words, which is the minimum size for a story published on Lit.

The story, such as it is, reads well. You have a good basis to work from when you expand it. A setting would help. Some dialog would help. If you want to keep it short, then you probably don't need to worry about plot, conflict, etc.

Literotica readers typically don't take well to very short stories, and that is reflected in their votes and comments. Lit isn't a good setting for flash fiction. I've also seen no evidence that the readers care if a story is true, possibly because there's no way to confirm that it is true.

 

[OralDave]

Story! It seems more like she's describing what she did that morning.

 

[gunhilltrain]

I hope this doesn't seem like nitpicking, but a little context would be nice. It's just a description of a blowjob. Who are these people, where are they, when is this happening? I guess it could qualify as flash fiction. But it still needs something to make it into a story, even if it is true.

 

[StrappingMan]

I agree with the above poster. Backstory is required or some kind of lead up to what is happening here will drastically improve the story. If it's a true story you dont have to go into specifics to protect your identity.

Did you just have a great night out? Was he just being playful earlier?

A few paragraphs more and you would reach the minimum length requirement and a much more satisfying story.