A sucker for punishment?

sirhugs

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The final line of my much hated* story Not Another Loving Wives Tale was: "And yes, we did acquire our own tentacle monster, but that's another story."

I must be a sucker for punishment, because I was tempted to try the sequel, but alas, I stalled right off trying to figure out how the couple acquires their TM

*not hated by me, I still like Cassie the wife, and think the story did what I wanted- the humour, the tension, the twist at the end, the flood of comments- but most of the comments were negative and the score is quite low
 
Maybe have your couple as supporting characters in another story. Sometimes it's easier to see a plot goal from other characters POV.
 
The somewhat obvious answer is that TM is a hermaphrodite, and deposited more than the Cassie character realized. Her next shower and the seeds of slithering sexual sensuality find their way into the drains. To mature, so as to become The Son & Daughter of TM. Which helps to explain the symbiotic relationship twixt TM and comely human females.
 
If I dare try chapter 3, does Jim (the friend from the LW story) HAVE to fuck Cassie, or can it just be more tentacle play?
Can I write more interesting tentacle play?
why?
normally, I wouldn't mind Cassie being shared with Jim- that sort of story used to be my bread and butter, but I prefer not to attract too much rage these days. The first try was enough (and she only fucked the monster)
 
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I don't think you HAVE to have anyone do anything, but I think I know what you mean. Are readers going to expect it, and be turned off if they don't get it? I think the answer is still NO. Just don't lead them on.

How about a third chapter of Jim and the original TM having sex? Or maybe parallel scenes of Jim and Cassie getting it on with their own TMs? Or for that matter, have Cassie and her husband both get TMed together. It's a big enough shower.
 
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