A retelling of the Prince and the Pauper, with a sci-fi twist

[33RPMVinylPants]

The setting: Deep space, long-haul transport ship with oppresive rules against fraternization.

The characters: A sexually repressed technician who's bored of the ship's pleasure droids, and an (accidentally) self-aware sexbot who wants to be more human.

What other solution than to trade places for a day?

Of course, issues arise and 'for a day' gets delayed a bit. Our FMC ends up servicing half the ship lest her disguise get revealed, and the droid has to fumble their way through regular human interactions.

At the end of it all, the droid gets to experience human friendships and even a budding romance, and the technician gets to experience burly space marines passing her around like a human fleshlight.

 

[Rob_Royale]

 

[AchtungNight]

Sounds like fun. Can we get some links?

 

[33RPMVinylPants]

Sounds like fun. Can we get some links?

it's an idea I've been brainstorming, there are no links yet, lol

 

[AchtungNight]

it's an idea I've been brainstorming, there are no links yet, lol

You want help writing it from an established author, let me know. I have my own ficverse and I might include stuff you’re not into, or I would take your idea.

 

[33RPMVinylPants]

You want help writing it from an established author, let me know. I have my own ficverse and I might include stuff you’re not into, or I would take your idea.

I probably won't have time to hammer out any writing until after thanksgiving, but mind if I send you a second draft in a few weeks?

I've never written anything for this site (though I do have a few dozen half-finished first drafts scattered around my google drive), so I'm not really sure yet how to take the plunge.

This one is probably the only story in my WIPs that wouldn't be a series, so I thought it might be a good one to start with.

 

[AchtungNight]

I probably won't have time to hammer out any writing until after thanksgiving, but mind if I send you a second draft in a few weeks?

I've never written anything for this site (though I do have a few dozen half-finished first drafts scattered around my google drive), so I'm not really sure yet how to take the plunge.

This one is probably the only story in my WIPs that wouldn't be a series, so I thought it might be a good one to start with.

Sure. I’ve been writing for this site since 2006 and done a lot of volunteer beta reading, so I don’t mind helping you out. It’s cool if you want to read my work and give feedback in exchange, but I won’t require that. Privately message me when you’re ready and I’ll share an email address.

I’ll also go ahead and ask- would the story also feature a little droid on tech action between the two leads? That’s the main kink I was thinking about in addition to the “burly marine gangbang” you describe. Could be an easy way for the tech and droid to meet and get some fans into them. Fine if you’re not interested in that, not everyone has the same kinks. I’m only curious.

 

[33RPMVinylPants]

Sure. I’ve been writing for this site since 2006 and done a lot of volunteer beta reading, so I don’t mind helping you out. It’s cool if you want to read my work and give feedback in exchange, but I won’t require that. Privately message me when you’re ready and I’ll share an email address.

I’ll also go ahead and ask- would the story also feature a little droid on tech action between the two leads? That’s the main kink I was thinking about in addition to the “burly marine gangbang” you describe. Could be an easy way for the tech and droid to meet and get some fans into them. Fine if you’re not interested in that, not everyone has the same kinks. I’m only curious.

My outline is basically:
- Scene establishing the rules of the ship (two crewmates are on trial for dereliction of duty since they missed a shift to fuck) (One of the pieces of evidence in the trial is a video of them fucking)

- FMC goes back to work in the robotics lab to fix a malfunctioning sexbot but can't get the scene out of her head. At the end of her shift, she takes one of the penis-equipped bots back to her room, but is unsatisfied with the big, walking vibrator and wishes for something more real and uncontrolled.

- FMC comes in to work the next day still unsatisfied to discover that the malfunctioning sexbot wasn't malfunctioning after all, it was beginning to gain sentience and was trying to grow beyond its programmimg.

- FMC and Bot realize, in the process of commiserating, that each one has what the other one lacks - (physical intimacy for FMC and freedom to choose for Bot)

- They hatch a plan to disguise Bot as FMC, and use noninvasive cosmetics to make FMC look like a sex-bot

- A request comes in for the 'new bot' and FMC goes to fulfill it. meanwhile, Bot tries to socialize. For both of them, hilarious and humiliating disaster ensues.

- That night, FMC and bot teach each other things. Bot teaches FMC to be a more enthusiastic and giving partner (they bang in sapphic Sexbot-on-human scene), and FMC teaches Bot about sarcasm and self-depreciating humor.

- Next day, FMC has another call from a bored crewmember. He's got a fetish that she doesn't really like, but she jumps in with both feet for his sake, and discovers the joy of making others happy. Bot has to try and solve a technical problem that only FMC can fix, and is forced to make a decision (flexing that free will muscle) (Maybe make this a 'day in the life' montage, with each taking on multiple encounters)

- Both are satisfied with their foray into the other's lives, and are about to swap back, when...

- They get a distress call from a military transport that commandeers their vessel for a ride home. FMC and Bot are both pushed way outside their comfort zones, with Bot being forced to solve life-or-death problems they weren't programmed to, and FMC being thrown headfirst into the space marine's quarters to entertain the bored, horny, and rowdy soldiers.

- At the end of the day, they each learn something about themselves, and both really like their respective 'new me'

Rough outline. 11 scenes, give or take. 6 sex scenes.

one 'she watches two people have sex on screen and likes it', one unsatisfying robot sex, one awkward human sex, one satisfying robot sex (does it count if the robot looks like her and she looks like the robot?), one (or more. montage?) satisfying human sex, and one gangbang.

 

[AchtungNight]

That all sounds great to me. I look forward to seeing the draft product. Good luck.

 

[Kelliezgirl]

Love the idea, maybe more than one scene of the FMC having to widen her experiences? Exploring who she really is and what her desires really are?

 

[33RPMVinylPants]

I think the biggest sticking point I'm having so far is determining *exactly* what the FMC wants, and (once I have that figured out) writing it with any kind of verisimilitude.

I want to write this with a heavy emphasis towards a free use/objectification fetish. The FMC is literally turning herself into a sex doll for her oblivious coworkers to get off with. Her motivation has to support that goal. Is she desparate for human intimacy? Bored of the pleasurebots and seeking new thrills? A natural submissive desperate to be ordered around? I'm leaning towards the latter.

One part of the worldbuilding I'm planning on to support this is that robots are designed to be non-sentient. The FMC finds sex with the dolls unfulfilling because the human in that interaction is de facto in control of the encounter - and the FMC wants to experience powerlessness.

This also ups the stakes for the (for lack of a better comparison) Pinnochio sidestory, as discovery of a droid that gained sentience would have pretty devastating repercussions for them.

[edit] and since I didn't really answer your comment: yes, I think it might take the FMC more than a few encounters before she's even able to express what her desires are. A character who's able to state from page 1 exactly what they want and why they want it isn't very compelling. It should take some experimentation before the FMC has the revelation about what her motivations are.

So maybe she thinks she's driven by boredom, but being treated like an object that brings pleasure to others awakens something in her she didn't know she was missing...

Thanks everyone.

Writing these responses to you has helped crystallize a few decisions for me.

 

[Kelliezgirl]

Perhaps she just hasn't really tried anything before?
You mention the fleshlight aspect of it, but I don't think that's what most people would really want if there was the technology to create a pleasure bot. Even if it isn't sentient it would have some sort of programming so it could be more of an active participant. They might all be scripts of some sort. Customer requests a particular role or fantasy and the robot has a basic script with a little AI thrown in to respond.
Maybe the FMC isn't good with people, struggles to understand them so now she has to figure out what they want from their requests.

 

[33RPMVinylPants]

You mention the fleshlight aspect of it, but I don't think that's what most people would really want if there was the technology to create a pleasure bot. Even if it isn't sentient it would have some sort of programming so it could be more of an active participant. They might all be scripts of some sort. Customer requests a particular role or fantasy and the robot has a basic script with a little AI thrown in to respond.

My idea is that sex with one of the bots is like choosing porn from a menu.

You get exactly what you want, every time.

Any position, any arrangement you can think of. And any roleplay on the menu. Want the sex bot to be a naughty schoolteacher? or run the Dominant Daddy program? A slut, a temptress, worship your feet? Have it all, like you're ordering room service.

You get exactly what you ask for. But nothing more.

And the bot derives no pleasure from it - it's just a machine there to do a job.

What you'll never get with the bot - what the FMC craves - is a partner with their own desires, with their own wants and needs and their own pleasure.

Every time I think about the FMC's motivations, I'm teetering between "She wants a partner that she's not in control of" and "She wants a partner that she can make happy"

They aren't mutually exclusive, but I can't decide on which one should be the thesis of the story.

[edit] oh yea, and this means that when FMC is running around the ship as a 'sexbot', I get to write a bunch of fun scenes where all her coworkers make her indulge their unique fetishes. It'll make a fun montage, I think, doing hard cuts from one crazy scene to another.

 

[AchtungNight]

Objectification and submission isn’t really my thing… surprising admission from a fanfic smut writer, I know. But I’m still ok beta reading as long as it’s not glorified or overly emphasized. Giving the female main character a personality and the chance to exert her own agency is a good start to avoid this.

I also recommend mentioning that she’s not the only one unsatisfied with bland sex bots. Maybe a programmer was asked to write a “surprise me” or “seduce me” program by a space marine into such things and that led to the AI becoming sentient?

People can also get frustrated with long menus for character creation and just pick randomly generated characters or random menu items by accident. This might help the FMC avoid detection or throw her off her game.

 

[M_K_Babalon]

Clearly if it's getting sentience, it's more an android than a robot.