MelissaBaby
Wordy Bitch
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Could I get some feedback on this?
SimonDoom made the following comment on the story I submitted for the One Night event. I respect him as a writer and a critic, but I am confused about this particular point.
To me, I see this as a matter of style, not grammar. I'd love to read what others think. I am very open to being enlightened if I am in error.
Would these sentences be considered ungrammatical?
"He was tall, he had to stoop to get through the door."
"Her beasts were enormous, they spilled out of her sweater."
I could, of course, stick an "and" into each sentence, but that feels like unnecessary verbiage to me.
Thanks for any input.
SimonDoom made the following comment on the story I submitted for the One Night event. I respect him as a writer and a critic, but I am confused about this particular point.
Grammatical point: On several occasions, you combine complete sentences with a comma and no conjunction. Example: "Ray had a delicate hand, there was a lightness and elegance to each drawing." These should be two separate sentences.
To me, I see this as a matter of style, not grammar. I'd love to read what others think. I am very open to being enlightened if I am in error.
Would these sentences be considered ungrammatical?
"He was tall, he had to stoop to get through the door."
"Her beasts were enormous, they spilled out of her sweater."
I could, of course, stick an "and" into each sentence, but that feels like unnecessary verbiage to me.
Thanks for any input.