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hotsnatch6

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OK – here’s the setup.

A husband has always wanted to see his wife get it on with another man but so far she has been reluctant. The family goes to a park on the 4th of July to have a picnic and watch the fireworks. The kids are playing, the husband is eating and the wife is sucking down a lot of booze. Eventually, she has to go to the bathroom so she leaves to go find a Port-a-Potty.

She’s gone for quite awhile but the husband just assumes there’s a long line outside the crapper since the park is packed. It turns out that the wife is standing in line next to a handsome stranger who strikes up a conversation with her. She assumes he’s just being friendly but he can tell that she’s half in the bag and is eyeballing her up and down. Eventually they both get to the front of the line and go in next to each other. However, instead of draining his lizard, the stranger crawls up on top of the toilet to peek out the vent into the unit next door. When the wife pulls town her shorts to tinkle, he sees the most perfectly shaped buns he’s ever laid eyes on.

When they both come back out, she thanks him for keeping him company and starts to head back to her family. He has other ideas and asks if he can buy her a hot dog at the concession stand. Still feeling the effects of the rum she has been downing, she replies that she doesn’t want a little wiener but she’s definitely in the mood for a large Polish Sausage. He walks her over to the stand but instead of ordering, he takes her behind the refreshment stand and tells her that he’s got 9 ½ inches of love for her in his pants. They start going at it hot and heavy, when all of a sudden she gets a wild idea. Although her husband has wanted to bone her up the butt throughout their relationship, she was always reticent to take it in the backdoor. But now she’s so turned on that she throws caution to the wind. She pulls down her shorts, turns around and bends over and orders the man to drill her in the ass. He whips out a massive boner but knows that it’s going to hurt like hell unless he finds something to lube his giant dong with. Looking around, he spots a packet of mustard on the ground that someone else had left. He opens it, squirts it on his rigid tool and proceeds to butt-jam this woman like crazy.

Soon the spicy mustard begins to burn her delicate butthole. She starts howling and moaning from the pain, screaming that her ass if on fire. He mistakenly assumes she’s getting off on it and understood her to be asking whether or not he liked her hot ass. He kept driving it home until finally, with a grunt, he unleashed an enormous load all the way deep inside of her bung. No sooner was he spent than he hiked up his drawers, said “Thanks for the sweet action, babe” and made his way off into the night.

The wife slowly walks back to her family, moving very gingerly from the discomfort. When the husband sees her, he assumes she’s been hitting the sauce again while she was away but as she gets closer he can see that her hair is disheveled, her makeup is smeared and she has a glazed look in her eyes. He says something about the fireworks about to begin but she responds by saying she just took a firecracker up the ass.

I know it needs some more work, but is there a potential story here? Or am I firing blanks?
 
OK – here’s the setup.

A husband has always wanted to see his wife get it on with another man but so far she has been reluctant. The family goes to a park on the 4th of July to have a picnic and watch the fireworks. The kids are playing, the husband is eating and the wife is sucking down a lot of booze. Eventually, she has to go to the bathroom so she leaves to go find a Port-a-Potty.

She’s gone for quite awhile but the husband just assumes there’s a long line outside the crapper since the park is packed. It turns out that the wife is standing in line next to a handsome stranger who strikes up a conversation with her. She assumes he’s just being friendly but he can tell that she’s half in the bag and is eyeballing her up and down. Eventually they both get to the front of the line and go in next to each other. However, instead of draining his lizard, the stranger crawls up on top of the toilet to peek out the vent into the unit next door. When the wife pulls town her shorts to tinkle, he sees the most perfectly shaped buns he’s ever laid eyes on.

When they both come back out, she thanks him for keeping him company and starts to head back to her family. He has other ideas and asks if he can buy her a hot dog at the concession stand. Still feeling the effects of the rum she has been downing, she replies that she doesn’t want a little wiener but she’s definitely in the mood for a large Polish Sausage. He walks her over to the stand but instead of ordering, he takes her behind the refreshment stand and tells her that he’s got 9 ½ inches of love for her in his pants. They start going at it hot and heavy, when all of a sudden she gets a wild idea. Although her husband has wanted to bone her up the butt throughout their relationship, she was always reticent to take it in the backdoor. But now she’s so turned on that she throws caution to the wind. She pulls down her shorts, turns around and bends over and orders the man to drill her in the ass. He whips out a massive boner but knows that it’s going to hurt like hell unless he finds something to lube his giant dong with. Looking around, he spots a packet of mustard on the ground that someone else had left. He opens it, squirts it on his rigid tool and proceeds to butt-jam this woman like crazy.

Soon the spicy mustard begins to burn her delicate butthole. She starts howling and moaning from the pain, screaming that her ass if on fire. He mistakenly assumes she’s getting off on it and understood her to be asking whether or not he liked her hot ass. He kept driving it home until finally, with a grunt, he unleashed an enormous load all the way deep inside of her bung. No sooner was he spent than he hiked up his drawers, said “Thanks for the sweet action, babe” and made his way off into the night.

The wife slowly walks back to her family, moving very gingerly from the discomfort. When the husband sees her, he assumes she’s been hitting the sauce again while she was away but as she gets closer he can see that her hair is disheveled, her makeup is smeared and she has a glazed look in her eyes. He says something about the fireworks about to begin but she responds by saying she just took a firecracker up the ass.

I know it needs some more work, but is there a potential story here? Or am I firing blanks?

I've never heard of using a condiment instead of a condom. :)
 
I think it's funny as hell (well probably not for the lady).
It needs a second scene where the husband finds out and responds in some way or maybe the burning gets worse and she has to figure out amusing (to us) ways to relieve herself.
 
I think it's funny as hell (well probably not for the lady).
It needs a second scene where the husband finds out and responds in some way or maybe the burning gets worse and she has to figure out amusing (to us) ways to relieve herself.

Thank you. Do you happen to know of any ways to relieve a fanny fire? Perhaps there's something in the Torah about butt burn or a teaching in the Mishnah about heinie heat or even a passage in the Talmud regarding crack cooling? Any rabbinical advice would be appreciated.
 
From a rabbinical sense I might suggest Mikvah Immersion.
But since we're such big fans of Chinese food - a little duck sauce always tempers the mustard.
 
In scene two maybe you could meet her in the park again, but this time she has her dog and you offer to walk the dog for her. Once on the path going through the woods you sodomize the dog while squirting mustard on your cock for lube.

Do you see how ridiculous this sounds? Now you know what I feel like after reading one of your wacky post.
 
In scene two maybe you could meet her in the park again, but this time she has her dog and you offer to walk the dog for her. Once on the path going through the woods you sodomize the dog while squirting mustard on your cock for lube.

Do you see how ridiculous this sounds? Now you know what I feel like after reading one of your wacky post.

Who asked for your opinion, numb nuts? Now go back to stroking your tiny weiner while you fantasize about the women you will never be able to have.
 
story

Everything up to the mustard was great.
I'm sure if you can come up with this story you can create more....;)
 
I think it's funny as hell (well probably not for the lady).
It needs a second scene where the husband finds out and responds in some way or maybe the burning gets worse and she has to figure out amusing (to us) ways to relieve herself.

Yeah, we definitely need a sequel. Maybe the husband's offended by the cheap type of mustard used. At home, she only ever insisted on the top-of-the-range English mustard, specially imported just for this very purpose. In Hotsnatch's world, anything is possible. Keep up the good work.
 
After hubby finds out about her firey anul he gets an idea and takes her out one night to a nearby park.After having sex he rub jalopano juice all over a butt plug and dildo and shoves them into her ass and cunt then makes her get dressed then takes drops her off at the PTA meeting teling her she had better not remove the toys.
 
Who asked for your opinion, numb nuts?

Technically, you did. When you post anything publically on the Internet it is out there for all to read.

Lit is a "public access" web site. Anyone eighteen and older can become a member for free. Each membership includes access to threads/posts and creating one's own post.

You asked for opinions in your first post. You take the good with the bad. Not everyone will send positive feedback and/or kiss other member's asses. It's a fact of life.

Hell, I've received "death threats" (that I never took seriously) in E-mail feedback from a story I wrote. Shit happens.
 
Technically, you did. When you post anything publically on the Internet it is out there for all to read.

Lit is a "public access" web site. Anyone eighteen and older can become a member for free. Each membership includes access to threads/posts and creating one's own post.

You asked for opinions in your first post. You take the good with the bad. Not everyone will send positive feedback and/or kiss other member's asses. It's a fact of life.

Hell, I've received "death threats" (that I never took seriously) in E-mail feedback from a story I wrote. Shit happens.

You're 100% right. My comment was directed towards the one individual and not everyone. I have had some issues with that particular poster and he only posted in this thread to annoy me.
 
Go for it!

PM me if you want someone to keep nagging you to get it written. Er... if you need help. :D
 
I quite like it!
Think it all happens a bit too easily... If she doesn't do anal with her hubby I don't think she'd do it impulsively.. But she might be lead into it....it has potential for voyeur/group too...
Didn't care for the mustard!!
 
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