A Highschool life to remember

[GothGuy]

Hi, I just put out my 5th chapter of the story titled A Highschool Life to Remember and I would love to get some feedback or comments of any kind.

(I just realized there is a place for new story ads, sorry to post this here, could someone move it plz)

 

[drksideofthemoon]

Hi, I just put out my 5th chapter of the story titled A Highschool Life to Remember and I would love to get some feedback or comments of any kind.

(I just realized there is a place for new story ads, sorry to post this here, could someone move it plz)

Post a link to your story...we're much too lazy to go looking for it...

 

[GothGuy]

A High School Life to Remember chapter 5

 

[mjl2010]

I got confused and the chapter took me nowhere except to a RP game where a girl flashed her titties.

Maybe it wasn't my cup of tea or something. It was very hard to stay focused and eventually I gave up, even after she flashed her tits.

A room full of horny nerds or geeks, a girl flashes her tits and no one cares. And really, that's all that happened in this, what? portion of a chapter? I'm not even sure you could call it a chapter. It was like you were working towards 3000 words or something and quit when you got there.

I just can't buy it.

MJL

 

[GothGuy]

Well, some of the group was excited, if you had finished reading the story you would have learned that I suppose. Sorry.

The two characters that left early have their reasons for doing so, that may or may not become apparent in later chapters.

Typically, I like each chapter to include one erotic encounter, so I stopped where I did because the encounter happened and was over.

I think this chapter may be a confusing one to start at because the main character is thinking about characters and events that a new reader might not have known about.