A Girls' School Hockey Tour

[Uncle David]

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[msboy8]

I R.V.C.ed chapter one. I will now read chapter 2, I would rewrite chapter one. Thanks for asking.

 

[Uncle David]

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[yui]

O.K. Showing my ignorance here, but what does RVC stand for?

RVC = Read, Vote, Comment

 

[Uncle David]

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[Uncle David]

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[Uncle David]

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[Uncle David]

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[spacer x]

I was one of the people who criticized your first story (I noticed my public comment and a whole bunch of others disappeared - where did they go?). I think it's somewhat better now with the boobs on the bus scene added, but still surprisingly rushed when they first get together (they're in his room and then he has his hands down their pants about a paragraph later).

My philosophy is, why rush? The getting is as good as the having. One story I really like is A Tempting Vacation by JackKing. It's a great example on how to draw out the anticipation. I hope you keep going with this series, but take your time and let us know their thoughts, conversations, and the foreplay, too.

Just my 2 cents.

 

[Uncle David]

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[Uncle David]

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[HornyHenry]

Thanks for the "inspiration"

Thaks for the feedback. By the way, Chapter 3 is out, and seems to be better than 1 and 2. Keep thw comments cumming!

Here is some inspiration: Kelly and Kathryn?

Now, if you would put a link in your SIG, maybe I'd go read it!
Thanks, on behalf of all us readers too lazy to search. Help us by making it easy to find them.

 

[Uncle David]

Link

how do I edit my sig?

 

[Uncle David]

Time to get changed

 

[HornyHenry]

Sig

Here is the link:

Uncle David

But how do I edit my sig?

Like this: Go to your "User Control Panel for the forums, click "Edit Signature",
And paste your link in the middle like this:

{URL=http://english.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=438336&page=submissions]My Stories[/URL}
but replace the curly brackets with square brackets.
This is a link to your stories, for instance.
In fact, you did it right in your post. Copy and past that in your CP and you'll have it.
Cheers, HH
PS, like the story so far. Have to read it all later.

 

[Uncle David]

Thanks, HH. It worked!

 

[Uncle David]

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