A girl from California, a girl from Florida and a girl from Peurto Rico walk into

[jerryjwj]

Hi guys.

Thanks for providing such a forum.

I read non-consent erotic stories where no matter how grossly brutal the atrocity, somehow the woman seems to get turned on. I don't think that is realistic. I know it is fantasy. But I suspect that for some woman who entertain bondage fantasies, the fear and loss of control is the turn on. But, they would never get turned on at the time they were in the situation. Instead they get turned on by imagining that they could be in that situation. Maybe I am wrong. Let me know, if I am wrong.

I want to examine the realistic feelings that woman might have if caught in a situation like this. It seems to me that some woman do in fact actually find sexual release by exploring these scenarios at a safe distance, of course.

Most of this story is just to provide a pretense for a scenario where a guy can gain the unwilling cooperation of several girls. This allows me to make erotic descriptions of my completely uninhibited erotic whims.

I invite others to use the premise of this story, to describe the next event Jim has the girls take part in. No need to duplicate any of the premise. Just start it "Day 5" or what ever day. The last day "Day 90" might be interesting. Feel free to jump ahead., if you have an ideas for the day they are released.

Also, I am particularly interested in what ideas woman have. So if you are female and have a smoldering erotic vision of bondage, let it out. Don't hold back anything even if you think that it appeals only to woman. And that a guy wouldn't be interested in it. Let me hear it.

Also any comments or suggestion to improve my writing are welcome too. Just send them to my email. I have attempted to submit articles to Lit before. But was rejected.

Thank you.

Jerry

you will find the story here

https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=426983

 

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nevermind .....

 

[Quint]

I'm interested in the theory as well. Realistic control is much more erotic to me than the dramatized, "feelings she never knew she had" softcore versions. The psychology of captors and captives especially catches my eye.

On a literary level, you may want to pay more attention to sentence phrasing and structure; I notice that your sentences all tend to be short and follow the same format of "subject predicate," to go back to grade school. It's one part short sentences and one part sentence fragments; by combining the two, you will have more variation in sentence structure and the result will be more readable. You also refer to your characters by name a little too much rather than pronouns or other descriptions--"the girl," "the blonde woman," etc. This all kind of creates a choppy reading flow that keeps the reader from really sinking into the story.

Some typos and grammatical errors but that's the core to change for maximized readability. I got in about halfway down the page and was enjoying myself moderately; I'd be interested in continuing. Hope this helps. You might also want to bring this up on one of the more "feedback" oriented boards if you don't receive the sort of analysis you wanted.

Cheers!

 

[Kajira Callista]

I'm interested in the theory as well. Realistic control is much more erotic to me than the dramatized, "feelings she never knew she had" softcore versions. The psychology of captors and captives especially catches my eye.

On a literary level, you may want to pay more attention to sentence phrasing and structure; I notice that your sentences all tend to be short and follow the same format of "subject predicate," to go back to grade school. It's one part short sentences and one part sentence fragments; by combining the two, you will have more variation in sentence structure and the result will be more readable. You also refer to your characters by name a little too much rather than pronouns or other descriptions--"the girl," "the blonde woman," etc. This all kind of creates a choppy reading flow that keeps the reader from really sinking into the story.

Some typos and grammatical errors but that's the core to change for maximized readability. I got in about halfway down the page and was enjoying myself moderately; I'd be interested in continuing. Hope this helps. You might also want to bring this up on one of the more "feedback" oriented boards if you don't receive the sort of analysis you wanted.

Cheers!

Am i the only one who found this post way hot?

 

[Quint]

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[Caitlynne]

Am i the only one who found this post way hot?

No.

 

[Evil_Geoff]

Hi guys.
... I suspect that for some woman who entertain bondage fantasies, the fear and loss of control is the turn on. But, they would never get turned on at the time they were in the situation. Instead they get turned on by imagining that they could be in that situation. Maybe I am wrong. Let me know, if I am wrong.

Hi Jerry,

You're wrong.

I've had women bound severely, beaten the snail snot out of them and had them dripping wet and having orgasms without so much as the first insertion or having direct contact with her clitoris or vagina.

This doesn't happen with every woman I've played with but it's happened enough for me to know that the REALITY of the bondage can be the turn on as well as the fantasy of the bondage.

There are women out there as pervy as I am, if not moreso. *grins* And that's a good thing.

Good luck with the story.

 

[Kajira Callista]

Yes, I am sitting here with my glasses on, hair pulled back severely, tapping a pen briskly against the desk. Pay attention, now--you don't want me to have to repeat myself!

Literature does bring out my inner Domme. Tis true.

*giggles* you are making my mouth water.

 

[jerryjwj]

Very glad to see the interest

I was very happy to see the number of replys.

Thank you Evil, for your insight. I believe your account. I still have questions though about whether the women with whom you experience what you describe, would instead be turned off if they were not sure that they could leave after you and she were done. That is the heart of the bondage fantasy.

I was so glad to see so many females respond. Thank you Quint for your reply. It is exciting for me to understand the different points of view a woman and a man has. I am very interested in finding what quality of bondage appeals to the hardwired core of a woman's sexuality.

I hope that the mods here allow this post and that many woman express their personal fantasies submerged in a mercy context confusing consent and non-consent.

The most interesting part will not be the details of the fantasy. The most interesting part will be the particular actions, emotions, or visualizations on which the author focuses.

I do not want to discourage men from posting either. After all it does take two to tango.

Thank you all for your interest.

Jerry