A Fortune Awaits, But Not For Thee

[Lazy_lay]

When girl turns 24, she is to inherit the fortune of her billionaire uncle.

At 18, they threatened her, and when she didn't listen, they brutally gang raped her.

At 19, they forced her to do sex acts, then used those to have her committed to a mental hospital as a nymphomaniac sex addict.

The day after she got out at 21, they set her up on shoplifting charges, three separate sets, high dollar, and she went to prison for two years.

The girl is exotically beautiful. She knows when she gets out, they'll be ready for the final con. Maybe they'll kill her, or have her sent back to jail on a made up parole violation. She knows it's all about the money. She has an idea of who the conspirators are, and she's pretty sure that the old banker handling the trust is honest and safe. Those who were left out of the will, who would get it all if she could be eliminated.

It's only the contacts, connections and plans she can make in jail that could form a plan to thwart them. Yet she can't tell anyone about the money, it is far too much to let on about. So she uses her sexuality to bait them into the plan.

She's long ago learned to do man or woman, and to avoid romantic relationships. She's after sex, when the hunger strikes her, and usually only when it's someone she can use. Any and every kind of sex is a tool to her, but what she craves, if she could have it, would be to be chained and whipped. But she can't let on about that, she has to look strong, skilled, and enchanting, even if only to woman prisoners who have seen better days when they were whoring and snorting coke. At the core, where no one can see, she's soft, weak, vulnerable, and totally scared.

 

[FireyIce]

I like this idea. It's very unique and different. What kind of idea did you have for when she gets out, maybe have someone set up a fake ID for her so she can find out who's after her?

 

[HeyAll]

Sounds hot.

How about this: The billionaire is her grandfather who raised her. That way the story is more compelling. The girl had a troubled youth so she was sent to a strict private school or something. She had no idea about the inheritance until the grandfather died. Then she was set up, and it was easy to get a conviction because of her past crimes when she was a teen.

She uses her sexuality to find out who framed her, even seducing police and lawyers. It can be somewhat of an erotic story that unfolds.

Just an idea if you want to use it.

 

[sirhugs]

"At the core, where no one can see, she's soft, weak, vulnerable, and totally scared."

but if you lick past that core, you might find that she's tough and determined (but creamy).

 

[lovecraft68]

Excuse me, where is the consent here?

Just wondering.

Flat out rape is not supposed to be allowed here.

Take this to asstr. They love it there. Then again they like 13 year olds having sex with animals too.

 

[KlaytonFrost]

Yeah - the story comes across as a bit rapey for me too. Can't see how being abused in that way would lead to her being hungry for sex - so it doesn't really work for me logically. I like the idea of the high stakes money and someone being framed though - maybe you could develop those elements a bit more?

 

[LadyCypris]

Excuse me, where is the consent here?

Just wondering.

Flat out rape is not supposed to be allowed here.

Again with the butthurt. Look, we know nonconsent is a trigger for you (everyone knows, because you never fail to bring it up ). I'm not trying to discount or trivialize your experience, but nonconsent/reluctance is a valid category here on Lit. Maybe live and let live, learn to distinguish fantasy from reality and try not being a party pooper on every single thread that even mentions nonconsent.

In this particular instance, as I understand it, the rape is backstory, which falls within Laurel's guidelines.

 

[lovecraft68]

Again with the butthurt. Look, we know nonconsent is a trigger for you (everyone knows, because you never fail to bring it up ). I'm not trying to discount or trivialize your experience, but nonconsent/reluctance is a valid category here on Lit. Maybe live and let live, learn to distinguish fantasy from reality and try not being a party pooper on every single thread that even mentions nonconsent.

In this particular instance, as I understand it, the rape is backstory, which falls within Laurel's guidelines.

Of course it does.

have her slice the cock of her attacker, which would be fitting if a woman was being attacked

and watch how fast it doesn't make it.

My issue is not non consent. I don;t have to read in that category. My issue is and always will be the double standard hypocrisy.

I am caught between wondering if the rape "rule" is drawn on Republican beliefs or was written by a man from India where rape is a sporting event.

You know I would say if I upset you so much you could get even by writing story about me getting raped, but I'm a guy so it would get rejected.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Probably from the Indian point of view if we're being honest here.

That said I'm the oft time antagonist of Lovecraft coming like a shadow to defeat him whereever he roams!

I got no problem with the roughness and I keep meaning to test this double standard but never quite getting around to it however on the original plan ehhhh.

I'm usually amongst the first people telling you that if you're writing a story you can kinda check out to crazy land and do whatever you want. You want a story about a little sister who fucks her brother and all his friends fine. You want a story about a boy who drinks month old milk and it gives him the power to literally vomit up Playboy Models who have to ingest semen in the first twenty minutes of their existance or explode. So be it. This story however doesn't seem to even follow it's own internal logic and that IS a problem.

Here however we've just got very poorly thought out criminals. I get raping the exotically beautiful woman on her eighteenth birthday. There are better ways to throw a coming of age party but I get it. I get coming back when she's nineteen. ..okay unless you're a fucking leprachaun who's required to leave her alone for a year I don't get why she got 12 months repreive instead of being broken but okay. That's sex. I get that.

But this is supposed to be about money. If it's about the money they either should have just killed her instead of tipping her off with two separate sets of rape or made her their friend. I mean unless these criminals took the Kill Bill course on evil where there is a perfectly good method (like killing her before she wakes up and murders you all) but you can't do that because your the honorable kind or rapist.

Now it's not unsalvagable, lets be honest various Japanese and Chinese films have been based on the same basic concept. There are countless, you killed my master/father/brother/lover but let me live because you wanted me to suffer, I wasn't worthy, grow stronger and come talk me later stories. And LC will love this. I can't name a single one of those stories that doesn't end with the hero informing the villain that his plan was absolutely flawless. . .except that part where you didn't kill one more person than you did. One five point dick exploding punch later the heroine explains in precise medical terms how much blood is in the human body, and how quickly you'll bleed out and maybe if she'd put her tits away less would rush towards your gaping wound.

 

[Lazy_lay]

Again with the butthurt. Look, we know nonconsent is a trigger for you (everyone knows, because you never fail to bring it up ). I'm not trying to discount or trivialize your experience, but nonconsent/reluctance is a valid category here on Lit. Maybe live and let live, learn to distinguish fantasy from reality and try not being a party pooper on every single thread that even mentions nonconsent.

In this particular instance, as I understand it, the rape is backstory, which falls within Laurel's guidelines.

I saw it as backstory, the actual story being when she was in prison. The point of the backstory was to establish plausibility in a woman being completely unable to have relationships, viewing sex as just a tool to get what she wanted, yet being viewed as redeemable and capable of being cured.

As for why those who tormented her did so instead of killing her, I guess I would answer there are a lot of people in the world who would beat someone up but who wouldn't kill a person. Seemed plausible, made the plot work.

RE Sean's comment, yeah it is basically a common plot, weak naive person grows strong through adversity, finally overcomes it. Certainly there's nothing rare about a woman who was sexually abused earlier in life finding it affects their ability to relate to others.

 

[Sean Renaud]

The way you wrote the summary it seems to implied that she's afraid they may kill her this time and with good reason. If she's still breathing the money is still hers. She has to be eliminated. But like I said you can go the extra mile and redeem THAT. I just find the story filled with laughably stupid villains but Kill Bill is still fun and once you get past the initial fuck up the villains still come across as credible threats.

 

[LadyCypris]

My issue is not non consent. I don;t have to read in that category. My issue is and always will be the double standard hypocrisy.

That's disingenuous. In my time lurking in Story Ideas I've seen you being an unreasonable buzzkill about rape fantasies (and they are that, fantasies) in like half a dozen threads, not all of them about a perceived double standard. You quite clearly have a thing against nonconsent fantasies. I'm not sure how else I'm supposed to read you equating any and all nonconsent with castration.

You know I would say if I upset you so much you could get even by writing story about me getting raped, but I'm a guy so it would get rejected.

Uhm, no. Granted, they're in the minority, but I've read a few male-on-male or femdom stories in the Nonconsent/Reluctance category. You're trying to make it out as though there is some chauvinism behind the no-castration rule, but I'll bet any story with female circumcision will be outright rejected as well.

Laurel's stance seems quite clear to me. Mutilation and death in service of the plot, okay to a degree; done in an attempt to tittilate, no. Stop trying to make this something it's not.

(Sorry for the thread hijack, Lazy_lay.)

 

[soflabbwlvr]

There are elements of this concept that I find interesting, but I still don't get the purpose of her tormentors' actions. Sure, it explains the development of her character, but how does it serve the tormentors' interests? Raping her, getting her sent to prison, etc.--how does any of that function to separate her from the inheritance which she won't receive for several years? Why doesn't she go to the police after the first rape? You do have the seeds of an interesting story here, but at this point a large part of it makes no sense.

 

[Sean Renaud]

Like I said, this story doesn't really hold up amongst it's own internal logic and that's a problem.