A brother/sister story idea

[Lee Chambers]

I'm currently in the process of writing several stories at once, bouncing from one to the other as new parts come to me. One of the stories I'm working on is a story idea I brought up a couple of months back.

It's an incest brother/sister story with a touch of realism in it. In the story, the brother and sister are still in high school and are having a sexual relationship. At some point, their parents catch them. Instead of going the traditional route of the parents joining in, I wanted to write a story where the parents are disgusted and furious. In the end, the son is kicked out of the house and eventually disowned. The story is told entirely from the son's perspective so you don't know what the sister goes through until she reveals it to her brother later in the story.

After the brother is kicked out he stays with a friend until he finishes high school (which will only be a few months off) and after that, having no place to go, he joins the Marines. This time frame will take place just before the events of 9/11. Eventually the brother goes to war, fighting in both Afghanistan and Iraq, going through all the shit that we've heard soldiers go through, only he has no one to go home to when his time is finished.

Eventually his term of enlistment is up and he decides to leave the Marines, having grown sick by the horrors he's seen in the war. He makes the choice to go to college and try to build himself a normal life, but he suffers from post-traumatic stress and is constantly plagued by terrible nightmares.

Shortly after he goes to college his sister comes to see him. They haven't seen each other or spoken to each other since he was kicked out and she offers him a place to stay with her since she is now fully grown, finished with school, and is starting her own career. Over time the sister and brother rekindle their sexual relationship and through that relationship she is able to help her brother deal with the pain he suffers from his time in the war.

I'd like to know what any of you think of my idea and if you'd like to offer any advice or ideas of your own to help improve it. Thanks.

 

[Matadore]

I'd like to know what any of you think of my idea and if you'd like to offer any advice or ideas of your own to help improve it. Thanks.

Not much advice yet, but the potential for your idea is terrific.

Consider having them develop the relationship gradually over time perhaps because the parents are abusive maybe not physically, but emotionally and have the actual sexual "dirty deed" be their first attempt when their parents walk in to find them.

He could "take the rap" for her by assuming all the responsibility for the sex. He might even accept more than his share of blame and become hardened and emotionally closed and isolated. He may witness rape and other horrors that can be associated with war and armed conflict. He may develop tight bonds with personnel in his squad or company. He may become intimate with one person and then have that person die in his arms from wounds received in battle.

Such stress would explain his withdrawal and PTSD. He could conceivably become impotent, despondent, and antisocial. He would act out his anger by fighting, drinking, and engaging in self-defeating behaviors.

It would be about this point that his sister scrapes him off the street or bails him out and takes him in because she still sees the person that she grew up loving.

Yeah...you could do worse for a story. Do your research on psychology, combat fatigue, and incest/abuse to make the back ground sound.

I'd like to read what you have when you finish.

Good writing!

 

[Lee Chambers]

Thanks for the response. You've actually given me some good ideas on perhaps changing how the story develops in the beginning so I'm going to ponder that for awhile. This story is going to take some time as I see it being a very developing story. Even if I reduce a lot of the stuff that happens from the time they get caught and the main character's time in the service to a back story explanation type format it's still going to take awhile to get it all down. But I'll definitely let everyone know when it's finished and when it goes up.

 

[Fantasies_only]

Thanks for the response. You've actually given me some good ideas on perhaps changing how the story develops in the beginning so I'm going to ponder that for awhile. This story is going to take some time as I see it being a very developing story. Even if I reduce a lot of the stuff that happens from the time they get caught and the main character's time in the service to a back story explanation type format it's still going to take awhile to get it all down. But I'll definitely let everyone know when it's finished and when it goes up.

When you first proposed this, I thought it would be like all the others here, but WOW, your story is gonna be epic!
Actually it feels like a blockbuster movie or TV miniseries.
Would it be too cliche if he went AWOL just to find her with another man?
Maybe she wanted to wait for him, but heard he was missing in action.
What if he broke free after being caught by some terrorists?
It's kinda cliche, but my last idea is faking his own death.

 

[Matadore]

Thanks for the response. You've actually given me some good ideas...
But I'll definitely let everyone know when it's finished and when it goes up.

YW Glad to be able to help.

I'll be looking forward to your posting and how you finally decide to resolve it.

 

[leggiesoxx]

hi lee, here's another idea that you can work on if you are interested.

it's actually based on a true story that happened to someone i know. the brother is a 18 yo college student back home for the holidays. he is very close with his older sister who is a 26 yo woman who is having marital problems. since the bother was a teen, he's always thought that his sister was really hot. even saw her acidentally in the shower naked when he was a teenager and used to jack off picturing her naked. during the family new years party where his family has invited their neighbors is winding down with people getting drunk and going back home. his sister is still at the house after a fight with her husband who just left the party. some other teenaged college kids are at the party as friends of the neighbors' college kids, getting drunk and hanging around.

the brother's parents have retired to their bedroom. he is about to do the same as he is about to wash up in the bathroom. he enters the bathroom and hears moans and sexual noises behind the shower curtain. he opens up the curtain to see another 18 yo guy buttfucking his hot sister who is drunk and dazed. the guy just continues to fuck his sister, as the brother gets hot and hard instead of getting angry. the guy fucking his sister just says that this bitch is a real hot slut and wants it and tells him to join in and let her suck his cock. his horniness is too much as he unzips his pants and lets out his own cock. the sister is too drunk to recognize him, only seeing another cock in front of her and sucks on it. ecstasy. the other guy shoot his load into her. the noise in the bathroom attracts a couple of more guys into the bathroom to find the scene and they all take their turns on his sister. he also participates in the gangbang, fucking his hot sister in the mouth, ass and pussy and loving every bit of it.

any way you can write this for me?

 

[DragosLove]

this sounds great, I personally prefer realism to all the nymphomaniacs in most incest stories. I look forward to reading it.

 

[gartner83]

sounds like fun

 

[drksideofthemoon]

In the story, the brother and sister are still in high school and are having a sexual relationship.

You may have a problem as your characters may appear to be underage...

 

[Lee Chambers]

You may have a problem as your characters may appear to be underage...

I know, this is one issue I've had to deal with so I plan to write it so that they're both eighteen in their last year of school. It will be a bit of a stretch but not so much that it isn't beliveable.