1st story thoughts

[CNYWriter]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=88948

Well as I am writing a follow up I figured I might as well post the 1st part here finally for some feedback.

Yes I know I didn't spell check it, so flame away on that but I finally got a word processor instead of just typing into the box on the submit form

I have gotten some good feedback through email, thank you to those that have sent some. Also, thanks in advance to anyone who gives me feedback here on it.

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

CNY,
Good plot, hot sex and great description, but, as you stated you didn't spell check. A spell check, grammer check and punctuation revision would probably get you a lot more feedback and votes.
I would read the follow up based on the content here but please do the checks before posting. Over all nice work

Wicked

 

[CrownJoolz]

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=88948

Well as I am writing a follow up I figured I might as well post the 1st part here finally for some feedback.

Yes I know I didn't spell check it, so flame away on that but I finally got a word processor instead of just typing into the box on the submit form

I have gotten some good feedback through email, thank you to those that have sent some. Also, thanks in advance to anyone who gives me feedback here on it.

I have to agree with Wicked. Good story, but some people are really distracted by poor spelling and grammatical errors. That's usually an instant back-click for me. Your ideas are good, take the time to go through it, spell check it and re-post it as edited.

Ciao,
Joolz

 

[CNYWriter]

Well part 2 is finally up and it can be found here...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=90698

yeah i will have to resubmit the 1st part after spell checking it at some point, i didn't know that you could do that. do youjust send it in with the same title or do yuo somehow delete the first one before you resubmit it?

 

[fieryjen]

As far as I know, you just send it again and add EDITED to the title, then they'll replace it.

 

[CrownJoolz]

bump