2 different storie ideas

Well the basics for the first would go something like this:Maggie: 20 working in the hotel, Lorie: 20 Stuck-up rich girl staying at the hotel & friends with Maggie & Mr.Penlip: 30 Manager of hotel & knows Lorie very well.

Maggie and Lorie are trying on some new dresses in Lories suite And they ask Mr.Penlip to come in and zip them up. Maggie turns to him to what he thinks and fall while Lorie trips as she trys to turn and falls as well. One of Maggies breasts pops out of the dress ends up on his mouth while Lorie falls backwards right on top of his lap. Mr.Penlip starts to get aroused by all this and starts to get hard. Before he is able to get them off of him so Lorie starts felling anything, Lorie fells him getting harder by the second and is liking it. He starts to open his mouth to say something without realizing that Maggies breast is right there. After he does he starts to fondle the breast with his mouth and tongue. As he does that Lorie start to pull his pants down so she can start "playing" with it.

And it would go on from there. A few things could be changed around a little if it has to be. This is just the basic to give a good idea of where it's going and what's going on. This also ables to this other one as well.

The guy: Drake, 19 and the girl: Katie,19 siblings by marrage.

Katies in the shower. Drake tells someone to turn the shower on so he can take one. He steps into the shower not knowing that Katies already in there. They see each other naked and Drake starts to get hard. Katie sees it growing & likes what she's seeing. She lets it keep growing right between her legs as she presses her whole body up againist his and starts to kiss him. Then they go start to lie down with Katie on top.

And it would go on from there. There, what do you think of those ideas for stories? Again, Those are just some basic ideas of how they would go. I'm not really sure how they should go to become really good stories, I would love to have some help.

So, my first suggestion will be get an editor.

The next is to develop less contrived ways for sex to happen - her breast "falls" into his mouth? I can not say I have ever heard of something like that happening. Now, I realize that lit is not about the epitome of realism, however, a little bit of the realistic does help.

After fixing that, you seem to already have a plot element that you like; what you're realing lacking now is the exact details of sexual intercourse, which is not something someone else can develop for you. If "Katie" is going to be "on top," well, describe that; how it happens, how it feels.

I never was good at details or decribing anything. It all just poped in my head wrote down what I had & couldn't get anything else that would help the story go on that would make at least some sence.