Would you?

[champagne1982]

you've been such an inspiration. Would you write an erotic poem about pizza?

Brava! Well played, Angeline

 

[Angeline]

Brava! Well played, Angeline

Well to be fair I should have let you take the first shot lol. I think writing about the life of a jock strap is right there with a disco zombie sonnet!

 

[EducatedOwl]

EducatedOwl your subject is from the point of view of an alien visiting Earth

I'll have to hit this tomorrow. Sorry I didn't see it sooner.

 

[HarryHill]

I'm afraid it has to be FROM INSIDE an inanimate object ......... you know like inside a teapot or such

..
I'm sitting in my Car, thinking bout all that wasted space
above; but, pirate songs play in my head and I know push come to shove
I'll never find a little peace until that voice ceases to speak in rhythmic
inundations of piratical incessancy

 

[todski28]

*To the outlaw*

"Sit down"
The command you'd snap at a dog,
"No wait, fetch me a tea,
Hurry up I haven't got all day"

Walk away blood starting to boil,
then it starts in,
bemoaning, blaming, whining about
whatever
Dear god let this end,
if she doesn't shut up....

Walk back to the table,
I snap,
dump the whole pot of tea
on its head,
watch in wonder as it melts like
the wicked witch in the Wizard of Oz

CRASH, it bangs the table like a gavel
jolted from my happy place, I tense up,
tight enough to pop a haemmoroid,
(if one does pop I'll name it after her)
I place the tea down, staring blankly
I excuse myself, lest I commit murder

*Eat it*

Grease wets the box, making it slick
the smell intoxicating, I could bury my face in,
devour this delight
Pineapple pops, sweet liquid runs down my chin
Wipe my mouth, lick my fingers and grin

Do you want to try the pepperoni?
I know how much you like thick spicy sausage
we both moan in mutual delight

I know pizza was for Underyourspell but I couldn't help having a taste

 

[UnderYourSpell]

*To the outlaw*

"Sit down"
The command you'd snap at a dog,
"No wait, fetch me a tea,
Hurry up I haven't got all day"

Walk away blood starting to boil,
then it starts in,
bemoaning, blaming, whining about
whatever
Dear god let this end,
if she doesn't shut up....

Walk back to the table,
I snap,
dump the whole pot of tea
on its head,
watch in wonder as it melts like
the wicked witch in the Wizard of Oz

CRASH, it bangs the table like a gavel
jolted from my happy place, I tense up,
tight enough to pop a haemmoroid,
(if one does pop I'll name it after her)
I place the tea down, staring blankly
I excuse myself, lest I commit murder

*Eat it*

Grease wets the box, making it slick
the smell intoxicating, I could bury my face in,
devour this delight
Pineapple pops, sweet liquid runs down my chin
Wipe my mouth, lick my fingers and grin

Do you want to try the pepperoni?
I know how much you like thick spicy sausage
we both moan in mutual delight

I know pizza was for Underyourspell but I couldn't help having a taste

He's nicked my Pizza !! :caning:

 

[UnderYourSpell]

Pouring oodles of mozzarella cheese
Into the cutest inny until it oozes.
Zapping tomato juices that trickle
Zinging, to be lapped from your
Anus, tantalising every inch of the way

 

[Angeline]

Pouring oodles of mozzarella cheese
Into the cutest inny until it oozes.
Zapping tomato juices that trickle
Zinging, to be lapped from your
Anus, tantalising every inch of the way

Very nice but I think I'll just take one still pristine slice and ooze off quietly.

 

[champagne1982]

..
I'm sitting in my Car, thinking bout all that wasted space
above; but, pirate songs play in my head and I know push come to shove
I'll never find a little peace until that voice ceases to speak in rhythmic
inundations of piratical incessancy

<giggling> Cheeky, aren't you? :caning:

 

[Wintermute01]

Wintermute your subject is write a poem about yourself in which nothing is true.

My Enigma
~~~~~~~

Now, falling victim to age's ennui
Of late I've recalled the joys of past times.
Those halcyon days, when summers were hot
Having that kiss that did make it hotter
I'll never again be premier cru
Next as I am to age's experience.
God how I miss, the ignorance of youth!

 

[todski28]

Some interesting things happening in this thread, nice stick to beat, I mean prod the muse with
Sorry bout the pizza teach, I only had a taste, now do I dare ask for another.....:.

 

[Angeline]

My Enigma
~~~~~~~

Now, falling victim to age's ennui
Of late I've recalled the joys of past times.
Those halcyon days, when summers were hot
Having that kiss that did make it hotter
I'll never again be premier cru
Next as I am to age's experience.
God how I miss, the ignorance of youth!

This is really nice with a lyrical feel. I had an idea when I read it--just my thought--that if you turned that last line around a bit to "God how I miss the youth of ignorance!" you get the same meaning plus twist it a little plus get a near rhyme with "experience." Maybe not your thing but it just kinda caught my eye.

 

[Wintermute01]

This is really nice with a lyrical feel. I had an idea when I read it--just my thought--that if you turned that last line around a bit to "God how I miss the youth of ignorance!" you get the same meaning plus twist it a little plus get a near rhyme with "experience." Maybe not your thing but it just kinda caught my eye.

Yes! Of course that would be better.

I think I got fixated on embedding codes in it

 

[Angeline]

Yes! Of course that would be better.

I think I got fixated on embedding codes in it

Yes the secret codes (like acrostics) are hard to get past at times.

 

[butters]

Some interesting things happening in this thread, nice stick to beat, I mean prod the muse with
Sorry bout the pizza teach, I only had a taste, now do I dare ask for another.....:.

you can take mine, if you like, todski! i haven't a clue what to do with that one annie tossed my way

 

[todski28]

you can take mine, if you like, todski! i haven't a clue what to do with that one annie tossed my way

ha, I pinched one and now you think you can dump yours on me
Your frisbee piece was inspired, you are a far better writer than I, how about we write one each pm it to the teach so she can post them at the same time to see where both our minds went? That way you have some one holding your hand

 

[butters]

ha, I pinched one and now you think you can dump yours on me
Your frisbee piece was inspired, you are a far better writer than I, how about we write one each pm it to the teach so she can post them at the same time to see where both our minds went? That way you have some one holding your hand

i didn't see it so much of a 'dump' as a 'donation'

thanks, but that remains to be seen. how do you know how good you'll get to be? and i might not develop any further and watch from the sidelines as you take us by storm

i like the idea, but i just don't even know where to begin. honestly haven't a clue. it's ringing no bells, making no ripples, creating no static. hopefully there'll be a breakthrough and it'll arrive, but i ain't holding my breath. thankyou very much for the offer, though, tods - it's appreciated!

 

[Angeline]

ha, I pinched one and now you think you can dump yours on me
Your frisbee piece was inspired, you are a far better writer than I, how about we write one each pm it to the teach so she can post them at the same time to see where both our minds went? That way you have some one holding your hand

That is the very idea behind the same title challenges we've done here since uh always.

See? You really are a natural at this.

 

[butters]

That is the very idea behind the same title challenges we've done here since uh always.

See? You really are a natural at this.

he so is. you can't learn that - it's in you or it's not. and isn't it exciting watching some of the newer members here growing so damned fast? the unusual blend this forum offers is just the thing for some.

 

[HarryHill]

This is really nice with a lyrical feel. I had an idea when I read it--just my thought--that if you turned that last line around a bit to "God how I miss the youth of ignorance!" you get the same meaning plus twist it a little plus get a near rhyme with "experience." Maybe not your thing but it just kinda caught my eye.

..
good suggestion, made me think
that this would work well too:
..
God how I miss youths ignorance! (lot of sonics there but I think the tongue twists a little)

 

[HarryHill]

i didn't see it so much of a 'dump' as a 'donation'

thanks, but that remains to be seen. how do you know how good you'll get to be? and i might not develop any further and watch from the sidelines as you take us by storm

i like the idea, but i just don't even know where to begin. honestly haven't a clue. it's ringing no bells, making no ripples, creating no static. hopefully there'll be a breakthrough and it'll arrive, but i ain't holding my breath. thankyou very much for the offer, though, tods - it's appreciated!

..
same thing she said before the last challenge, Tod; look how that ended.

 

[todski28]

I though it was because you were all so nice, I still think I'm rubbish, or at best middling in mediocrity,

doubt clouds my brain in a shroud
a misty shroud you can see through,
words spill through the daze, puzzle me that you
are sometimes amazed. If it wasn't for the poetry assessor
I would be more plagued, with self doubt, coz its an
emotionless machine that analyses without, pity
for some fool trying to be pithy, wordy or gritty
and yet I torture these words still seeking the perfect meaning
maybe I'm too unfair on myself, but that's the way I'm leaning.

 

[todski28]

..
good suggestion, made me think
that this would work well too:
..
God how I miss youths ignorance! (lot of sonics there but I think the tongue twists a little)

I think it's the repetitious " s"sound, if you change
To
god how I miss youthful ignorance?
Breaks the s in miss, youths and ignorance

 

[Angeline]

he so is. you can't learn that - it's in you or it's not. and isn't it exciting watching some of the newer members here growing so damned fast? the unusual blend this forum offers is just the thing for some.

True and not only the newer members but people who I haven't seen writing here for a while and now I am awed at how we've grown and changed as writers. This place works some kind of magic on us all!

..
good suggestion, made me think
that this would work well too:
..
God how I miss youths ignorance! (lot of sonics there but I think the tongue twists a little)

Yeah sometimes you see different things and realize a little twisting of words really benefits the poem. I'm going back to edit my St Marks Ghazal because I reread it and saw some things that I couldn't figure out when I first wrote it.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

..
I'm sitting in my Car, thinking bout all that wasted space
above; but, pirate songs play in my head and I know push come to shove
I'll never find a little peace until that voice ceases to speak in rhythmic
inundations of piratical incessancy

<giggling> Cheeky, aren't you? :caning:

yes he is and I will remember!