New Poetry Recommendations

Saturday

Just a few new poems today.

I recommend Arkansas Evening by Jayce1066. After I'd read it I was humbled by the phrasing, it went so smoothly. I expect poems like that, more narrative, to read choppily but it wasn't that way at all. Very good, enjoyable sense of place, and an extremely comfy read tinged with a little ring of sadness.

I also liked Mosquito Morsel Mama by EroticOrogeny. A little poem with big bite.

So give 'em a try and see what you think. Thanks to all who read, submit and review.
 
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Sun-Tues

Not much has been happening day to day on the New Poetry Page, but the last three or so days has seen some good poetry when taken as an amorphous blob of artistic exuberance. The question on everybody's lip tips: "Has lawrobbur left us for greener pastures?" I can't answer that, only time as an old man will tell. From the bottom of the page to the tippity top!

LaurenHynde leads us off with "not by chance/the easy verse" which has quality sounds, some rough phrasing here and there, nothing a good polish can't fix up.

Hurrealism in "three morsels" has one stanza I really enjoy:

And in droves, undulating
The momentum gains pace
Love, soon reflected
From the ease on the face.

Hurrealism has another "Invisible" that also has some good lines.

SelenaKitten from the other side of the literotica world has a great thought to end her "William Dreaming": "i am dreaming/the dream/onward." Something simple, yet to me it seems fresh and that's what counts.

Bflag uses the word "quibbling" well in his Rhymer of the something or other poem

Sapphos Sister has been writing a bunch, her best of the week is by far:

I shall crown your locks with posies,
Scarve your limbs in laurel leaves,
Swathe your sex in budding roses,
Clothe your breasts in sorrel sheaves,
Knot your wrists with stems of nettle,
Bind your shins with ivy root -
Then pluck each pink and perfect petal
And in your forest, taste your fruit.

I spent a good ten minutes considering whether the comma in the last line is necessary, I haven't decided.

Best title of the week goes to hmmnmm with "the tulips were fated"

I'd say Hurrealism wins the mvp for the last week, they've contributed poems that maybe aren't perfect, but they have stanzas and lines that show the sort of promise of a quality poet. And it's always nice reading someone and wondering "Gee, this poet looks like if they keep writing(and don't hop a steamer for Africa) they're gonna figure the whole thing out and write diamonds from simple carbons some day."

If this review was longer I would have mentioned some poets who've found the beat in meter, and possibly something about Pushkine and Schrodinger. I'll keep you(dear reader) updated.

PS: I liked this image from Rubyslipper: "we create shiny mosaics of our desire."
 
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a poet to watch

in my opinion, is Hurrealism http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1040745&page=submissions. I've been here so long I have forgotten how to parse an http.....

anyway, I see that she has been recommended in the post above me and I want to second this.

Not only does she have an outstanding vocabulary, she actually understands meter and rhyme, has an innate feel for poetic flow.

Anyone who hasn't read her, should.

Give her a minute, click and read, you won't be sorry.

;)
 
Wednesday's New Poems

Midnight Speed -
Submitted by WickedEve not her best, but well worth reading, specially the last stanza.

Riddle me Ree -
Submitted by UnderYourSpell (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/24/09 okay I hate riddles too. But BUT this poem is fun even if it isn't a riddle, so read on and UYS, write on! This was fun!


Magpies -
Submitted by Sapphos Sister (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/24/09
This is a bittersweet poem. I usually do not take to rhyme, but it really works here. Very satisfying read.

go on read em if you got em. Or write em if you got em? Neither of those sayings really makes sense, nor does my pokemon av. I don't get it. Who put that there?
 
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Thursday's Summer Fare

There are several poems I enjoyed today, many are poetry survivor challenge poems:

Pushkine's syllable split title Sum mar Un per fect Tri o let is a clever little poem.

greenmountaineer goes back to a while ago with School Bus Blues has some technical problems in my opinion, but gets itsmessgae across.

vrosej10 offers http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=427161,

while lilygurl678 has a couple survivor entries.

My favorite erotic entry is Texture of Darkness

Enjoy - its almost tomorrow
 
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Friday & Saturday

Still lacking a full time Friday reviewer so I'll take a look-see. I already read one that would be absolutely criminal not to mention.

Tah-da! All kindsa new poems for you.

First from Friday is Copacetic Persuasion by Tristesse and I think it's a truly wonderful piece- smoldering, sensuous, inching along towards release. Just, so good.
I heard sounds when I read this, it was so potent. Small sounds, sighs, soft words, lips murmuring. I love the line breaks as well and think they add to the slow, deliberate pacing of the poem. You're meant to slow down to read it, really feel what's going on, see it, hear it. Just delicious.
Great job, Tess.

We also have For George by rubyslipper. I know I won't be able to think of the right way to describe this poem, but I can say its delivery is like meandering molasses. You can see the river, the people, what's going on- hear what's going on. I experienced this poem much the same way I experienced Copacetic Persuasion. Even the words she chose leave the tongue at a slower rate than normal. A fine little piece.

Pecking Order by Normal Jean is wit touched with sadness. Smart, true and concise. I also love the title.

My pretentious little blue B of the day goes to Sir Ponders His Scourge by Pushkine. It is, simply put, an excellent poem. Wryly confessional but still at arms-length, and smart- oh yes smart. As they always are. The conversational tone of the piece is enticing- like we get a voyeur's look at the Master talking to himself.

The middle stanza,

Her heart's not hurt, in my control.
Submission works; it makes her whole
(and charms my fickle body part)


is especially potent for me, because that is how I view the power play of such situations. It's easy for some people to say that it's merely a game of alpha dog but, as has been said in so many ways before, that is simply not the case. Each partner is getting what they need. Almost as if the passion is what's fueling the game, but is not a participant. In its presence it's allowed to become a passive character- and both need and lust are able to be the aggressors.

Also worth reading are Street Show- A Comic Villanelle and The Dead Fawn by Sappho's Sister, Rain #1 by vjrose, and Zero-Gravity Tea Ceremony by Annie- if for no other reason than the title is just fanfuckingtastic and she is swell poet.
 
Monday FUNday

I'm gonna review today cuz I liked a bunch of the titles.

Pushkine has "faith" yester-sunday:

Because
Your arms are fit,
Taut as at seventeen,
God will say nothing of those breasts
I clutch.

Someone tell me what poem it reminds me of, I can't quite place the fond reminisce...

Wickedeve "Caring for a Long Woman" is ballad of a thin man fun to read:

He strikes her

with ellwands, until her arms
stretch farther, reaching
toward him. He cares
for a long woman.

What is an ellwand? I'm not gonna even look it up, someone tell me in 'to keep the review...'

Last stanza of Greenmountaineer is newsworthy, I'm gonna go look it up.

SweetOblivion has the best first line of the day: "If each kiss I give you, carves a sonnet" and the poem has bright spots, but there are bits that are too dated for my tastes.

I have a question for DavisDoll04, in the lines "The Lords and Ladies, Knights and Knaves,/
The Gentry" could you define 'knave' as a gentry title?

nsara describes "kates bosom" I didn't quite read all six lines but from what I skimmed it looked interesting. If it was about Keats' bosom I may have read every line.

I liked the first thirteen words of MrLJM's "Lie soft and waiting..."

I already knew Victoria Lucas was going to write a good poem when I saw her name on the board. I read it and it is worth recommending for the sounds -- the first three stanza's are spot on but the fourth and fifth sort of lose the beat.

I missed some from yesterday and skipped over some form poems today, maybe someone can pick up the slack.

Off topic shout out to M. Jackson for writing every word of some of his biggest hits. Not exactly poetry, but try finding a current top-40 pop single where the artist has sole publishing credit.
 
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I can't do reviews for today. Can't.
OK, don't then. I will:
Kind of a tiring day with the New Poems, I think. Perhaps I'm just jaded. Could be an age thing, y'know.

  • Western Lady by Boxlicker101 seems to be a limerick, and a mildly funny one, at that. Meter's off a bit, but not too badly. Worth a read, in my opinion.
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  • UnderYourSpell writes a "limerick," Google it! that makes mock of the metrical form of the limerick by using a really, really long Welsh name. It's funny, though, so jake with me.
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  • My favorite poetic phrase today has to be "they righted a lot of wrorns."

    I myself have not had a lot of success righting wrorns, but wrorns are such devilish nasty things. One never can quite tell if they're righted or not.
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Anna would almost certainly have been nicer in her review. Sorry. Perhaps you might want to baby sit for her next week if that bothers you.

Peace out, Folkies.
 
UnderYourSpell tries to catch up with Pushkine

Both Pushkine and UnderYourSpell are on the 2nd lap of the Poetry Survivor Challenge. Each has a couple of nice little little entries for Thursday.
They're my favorites for today:

My questing tongue highlights the multiple pleasures of chocolate.
In like Flynn is a cute Clerihew

Linear Bounded Automata and For Richard Dawkins both get you to thinking.

There are also a few regretful remembrances about love. I have my own issues there so my emotions may come forward too much.

saved and sexy was an amusing read.

There are a couple of more explicit poems
and the secret of Secret Place remains a mystery to me.

Happy 4th all you USA Americans !
 
A few fireworks

Recommendations for both Friday and Saturday.
Quite a few poems, especially yesterday. Some were duds for me, but several others definitely worth reading.

Our Charnel Grounds by greenmountaineer I found the most thought-provoking.

I found My Sunflower by lillygurl678 the most inspiring of the lot.
Looks like her poem for the Survivor monthly challenge. (finishing up my sonnet for that).

There are some other nice Survivor poems:
UnderYourSpell gives us Cause and Effect so short there's no good excuse to skip it, and Tribulations of a Maiden Chaste, 2nd chastity belt poem this week.

champagne1982 shows us how dust sees things in Dusting Sure Stirs Motes Up

I also recommend Sonnet: To His Mistress by Sapphos Sister, with a nice mix of celestial and human imagery and
The Ballad of Jacaranda and Flame by vrosej10

Take a look, sure to be some worth your while.
 
Sunday's Recommendations

There are 16 New Poems today. As limericks go, Nicki by Boxlicker 101 is sound, smirky fun. EroticOrogeny has an interesting exercise in alliteration in Vegas View. The emphasis on this device is overwhelming, but then, so is Vegas, I gather. If you are a sucker for sonics, this may be a satisfying read for you. I also enjoyed Senryu #5 (I am a sucker for senryu).
 
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mon and possibly tues

100% Black Beauty from ButterKreme is worth a read just to ponder whether it's satire, or true artistic expression of genuine human perception of self. http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=429293

RubbySlipper may have went a bit too far into the surreal, I've no idea what "Odium" is about.

EO grants us a Shakey re-write, there have been a few of these in the last week, I think Sapphos sister did a few.

Dancerinthedark may have written the most interesting poem of the last week or so, "Necrosis" reads just like an EroticOrogeny and hmmnmm mix, mongrel, spotless hybrid:

She, the carapace;
the canticle, the tabernacle.
She, the demagogue;
Her mutiny murls
their derelict demurs.
She defers drumbeaters
with sacristan stares,

It's probably better as spoken word, but I'm sure we'll manage to get by on text alone. http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=429208

Someone used the word "sensate" correctly. One day I hope to link within these transmissions, imagine knowing what I'm referring to as you read? Novel idea.

Cat call to Hotwetcherry for writing a self-titled poem, don't think I've seen that done before.

I liked the first three lines of Dancerinthedark's other poem "ladylike"

Wife2hotblk sounds like she's growing older in her poetry with audio submission.

I'm not gonna ever mention a limerick again.

sapphosSister received an immediate H for her effort in "Bastards!" I liked the poem and told her already and so did most of the people who read this, as far as I can tell, so why am I still writing...side note, KOTK and MANcelt have both returned from the dead within her submission.

MRLJM, a prospective member of my new found street/forest gang, submitted "The man and the Crown" and I was disappointed. It's not on par with his last handful of submissions and I recommend the curious go and read those ones instead. Maybe you(yes you!) will read "the man and the crown" and have a different opinon than my own, I recommend you re-recommend his submission then. http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1110903&page=submissions

Johnboy has a few poems over the last few days. If you liked being bummed out about life you might go and check them out.
 
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Thurs (and a little Wed)

There's quite a few poems today. No one did yesterday, so I'll mention a couple of those as well.

In no particular order here are my recommendations:

LoveIsAllYouNeed is a new member and has a couple of 'Haiku Stories' (his term, not mine, but I'd agree). Interesting and quick reads: A Kiss and Bast

Both Tristess2, with Poetic Chic-anery and Sappos Sister (Why Some Poems Don't Make It! , from yesterday) have amusing poems about poetry. Well worth a read.

Twelveoone offers Grim Visage.

SweetOblivion provides us with quiet erotic Eloquence

Sappos Sister also has a couple of amusing erotic poems in When Your Loved One Is A Screamer and some whimsy in Four Brief Amusements

Hmmnmm has 3 poems today. I think slide is the best of the 3.

A couple of prosy poems and a few others you may want to read. Anon found a couple of them to his liking - maybe you will too.
 
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Saturn'sDay Sun'sDay Moon'sDay

I actually wrote this entire review and it got lost. It was inciteful, sweet, sincere. Now I'm going to have to be lazy about it and not post any links. If you don't know where the New Poems page is, or just have any general questions about dolphins and marine mammals--send a PM to SennaJawa.

Hmmnmm has "tree at rest" which I read once and didn't understand, but he posted an explanation in the "To keep the review thread omniscent" thread, and when I re-read I found the story, and it is worth reading. I just didn't get the last line on the second read through.

NaughtyLane has some good lines in "First Time" "Seafaring" and "Night Glow"

SexyPussyCat has a poem called "I smile" which is a rhymer, I recommend she read my poem "Hello" because I think we share similar ideas. Good Job, SPC, we're buds now.

Vrosej10 in "Darker Yet" talks of dark things, I actually misread the poem first time around and she set me straight about it. I recommend reading it, of course.

SapphosSister has an erotic poem "Amuse Bouche" which I already commented on, I recommend you read it, it's a dialogue type of deal.

Loveisallyouneed, has a bunch of Haiku groupings in the form of stories. "Stag and Doe" is the best, I've already commented on that, it's about a Stag named Taft going after a girl named Hartley...not really, I'm just a trickster, go and read it. Haiku is dead to me, but using Haiku as stanza form to tell a story is neato. I even did one last week in Haiku thread. Go read that too if you want.

Enchantress has a few poems posted. They aren't so much about love and flowers as home foreclosure and suicide. I, speaking for the literotica poets, have to ask you not to hurt yourself. Whether you're sincere or not, we'd rather you sought out the help you need to keep writing poems. The last poem you posted has an "else" in the last line that can be dropped, but it reminds me of a brilliant poem by dorothy parker that many know and love, so good job.

PhaonsBrother has two from the other day, "He Recites her Breviary" and "Bodily", the former is my favorite of the two, but the latter has some nice use of obscure words. I recommend reading and re-reading "He recites". Phaon and Sappho, I read A. Pope too you sneaky internet people.

Live4Passion has a fantastic poem "About the Storm" that I recommend everyone read.

Underyourveryspell has a couple, a survivor triolet that I like, one from the other day, and a "winters thrall" that ends with a nice cataract line. I swear I said more about your poems in the last version of this review, but the computer ate it. Good game, pat on the butt, keep it up.

Erotic O has "Memory Triggers" which I didn't think I'd like because of the repetition, but it's quite ingenious and I enjoyed it. So go ahead.

PhaonsBrother has two more today, "Sappho Slept" which is my favorite thing written on this site since the last thing CorinnaParr wrote(come back, dear, the boys are asking for you) and "Heavenward" which uses my current favorite word pairing, 'Borne' and 'Heavenward'

PhaonsSapphosBrotherSisterLoverMother have inspired me to begin writing again in earnest, so I thank them. That's how it works, we aren't inspired and cease writing then someone or something comes along and it's a kick in the pants and suddenly I have this desire to post a better poem than what I've posted before. I hope they don't disappear like so many others, off into sweetoblivion, because I'd like to compete with them, if only in my head.

etc etc etc I'm not in charge of anything, just want you(yes you!) to go and read and comment on the New Poems page, because some of these poems are well worth your internet time. Quit wanking to stories and hop on the lorry over to New Poems...err, ran out of rhymes. By the way, I'm not in charge of anything and you can review or recommend poems here if you want and undo all that I've done.
 
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There are not that many new poems today—only seven so far, though more may show up later—but I quite liked several of them. So I'm going to bore you by talking about them.
  • I find bflagsst's "Messianic In Her Means interesting, though a little difficult. Difficult isn't necessarily bad, though. It's just, well, difficult. The poem is broken into four sections, each of which speaks to, or of, a friend or lover whose influence on the Narrator is the stuff of the poem.

    I've read the poem several times and, while I like it (or at least find it interesting), there are some things that bug me about it. The alliteration in the first section seems overdone to the point that I stop paying attention to the meaning of the words and hear the sound too much—it ends up being something of a distraction to me. The other problem for me is that the poem is perhaps too intellectualized; it talks rather than invokes imagery, which is OK in my book (better be, since I do it all the time) but not as strong a technique as creating a picture of what I'm supposed to see or feel or know.

    There also is the point that the first three sections are in second person and the final one in third person, but I assume that is deliberate, though puzzling. The last section, though
    She ornaments
    every potential perch,
    however precarious​
    is quite lovely.

    Worth your time. Check it out.
  • "Epitaph of a Late Conversation" by PhaonsBrother is a dramatic dialogue that is a (presumably imagined) riff off a line in a poem by Sapphos Sister, "The Elopement," which I'll get to next. "Epitaph" (obnoxious aside—should it perhaps be "Epitaph for a Late Conversation?"), like the poem it is a response to, has a retro feel to it: formal tone, odd and unusual words (insufflate, wrying), distanced narrative. The result is a poem that seems a bit like prying into a private conversation, but it all works, for me, anyway.

    I know. Hardly an articulate comment, but I liked this a lot.

    It's just a recommendation, y'know.
  • "The Elopement," the poem by Sapphos Sister that Phaon's poem references, is even more retro stylistically—to the point that it sounds more like a Coleridge narrative poem than something contemporary.

    Normally that is a bad thing. But SS has, at least to my ear, a considerable talent at writing "old style" verse that is not only not irritating, but quite pleasing. The poem flows well, the rhythm (podic, I think) is smooth and seductive, and the whole thing is very satisfying.

    Oh. This poem was posted yesterday. Not that that matters, but just to clarify.

    Read it. Better yet, read it and think about how she does the rhythm. You'll learn something.
  • "I've often wondered" by Many Feathers is not a profound poem, nor is it trying to be ("Such are the thoughts of a silly assed man"). But it is kind of weirdly funny with its sometimes psychedelic imagery and frat boy attitude
    I've often wondered what it might be like
    To stick my dick in the sand.
    To finger a puffer fish, watch it blow up
    Or masturbate with an Oyster instead of my hand.​
    Strange, but funny.
  • "Id and Ego Try to Trick Super Ego" by greenmountaineer is another kind of trippy poem that has some weird, but cool, imagery. The first strophe is excellent
    Let's find pretty women, the three of us,
    After dark on the beach at Fort Lauderdale
    But leave your prayer rope behind for a day.​
    and while the rest of the poem doesn't quite measure up to the start, it's an excellent effort.

    I'm jealous, anyway, for what that's worth.
Hey. You guys might like something else. Go read the poems and see.

Urk.
 
Friday


I guess there are only seven or eight new poems today. Bill Dada, Lebroz, don't take this appearance to heart. I would still like both of you to re-join our dying community and will promise to chain myself to a tree or get a TV show about saving the whales and feel real self-righteous about it. Anyone see that whale wars show? Those people act like they're doing the most important thing on the planet, makes me almost wanna root for the Japanese. I should probably talk about poems now.

Lawrobbur has brought us one of the worst rhyme schemes I've ever seen:

i love teasing you
and playing sex games
you wnat to touch my pussy
but you can't, ain't that ashame

Now read a stanza from SapphosFavoriteSister:

So this is how I see the joys
Of Love bestowed by girls and boys
Since beauty’s beauty, nonetheless,
However it may choose to dress.

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And that is an education for the youth of America. I say use these two examples as core curriculum for tenth grade English across the country. Other than that I thought SS's poetry was a little less rich than usual. I commented that there was too much repetition, I liked her poem from yesterday much better.

I enjoy poems with neediness and wetness, Pushkine came out of the pool with "Conversations While Drowning" Go read.

This is crude, but I'm curious. Does HobbyHorseman ejaculate into his coffee in his poem "Phone Call from a ghost" after phone sex?

So that's the slim pickings for today, I'm back to my hunger strike...starting now.
 
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Saturday

Hi, everyone.
Please accept my apologies for not having reviewed the last few Saturdays. One of my friends is getting married and I've been caught in a world of wedding crap. I'm the Maid of Honor (terrifying, if you know me- I am so not that kinda girly), and I'm doing my level best to ensure that she'll regret having asked me to be so. :D
Yesterday was the shower so hopefully I'll be mostly off the hook until the end of August.

There were a ton of Saturday poems. Holy effing mother of mercy. I think 24, or some such number.

So here's my take.

Lawrobbur's Viagra vs. Cialis made me realize something. Specifically during this bit:

i'm like milk
i do the body good
if you haven't checked my work
i'm thinking that you should


She should totally have a cock.
Even if all of her writings, etc, are sexual bravado and she's really some shrinking old woman in Leeds, England that used to be 5'2 and is now 4'11 and a half with ten pet mice and a fish n' chip dinner every night followed by a nightcap of sherry...this woman needs a goddamn cock. I'm just gonna say it. Cos then she could fuck the world. Not that she doesn't try right now, but it loses its potency somewhat when it's a pussy trying to fuck the world instead of a cock.
With a cock you get to stick it to 'em however, wherever. There's machine gun hip thrusting, bullets of cum flying out wherever you, the Cockmaster, deem fitting.
Yeah. This chick needs a cock.

DreamyLeer's Ladylily was enjoyable as well, though the funny thing is that as I read it I couldn't stop feeling as though it would work really well as song lyrics. It had a weaving musical flow rather than the "paused moment" flow that poetry usually embodies. It's in the breathing. The places where you catch your breath are different in lyrics.
The whole poem is intriguing and a little bit sad, bitterly wistful with the hard edged voice of someone who feels they're on the other side of the bridge.
The first stanza in particular was supremely enjoyable to me in rhythm, flow, wording and wit.

Emily by Keroin is also a solid little piece. I enjoyed the circular wordplay, and the descriptors were just colored enough to give us a picture.

We also have The Power of a Woman by a new writer named Chempards, and let me tell you: it was GOOD. Downright arousing. In fact, I'm gonna give it my verging-on-pretentious, Hmmnmm-inspired, little blue B of the day (I love that Anna does that too. Such a tasty woman she is. 'Cept, she doesn't use the B. Heh).
I enjoyed this poem a lot, probably because it encapsulates that feeling of saturation your skin gets during seduction- your flesh is heavy but your insides are light and fluttery; the sensations almost overwhelm you to the point of oblivion. You're so far from being able to make a move yourself that all you can do is melt into that person and allow them entry.
It leads you, as a seduction does, into unexplored corners.
So yeah, that's what I dig about the poem. ;)
I look forward to reading more from her.

Not As Unique by bflagsst is an interesting little pocket of a poem, though I have an unsettled feeling when I read it. Like it's not done yet and my eyes keep looking for the rest of the sentences. Still, the concept is one that catches on a corner of your brain and I like pondering things like that. Go check it out and see what you think.

The Pond by LoveIsAllYouNeed is a nice little snapshot of nature. The line, "The turtle recedes" stays stuck in my head for some reason, as does "Fragrance draws the butterfly to sip her nectar." It's very much a dip-your-toe-in-the-water kind of poem. Slow and deliberate, feeling the temperature. Tinged with melancholy, as though the world is sliding by without him sliding along with it.
Also check out Who Wants to be Human Anyway? by this author.


And there you have it.
Thank you to those who submit. :rose:
 
And one more thing!

I know Epmd already charged you to go read Conversation While Drowning by Pushkine, but in case you were tempted to buck his request I'm going to go ahead and implore you again because that poem is friggin' good. I just left what is probably a completely embarrassingly long comment on it, so admiring am I. :D

For some reason I really connect with the way Pushkine thinks, and then forms thoughts into poems. They just make sense to me, which is something different from mere reading comprehension (at least in my world). He gives us offerings we can burrow into and I really like that. He's also da bomb-diggity at poem titles and I will admit that his titles have, on more than one occasion, given me girly-sproing. Except for other rare occurrences, he's the only person who does this to me on a regular basis besides my dear friend, Hmmnmm.

So yeah. Read it. I dares ya.
 
Quick Tuesday Review

There are only a few new poems today. My favorites are:

Sonnet, for My Ilsa in the East by Pushkine, a nice love remembered sonnet.

The Poem Catcher by SapphosSister is another poem about poetry (we seem to have quite a few lately) and employs a clever metaphor.

Knights of the Temple by UnderYourSpell is our first first entry for our latest Survivor Challenge, hers an Epic about the Knights Templar (there's a little more talk at the summer poolside thread)

The other poems are worth a read as well, all erotic, but no blow-by-blow sexploit story
 
Thurs and Wed

Quick poetry highlights for today (Thursday & my son's birthday) and yesterday:

Just a few today. I liked Senyru #6 (vrosej10; title a bit lacking) and Coursing Vessle (wantedone)

Several for Wed, with my favorites:
A Maiden's Lament
by UnderYourSpell is fun, along with her Which foot do you hop on?. She seems to be gaining on Pushkine, who has a nice love poem in Romantic Comedy
greenmountineer is a bit more serious with Thomas Returns to Omaha Beach.
Bill Dada has Times Whatever, and I like 8scoops Lifecycle

Sorry had to be a bit hasty.
 
Saturday

There were only a few offerings yesterday, and I would even go so far as to say that for the most part it was a day of sweetly crafted and not entirely bad poems. A few were very good.

Once again we have offerings from two of my admirees (yes, I made up another word, ho hum): Pushkine and vjrose.

Our delectable skewed beast, Mr. P has offered the poem Y for today and I can't quite decide what a like better: his poem or Rosie's comment on it.
It's simply a lovely way to perv. Concise, witty; the kind of charm you feel coming from lidded eyes. Lucky thighs. :D

Our lovely Aussie Ms. Rose has submitted a poem called Requiem for the Green, a bittersweet piece about nature, destruction we have no control over, and saying goodbye, in a way.
She includes these lines:

It [the mango tree] knew me when I was young and I never noticed,
But it was my witness.


And I love the idea of being watched over in a way. By things we take for granted. Until we're ready to notice them. Even from childhood, perhaps. It's sweet and sad.

Epiphany65 submitted a poem called 4th Street, Positively, which starts out really pretty well, descriptive and interesting:

my words poured out
like hot coffee
she drank them,
then asked for a refill


But the last three lines of the poem stump me. I don't know whether I'm being a daft thing or what but it was almost like switching the TV channel right at the end of a movie. I understand the sentiment, I just don't understand how it was worded. Otherwise, a fine effort.

DeepGreenEyes wrote a poem called Use Your Mouth and even though it could read a little gimmicky at first, I really quite enjoyed it; the turnaround in perspective, the clipped and tidy phrasing. I might add a comma here or there but on the whole I liked it.

That's it. Sorry to be late again. Must finish up a few things and tend a headache. Thank you everyone for submitting.
 
Sunday New Poems Recommendations

Twelve new poems today. Of those, I enjoyed playfulnymph's why is it, even though the images were quite expected. At least they were concrete. The poem contrasts two sorts of lovemaking and posits the question why is it that sometimes one sort of touch is needed and sometimes another. Sweet Oblivion has a catchy little sonnet in Secret Feelings, though I'd caution her/him to avoid reversals like "vigour bold." Still, I enjoyed the story and ear of the poem, and had my attention caught by the initial line, "The gusset of her knickers is quite damp".
I also enjoyed the wistfulness of f-cynyr's Touching Your Hips (this is the one I preferred of the two poems of this writer's posted today). Otherwise, there are some other poems, some doggeral, some doggy-style. See what you think.
 
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Monday, July 27, 2009

Fourteen new poems today. Here's a short list of my recommendations for today.

I loved the unique subject matter of Questions for a Bounty Hunter by HRKW, a new, prolific poet at Lit. There are other poems by HRKW posted today, but she has elected not to receive comments on those, but I still recommend them.

Friday's Fish by Victoria_Lucas is my other pick for today. It's concise, yet insightful.



Happy reading.
 
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Fourteen new poems today. Here's a short list of my recommendations for today.

I loved the unique subject matter of Questions for a Bounty Hunter by HRKW, a new, prolific poet at Lit. There are other poems by HRKW posted today, but she has elected not to receive comments on those, but I still recommend them.

Friday's Fish by Victoria_Lucas is my other pick for today. It's concise, yet insightful.



Happy reading.

I agree. Both excellent poems. I particularly like "Questions for a Bounty Hunter" because of the unique subject matter.
 
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