Please Read The Letter That I Wrote: Voting Thread

Select your favorite of these three

  • 1

    Votes: 12 75.0%
  • 2

    Votes: 3 18.8%
  • 3

    Votes: 1 6.3%

  • Total voters
    16
  • Poll closed .

annaswirls

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Please read all three poems and vote for your favorite. Guidelines for the contest were here:

After the voting is over (5 days) anyone who wrote a letter poem but did not want to submit it can post here for kicks.





#1 Please Read The Letter That I Wrote

Please read the letter that I wrote
but never sent,
a murmur from an empty envelope,
two dollars spent
par avion express to let you know:
Though words are trapped inside my pen
there is still hope.

And one day you will tear
a flood out from this bone dry fold,
one day words will come again,
I have been told.
But until then...
this vacuum spells itself: Hello.
At least hello.

Two dollars spent par avion
to mark a not yet dreamt up quote:
Please read the letter that I sent
but never wrote.



#2 Please read the letter that I wrote

If you are delivering to the end of my road
will it be too much of an inconvenience to
include my package?
I know the state of the packing will not be
to you standard but the imperfections
are not of my own making.
Time has raddled the wrapping
and rounded the corners, as it bounced
around the world, seeking it's
true address.
Seek amongst the 'Returned to Sender' stickers
for a name originally annotated in pencil
written by a hand at that time young
and inexperienced.
The letters rounded in a childish hand,
fully expecting a swift delivery
much in the way of requests soaring
through the chimney smoke at Christmas.
But as you see for all it's discrepancies
the package remains virtually intact,
but needs to be delivered soon
or the contents will spill.

I await your reply and hopefully my delivery
finally to Cemetery Road.



#3 Please Read the Letter that I Wrote

To my two true loves,
neither knows the other nor know the nature of my needs,
how my heart holds you hidden, a hopeless history, a happy health.
My first –fears forced my fond feelings to fall fallow,
my only, we own our opulent orgasms.
I shed my shirt, the shaggy show shapes our shared shimmering in shiny sheets.
My lady loves, lustful longings, with one wanting a wonderfully
different development in days done my desire deepened to despair.
My sweetheart spouse, my sole sexual satisfaction, I seek our sensual solution.
Alone and arouse, my amorous ache ardent for you.
No blissful benefits between both babes, my love subjects; not even sex objects.
 
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Dear stranger,
The carrier pigeon
suddenly
died last year
those letters never reached your
lover. I'm sorry.

Your lover
married someone else
and misses
you no more
Please do not despair, because
this board still loves you

:rose:
 
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#1 reads like an AnnieSwirls type of gem, I'd be shocked if she didn't write it. The other poems were nice, but the first is head and shoulders.
 
I suspect with the advent of those two little mots français, one of our Canadian poets has been airmailing...
 
The launch poll had 2 yes votes, 7 maybe and 3 nos. Looks like most maybe's ended up no.
Thought we'd get more than 3.
 
The launch poll had 2 yes votes, 7 maybe and 3 nos. Looks like most maybe's ended up no.
Thought we'd get more than 3.

I lost track of when they were supposed to be submitted. :eek:

But, perhaps I will post here on Tuesday. We'll see.


:cool:
 
Please Read the Letter That I Wrote



I often wonder how I
ever managed to get along with
anyone as well as I did
with you, my dear;

Although that was ages ago,
when I thought forever and ever
actually meant something
to you, my dear,

read it, please

Everyone always tells me
how well I handle words,
both scripted and off
the cuff,

But I can't seem to wrap
my head around such things,
my words--my feelings--never
seem enough.

I wrote it for you

Yeah, it's treacly,
perhaps even sappy,
but I tried to make it
say everything at once.

So, finish it all, it
might make you happy,
or, at least, make you
consider us more than twice.

it's waiting for you
-----
:cool:
 
Please Read the Letter That I Wrote



I often wonder how I
ever managed to get along with
anyone as well as I did
with you, my dear;

Although that was ages ago,
when I thought forever and ever
actually meant something
to you, my dear,

read it, please

Everyone always tells me
how well I handle words,
both scripted and off
the cuff,

But I can't seem to wrap
my head around such things,
my words--my feelings--never
seem enough.

I wrote it for you

Yeah, it's treacly,
perhaps even sappy,
but I tried to make it
say everything at once.

So, finish it all, it
might make you happy,
or, at least, make you
consider us more than twice.

it's waiting for you
-----
:cool:

Quality poem, remec. Hey, do you know what ever happened to AverageGina?
 
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Congratulations to the three contestants! All of these poems were bravely presented for the judgement! Congratulations for putting yourself out there for us to read, enjoy and make the difficult choice of "favorite." As you can see, there was something for everyone, while Liar had an appeal for most.

Congratulations! I wish I had a prize. Hmm. I would offer to blow a kiss over the ocean but that would sound pretentious.... let me know if there is something I can do. :)

Be well and keep on writing!


#1 Please Read The Letter That I Wrote
Liar

Please read the letter that I wrote
but never sent,
a murmur from an empty envelope,
two dollars spent
par avion express to let you know:
Though words are trapped inside my pen
there is still hope.

And one day you will tear
a flood out from this bone dry fold,
one day words will come again,
I have been told.
But until then...
this vacuum spells itself: Hello.
At least hello.

Two dollars spent par avion
to mark a not yet dreamt up quote:
Please read the letter that I sent
but never wrote.



#2 Please read the letter that I wrote
Under Your Spell

If you are delivering to the end of my road
will it be too much of an inconvenience to
include my package?
I know the state of the packing will not be
to you standard but the imperfections
are not of my own making.
Time has raddled the wrapping
and rounded the corners, as it bounced
around the world, seeking it's
true address.
Seek amongst the 'Returned to Sender' stickers
for a name originally annotated in pencil
written by a hand at that time young
and inexperienced.
The letters rounded in a childish hand,
fully expecting a swift delivery
much in the way of requests soaring
through the chimney smoke at Christmas.
But as you see for all it's discrepancies
the package remains virtually intact,
but needs to be delivered soon
or the contents will spill.

I await your reply and hopefully my delivery
finally to Cemetery Road.



#3 Please Read the Letter that I Wrote
EroticOrogeny
To my two true loves,
neither knows the other nor know the nature of my needs,
how my heart holds you hidden, a hopeless history, a happy health.
My first –fears forced my fond feelings to fall fallow,
my only, we own our opulent orgasms.
I shed my shirt, the shaggy show shapes our shared shimmering in shiny sheets.
My lady loves, lustful longings, with one wanting a wonderfully
different development in days done my desire deepened to despair.
My sweetheart spouse, my sole sexual satisfaction, I seek our sensual solution.
Alone and arouse, my amorous ache ardent for you.
No blissful benefits between both babes, my love subjects; not even sex objects.[/QUOTE]
 
I tried figuring out who wrote each poem, I wouldn't have guessed Liar cuz I'm not familiar with his work for some reason. I had the second narrowed down, UnderYourSpell was one of three I was thinking of, EO's poem was easy cuz he does the alliteration. I still don't really understand the challenge, but all the poems were good.
 
Aha now is that a good or bad thing that I am so easy to suss out? Perhaps I stay in a comfort zone too much
 
Aha now is that a good or bad thing that I am so easy to suss out? Perhaps I stay in a comfort zone too much

Comfort zones make good poets, if you can find a way of writing that comes easy you can express what you want when you want.
 
Well maybe, when I first came here everything rhymed and the ladies here shoved me gently but firmly out of that comfort zone. I still like the form poetry (or some of it) but I have learned some other stuff as well which isn't a bad thing.
 
I thought I might be easy to guess. My poem didn't come off as well as I hoped- had to throw it over the wall to meet the deadline. I may return to it sometime later - both women are significant in what goes on between my ears.
And I threw in a bit about sex objects vs love subjects which I just came up with.
I was glad to see I got a vote (not mine).
 
Well maybe, when I first came here everything rhymed and the ladies here shoved me gently but firmly out of that comfort zone. I still like the form poetry (or some of it) but I have learned some other stuff as well which isn't a bad thing.
THere's a difference between a comfort zone, which is something you're IN and a signature, which is something you HAVE. I also had a hunch that #2 was one of yours. Not because it's a specific genre or style, but because you put your own mark on it. A certain pace, type of phrasing, and choice of topics that gives it identity. And that's definitely not a bad thing.

The most interresting artist makes different genres fit THEIR style. Even if it chafes.

The least interresting artist is the competent chameleon who blends in with the white noise.
 
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