New Poetry Recommendations

[Tzara]

Friday. Recommending.

Hey, y'all. Read greenmountaineer's Witch Mountain Meadow, which is a wonderful poem. Makes me way effing jealous, actually.

So read it. Yes, you.

Now.

 

[loganforester]

Sunday's Recommendations

Well since I missed my last appointed date, I guess I should put in a little extra effort this time around.

There are 12 new poems today, so check them out.

My pick for favorite of the day goes to Tiger, Tiger by Amicus. It's a bit of a strange poem to read and the their are a few structural issues with it, but it's worth a read just from the images it conjures up.


He is upon me between breath and breath

I am borne down, my coming death

I smell and feel his teeth in my neck

hot wet fluid on my neck

I push up and away with arms too weak

Too strong, too strong, so wrong

I feel sharp pain below, I am torn

I feel a mortal snap of bone

so alone, so all alone…

If you're in the mood for some light humor with your poetry, then I recommend you check out lisa's coochie cafe by lawrobbur. Nothing special about it except it make me chuckle.

My final recommendation for the day is Someone sweeter than you are by bflagsst. This is a short and somewhat complex poem, do yourself a favor and give it a once over, or maybe two or three times over.

Otherwise, their are some other decent ones, but why not read them all and decide for yourself.

 

[bluebell]

Saturday

Late again, me oh my. I am sorry. I fear the lateness is in my genetic programming and will never really go away.

Anyway, on to Saturday. Like, actually Saturday this time. Not Sunday like I did last week when Dora so kindly corrected my ass. Sheesh, Bluebs.
I told her: I look at the calendar and everything- and I STILL messed up! :dunce:

There were some very interesting submissions. Kinda kooky. Made me smile and wiggle my eyebrows and do all sorts of things.

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Going from the bottom up, first comes Citric Limerick by Birds_Eye. It's a little wonky and the writing isn't completely smooth all the way (the rhyming is a bit herky-jerky in a few places), but it did make me giggle and I think that was rather its point. Like drinking wine that's not bad, but not exquisite either. You still get a decent, giddy buzz. Nothing to be ashamed of. The first stanza is particularly good, I think.

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Next is Ms. Parr with Vault of Heaven, which, in hands like hers, is one of those poems I can't really find fault with. It's compact and well-written. Like eating one of each color of Starburst candies and saving the yummy pink one for last.
My favorite lines are:

Oh, clever artist.
Turn your nails up
score the sky;

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We also have a submission from Cal called The Bloated Lotus and Other Poems, which was a very good work. It was tinged with a different kind of sadness I haven't seen yet in Cal's writing.
My favorite poem:

WINGED CAT

The winged cat
Grinning beside
The Sphinx
Reminds me of you
And your Cheshire
Grin when you let me
Catch you with her
Beside you, naked
And full
To overflowing
With the seed of you.

I believe melancholy is struck, and is being stared at. What to do with it?
This one in particular, as I said, resonated.

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My very favorite poem of the day is Zephyr by Firebrain. To start off, Firebrain is perhaps the coolest handle I've seen in a very long time (save for those inhabited by the inimitable Mr. Tz) and I must bow down to her for her biographical snippet: Not very tolerant or patient. Addictive personality. Dislikes textspeak. Likes to bake

I lol'd.

Oh, oops.
(Sorry darling, I couldn't help myself!)

She is a new member and started out with what I think is a slamtastic home run. And that is where my baseball analogy will end as I truly have nothing left to offer by way of baseball comparisons. If I were offering a tennis analogy it would be a different story, but I'm not and so I will shut up about it now.

So, Zephyr rhymes and everything. And you all know how I feel about rhyming. It is rare that someone comes along to convince me of a rhymed work, but I find this one to be enchanting, smart, sad, pensive, and- if I can get away with this, almost reminiscent of Keats to me.
It's not dry, it's not brittle, it uses excellent words, it flows, it touches the heart. It's just smart.
Here is one of my favorite stanzas:

In the night, dark and sticky
A vision lies with me
An hourglass that wears a sly smile;
As she writhes, tether-spun
As she weaves; she's undone
As she falls...she is mine to beguile.

Reading this poem was like tripping; falling over into a patch of soft spring grass while walking at night. You lie there for a moment, a soft breeze stirs and brings the scent of lilacs to you, triggering memories of your mother- whom you miss very much. It's both a sweet and sad moment.


I'm gonna stop talking now.

 

[LadynStFreknBed]

Monday, June 01, 2009

There are 8 new poems today.

I drift by jayce1066 has some nice imagery as it takes the reader on a owl's journey. I like the sentence: "Behind my eyelids, I watch a movie." I don't know why I like it so much other than I easily relate to it as a self-soothing technique.

My pick for today is a poem that encourages creative expression, a sentiment dear to my heart. More Poets...please by robert12 effectively expresses the desire to see more people engaged in wordweaving. Give it a read.

Lillygurl678 gives us a triolet called der Feind. It is one of those gems that have stemmed from the Poetry Survivor contest. Well-crafted and intriguing, it is well worth the read.

The other poem from lillygurl678 looks to be an attempt at a ghazal.. and it's a fair attempt, but not quite there. Wandering Eye needs some editing if it is meant to be a ghazal. I apologize profusely if that is not lillygurl678's intent. The rhymes are slightly off and the poem recounts a scene, which would be difficult to do in a ghazal since there can't be enjabment between the stanzas. The missing hyphen is a little annoying, but can be easily fixed.

So there are my picks for today...
Take a moment to indulge in some poetry. Don't forget to read, vote, and comment!

 

[annaswirls]

wed reviews

New Poems:

From Wed:
?

From Tuesday:
let them speak for themselves, Ms Donna Dixon. Such a luscious path unwinds before you.


Lovely Odd with Cat Eye Glasses
by WickedEve©

Rouse Afterchurch
by WickedEve©

Into Seed
by JamesCiriaco© James has two from Tuesday that deserve a read through.

 

[UnderYourSpell]

If you read nothing else please find time to read the Album series of poems by Tristesse2 which are so evocative of a forgotten era. The people of which she writes are drawn so perfectly the sepia pictures awaiting each turn of the page.

 

[Epmd607]

Since Lawrobbur and Exacta make up most of this week's poems, reviewing is pretty easy.

vrosej10 has a quality prose poem named "The Lust Triangle" that I'd prefer in structured stanzas, but I can't get everything I want.

LadynSt has multiple poems this week, my favorite is her most recent:

There once was a toy under cover.
It hummed to the moans of its lover.
After rubbing her clit,
he threw quite a fit
when she tossed him aside to recover.

"The Roses" is another one worth mention, an illustrated poem.

I have one up, but I'm missing some commas, so don't read that one. Bflaggy has three up, "SUSY" and a "Basis for Proceeding" are dynamite. The former is about physics I assume, maybe they both are.

Tristesse's albums have already been mentioned.

CalYpygia has one up recently, very good "Semen Drips"

MissSenses has some spacing issues, but her poem "Keep Still..." is worth a read.

sapphosSister made an appearance. Don't know how I feel about the poem.

There's a zillion more besides for Lawrobbur and Exacta, the form ones I passed over. I don't like the porno poems too much.

 

[Epmd607]

How'd this make it into the poetry bin?

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note to self: exclamation marks
by ellynei©


Exclamation marks in writing are one of three things:

1. Rare
2. Needless
3. A way to convey a meaning in spite of bad writing.
****

Are there any poetic elements? I think it should of been categorized under "How To" on the other side with the deviants. All the rubbish has to be accepted, but this fits better under another category and portion of the site. Too bad there's nowhere to push Lawrobbur and Exakta.

Accepting it as a poem, it's about writing, so we don't really know what exclamation marks in poetry are. This poem is like something your tenth grade English teacher would write on the board before a class while you're filing in for her most mind numbing spark notes lecture on Ethan Frome. Ethan Frome would've been an avid reader of literotica, he a. likes young girls, b. is a cuckold, c. has a Daddy/Daughter fetish.

To keep the review thread clean and pure, vrosej10 has a new poem "Interrupted Cadence". Hmmnmm has returned to the new poetry page. And there's a Pushkine poem up that I don't love, maybe the first. Please don't let this be the review for the day, I like knowing that someone else reads and thinks of the new poems. I can't provide the home they need, maybe a foster care.

 

[Cal Y. Pygia]

Too ignorant?

I guess such poets as these (and many, many others) were too ignorant to know that the use of the trusty exclamation point is “rare, needless,” or “a way to convey a meaning in spite of bad writing”!

Edgar Allan Poe (“Take this kiss upon the brow!”; “How few! yet how they creep/ Through my fingers to the deep,/ While I weep--while I weep!/ O God!; “Yes!, that was the reason (as all men know”; “’Ride, boldly ride,’/ The shade replied,/ ‘If you seek for Eldorado!’”; “Silver bells!/ What a world of merriment their melody foretells!/ How they tinkle, tinkle, tinkle,/ In the icy air of night!”; “Golden bells!/ What a world of happiness their harmony foretells!/ Through the balmy air of night/ How they ring out their delight!”; “Oh, from out the sounding cells/ What a gush of euphony voluminously wells!/ How it swells!. On the Future! how it tells”; “To the rhyming and the chiming of the bells!”)

Samuel Taylor Coleridge (“Tu-whit!--Tu-whoo!”; “The lovely lady, Christabel!”; “Hush, beating heart of Christabel!/ Jesu, Maria, shield her well!”; “’‘Hold off! unhand me, grey-beard loon!’”; “The Sun came up upon the left,/ Out of the sea came he!”; “But oh! that deep romantic chasm which slanted/ Down the green hill athwart a cedarn cover!”; “And all should cry, Beware! Beware! His flashing eyes, his floating hair!”);

Emily Dickinson (“Prithee, my brother,/ Into my garden come!”; “Go traveling with us!”; “Heaven--is what I cannot reach!”; “That--Heaven--is to me!”; There--Paradise--is found!”; “Her teasing Purples--Afternoons--/ The credulous--decoy--/ Enamored--of the Conjuror--/ That spurned us--Yesterday!”; “"Red Sea," indeed! Talk not to me/ Of purple Pharaoh--”; “Remember me" implored the Thief!/”;

Robert Browning (“Setebos, Setebos, and Setebos!”; “Setebos, Setebos, and Setebos!”; “Aha, that is a question!”; “She looked on, and her looks went everywhere./ Sir, 'twas all one!”; “Notice Neptune, though,/ Taming a sea-horse, thought a rarity,/Which Claus of Innsbruck cast in bronze for me!”; “Vanity, saith the preacher, vanity!”; “Nephews, sons mine . . . ah God, I know not!”; “Old Gandolf envied me, so fair she was!”; “He graced his carrion with, God curse the same!”; “Put me where I may look at him!”; “Rosy and flawless: how I earned the prize!” “So much was saved if aught were missed!”

William Wordsworth (“"There!" said a Stripling, pointing with meet pride”; “A poet! He hath put his heart at school”; “Adieu, Rydalian Laurels! that have grown”; “Farewell! no Minstrels now with harp new-strung/ For summer wandering quit their household bowers”; “Ah! where is Palafox? Nor tongue no pen/ Reports of him, his dwelling or his grave!”; “Brave Schill! by death delivered, take thy flight/ From Prussia's timid region”; “Alas! it may not be: for earthly fame/ Is Fortune's frail dependant”; “Fair Prime of life! were it enough to gild/ With ready sunbeams every straggling shower”; “Ah! show that worthier honours are thy due;/ Fair Prime of life!”; “Pure element of waters! wheresoe'er/ Thou dost forsake thy subterranean haunts”)

William Shakespeare (“Cried ‘O false blood, thou register of lies,/ What unapproved witness dost thou bear!/ Ink would have seem’d more black and damned here!’”; “Alack! what poverty my Muse brings forth”; “O! never say that I was false of heart”; “O! from what power hast thou this powerful might”; “Farewell! thou art too dear for my possessing”)

(Always test a critical opinion by the actual work of celebrated writers; if there’s a discrepancy, it will be with the opinion, not the work.)

 

[LadynStFreknBed]

Monday, June 08, 2009

I'm a bit hesitant to do the recommendations for today. It seems like sensitivities and hostilities are running high. In the spirit of "recommendations" instead of "reviews," I'll just point to my favorite new poems from today.

I found Saturn Speaks by Gothickun to be an interesting read.

April is the Cruellest Mouth by pushkine is a well-constructed double dactyl. After struggling through my own, I have respect for anyone who does the form well.

Galatea Goes Back by JamesCiriaco and Galatea Answers by CorinnaParr are two poems well worth the read.

Not to slight any others, but those are my favorites from today's new poems.
Please read and vote or comment. Enjoy!

 

[bflagsst]

Genuine Poetry Reviews!!!!

Pushkine has risen from purgatory with the Greeks in "How Things Are Written on the Wall". I like Pushkine's yesterday poem about TS Eliot, everyone likes TS Eliot for good reason.

RamonaThompson has also returned from limbo with "First Kiss", it actually seems honest, maybe I'm just missing a tongue in a cheek. Good Job, Ramona.

CalYPygia is very rhymey today, I can't read all the poems so I'll mention yesterdays:

Back to the tight cocoon of my dreams!
The ballet dancer in his skin-tight tights!
Maneuvering across the ice!
The comatose woman’s eyes!
Suddenly wide and gasping!
Like twin mouths with lashes in lieu of teeth!
Barracuda feet wet and sleek!
And they can’t wait to pull the (butt) plug on me!

Forgiving the exclamations, there are many quality lines in her/his poem "Lucid Moments".

Laurambell wrote one of the longest poems I've seen on here. I dare someone to read every word in "Round Two".

This is pretty much every Lawrobbur poem in one stanza:

do you enjoy releasing your sperm
on your puggie woman's face
she's eaten everything else
why not give your cum a taste

Boxlicker has graced our side of the literotica with his/her poetry with audio. It's silly, maybe go and read it, download it if you're so inclined.

 

[WickedEve]

bflagsst

This is pretty much every Lawrobbur poem in one stanza:

do you enjoy releasing your sperm
on your puggie woman's face
she's eaten everything else
why not give your cum a taste

I laughed. I'm a bad that way.

Hey, I bet you're dying to do the poetry review/recommendation/criticism thing this Thursday, aren't you? Okay, it's a date. Enjoy Thursday.

 

[bflagsst]

Edana09 "Choosing Mates" has some good language. Edana is brand new to the literotica poetry.

arcangelo gets a mention for his ft. benning street cred/bro cred. He wrote a fairytale poem it seems.

Tristesse wrote a standard strong poem "Five years old"

Really the only adult way to reply to something you don't like in poetry is with a poem:

It was a joy to post poetry
For others to read and enjoy
But when would-be, self-proclaimed
Critics take the liberty
To pester and annoy
Or to denigrate and defame
In the guise of recommending,

Here's CalYPygia, responding in an adult fashion after posting in a childlike fashion just days previous on the same issue. I refer the reader to EPMD607's poem "Love Letter To Ramona" it's one of my favorites of his, it's just about responding to criticism. Now, Cal, maybe someday after you've taken your break, you'll learn to read and possibly comment on the work of your peers. Anyone who clicks 'favorite' next to their work over and over is a joker.

Quiet_ny_tech gets a mention for his 80s pop-rock title "Heat of the Moment" which is misleading because you'd think it'd just be a silly poem, but it's actually very good.

EroticOrogeny "Emerging Electrical Engineer"

Row upon row of resistors
Set on Saturday garage sales
Scattered spindly leg transistors
Our time together just for males

-reminds me of my childhood, which is always a nice way for a poem to work.

I couldn't get past Vatsalya's copyright: "Poet holds the copyrights of this poem. Any duplication without the permission of the poet will be dealt seriously under copyright act. The poem is strictly for adults and internet viewing only" as if we're going around stealing lines, taking them as our own on paper, then selling 'em to the highest bidder for a black market book full of stolen internet poetry. And making a killing off it too!

LauraMbell wrote a short-story in place of a poem, maybe to mock a few of us for saying elleynei didn't write a poem. Laurambell, you're dangerous--if only we had a sheriff to protect us from such ruffians! Oh, what peril!

This place has pretty much become the wild west just in this last week, free for all, which is nice but I hope the daily recommendations don't disappear. They've been the constant around here for a lot longer than I've been reading poems on this site and for me they constitute the center of the poetry side.

 

[bflagsst]

filling in for Eve June 11 2069

First up from the bottom, the wonderful fabulous Ladynstreet with "Domestic Exotic":

daily duty never fails
to stomp a lowly label
on one dreaming of flight.

A_Seductive_submarine has a few poems up, "My Innocence" "Ecstacy" and some others, all blocks of text, all worth reading.

DastardlyOne has a rhymer "He & I" that I like the sounds in.

SapphosCosmicSister has a nice poem called "Composition" her best of the week, "Today My lover" is also entertaining, as he called her 'mum'.

The Remec has posted his Annaswirls Challenge poem, I've already said I like it in that thread, I'll say it again here.

Puskine is solid with a metallurgical Triolet.

Quiet_ny_tech has another erotic poem, it's obviously well written, it's just that we see good poems like that every other day, same imagery over and over. It's good, but it's not astounding, doesn't feel like it's coming from a personal space.

LauraMbell is approaching poetry, instead of plain prose. It's still not that great, if you wanna read a dirty porno story read one of X-Factor's series.

Lawrobbur actually exists in our world too! She replied to tess at least, and she may have gotten the message that we can't read her poems if there are a dozen a day. Lawrobbur, I promise I'll read your poems if you post a maximum of two a day from now on, like I think you did today. That's 104 a year that I'll promise to read if you don't post 8-15 a day anymore.

Ramona has two about the american idol guy right? Adam Lambert maybe.

Oh yeah, to reiterate, please only post reviews or recommendations of poems from the New Poems page on this thread. To Keep the Review Thread Clean thread is meant for snide backlash, thank yous, and so on. Today was a good review day, sorry Eve missed it. There weren't many poems and there were some worth re-reading. Good Job to all who posted new poems, hopefully for every poem you've posted today you've written commentary on another's poem. There are poetry websites that keep track of that sort of thing, hopefully this site never does--but be warned, the kharma police will find you if you only take take take!

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Recommened

weekday whimsy by Corrina Parr - erotic rose among porno thorns.

 

[bluebell]

Saturday

It's Saturday and by my count there are fourteen new poems for consumption.

As Tess already posted and several people commented, Weekday Whimsy by Corinna Parr is an excellent offering for today. While I do agree with Annie about nixing the double dashes, I think the poem still sings its way gloriously out and that is more of a cosmetic quibble.
I admire Corinna's judicious use of language (I aspire, and obviously fall short in my prose. My poetry tries in vain); it gives enough of a construct for our imagination but doesn't beat us over the head. It leads you and your imagination yields to it. It also makes me wish I had a man to do dirty things with.
Great job again, darling.

Another interesting read for today is Patriotburger, Extra Cheese by Pushkine. Poke through the hedges and look into the windows of this poem, it's intriguing.
As bflagsst commented, there are a couple of the best and wittiest lines I've read in a long while:

So edge my lawn and calm my heart
With bound'ries built of body parts.

Time Extension by rubyslipper is one I very much recommend. I fear its gently-worded feel and nature will keep some people from appreciating its beauty, but it reads like weather: always there, always moving and yet returns year after year and day after day. An extended moment with the sun in your eyes or having gazed outside for just that little bit too long. I really like this poem. Please don't overlook it.

Sheila also gives us two offerings today with Neglected Garden Path and Pennsylvania Tornado. My favorite of the two is Neglected Garden Path. The image is easy to conjure and it never seems to get old: the odd, unruly outcropping of brush along straight edges.

And my honorable mention for today is actually Slutty Emma by vogz.
Why? I honestly can't tell if it was written tongue-in-cheek or seriously, but either way (and I apologize, vogz, if this offends), it made me giggle. He called a twat a fufu! Three lovers a day! Cunt slime! Omg!
It was all too much and I'm still amused by it- quite like it actually.


And I'm spent.
Go forth and read!
(I used way too many exclamation points in here!!!)

 

[loganforester]

Sunday

Today there are 14 new poems.

To start Lawrobbur had four submissions on the day. None of them are remarkable to me on their own but provide a steady diet of erotic poetic humor that never fails to put a smile on my face.

Annaswirls graces us with a couple of poems breakaway halter & Breaking the Seal. The former is my favorite poem of the day with sections like this:

hard would be holding you with urban sprawl
spring blossom longing river-blind sympathy
that would be a challenge
no my moves bend cheap like short skirt tightness

She's a real master at weaving a compelling narrative and painting a picture at the same time. It's an intriguing read all the way through following the twisted path as you move along.

Greenmountaineer gives us a poem following a form I'd never heard of before with Prime Meridian Renga. I'm not familiar with the form so I can't speak to the technical prowess but it's good for a read even if for nothing more than seeing something different than common forms.

Finally, fucifer unleashes ports version 2 a continuation of the one from yesterday. It's not the most flawless poem of the day but it paints a nice picture using a comparsion between a ship port and a certain part of a woman's anatomy. It was well done.

 

[LadynStFreknBed]

*Disclaimer: I am not making a statement about freedom of speech. I am neither belittling nor bowing to any poets. I do not consider myself a supreme authority on poetry. Please take this for what it is- merely my recommendations for today.*

We have 13 new poems today.

The Gardener is an intriguing, erotic poem by bronyaur67.

Love's Harvest by SweetOblivion reads like a sonnet for the most part. To me, the fact that it is so close to a sonnet, but not, makes the deviations seem like mistakes. However, I love the parallel between wine and love in this poem.

Now, I thought that Busy by annaswirls was really cute.


Okay, so those are my picks for today, but there are actually several more decent ones. Please read and comment on these and other new poems.

 

[bflagsst]

I'd guesstimate there are 7 new poems today, the seven sisters, the pleiades(messier object 45) and I consider myself a supreme authority on poetry, and I consider anyone who says what they mean a supreme authority on poetry. woof woof.

From the bottom of the list, Ramona has a song: "Everything I do, I do to Offend you" which made me laugh before I even clicked on it. "I find no subject too scared or taboo" which I think she meant "sacred", and I think we all as artists or whatever want to believe there is no subject that's taboo to us - but when shove comes to push we probably shy away from a whole mess of stuff whereas I really believe Ramona means what she says in that line.

BlueBrains wrote "Bordertown" which is the real reason why I reviewed today, cuz it's a solid poem, very reminiscent of hmmnmm and someone else I can't quite place. I think Hmmnmm deleted most of his poems, maybe I'm confusing him with someone else.

greenmountaineer wrote "Even Pets" which reminds me of half the passages in Ezra Pound's -Cantos-. I've yet to complete that book, I regard anyone who has with awe. GreenM's poem is packed with info. A good poem makes you re-read sometimes for pleasure, sometimes out of curiousity. "Lawyers as well swayed from lampposts/Necktied in dress shirts gunmetal pressed" were my favorite lines.

Then there were three poems about subs licking battleships or something. Then there was UYS's Sci-fi poem, I assume it's sci-fi: "Ares Vallis Log 2623 dust storms"

Nothing to do but wait it out underground
through meandering eerily lit passages,
pounding out the second mates
idea of music from some ancient archive.
"I can't get no satisfaction!"

I do take issue with her use of "transporter" instead of "transport" earlier in the poem, having spent ages 8-13 doing nothing but watch star wars and star trek the latter seems to fit the context better.

 

[ramonathompson]

I'd guesstimate there are 7 new poems today, the seven sisters, the pleiades(messier object 45) and I consider myself a supreme authority on poetry, and I consider anyone who says what they mean a supreme authority on poetry. woof woof.

From the bottom of the list, Ramona has a song: "Everything I do, I do to Offend you" which made me laugh before I even clicked on it. "I find no subject too scared or taboo" which I think she meant "sacred", and I think we all as artists or whatever want to believe there is no subject that's taboo to us - but when shove comes to push we probably shy away from a whole mess of stuff whereas I really believe Ramona means what she says in that line.

BlueBrains wrote "Bordertown" which is the real reason why I reviewed today, cuz it's a solid poem, very reminiscent of hmmnmm and someone else I can't quite place. I think Hmmnmm deleted most of his poems, maybe I'm confusing him with someone else.

greenmountaineer wrote "Even Pets" which reminds me of half the passages in Ezra Pound's -Cantos-. I've yet to complete that book, I regard anyone who has with awe. GreenM's poem is packed with info. A good poem makes you re-read sometimes for pleasure, sometimes out of curiousity. "Lawyers as well swayed from lampposts/Necktied in dress shirts gunmetal pressed" were my favorite lines.

Then there were three poems about subs licking battleships or something. Then there was UYS's Sci-fi poem, I assume it's sci-fi: "Ares Vallis Log 2623 dust storms"

Nothing to do but wait it out underground
through meandering eerily lit passages,
pounding out the second mates
idea of music from some ancient archive.
"I can't get no satisfaction!"

I do take issue with her use of "transporter" instead of "transport" earlier in the poem, having spent ages 8-13 doing nothing but watch star wars and star trek the latter seems to fit the context better.

*smile*

Thanks for the mention and for catching that typeo in the song. I'll have to correct that. And yes, I do indeed mean what I said in that line. I've always felt that for a writer to be the most honest not only with themselves but with their readers as well, that they must never shy away from any topic no matter how lowbrow or nasty it may be.

What can I say? I am one twisted little nut and I love it. lol. Thanks go out to Byran Adams for inspiring me with his lyrics. Tough one to write, but thankfully it came out better than I expected.

 

[Tzara]

Since this thread is now labelled "New Poetry Recommendations," I will merely recommend the poem I liked best today, a cantaloupe fantasy by ghost_girl. The first strophe is the better of the two, I think, but I liked the overall poem anyway. Why I is recommending it.

There were several other quite good poems today, but this is the one I liked best.

In any case, I would suggest you read them all, or at least glance at them.

Or not. Your choice.

Peace out.

 

[annaswirls]

New Poems


Genevieve -
Submitted by Tristesse2 (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/17/09
This delightful selection starts out poemsy but winds up prosey in the second verse.

Oh I remember those heady days,
fresh young blades up from Oxford
or Cambridge driving me, reckless,
through spring-green country lanes
with a girl and a wicker hamper
full of food to be consumed later.

Glue -
Submitted by pushkine (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/17/09
"Testors" is a model paint glue.

The kiss was postmarked San Diego.

It is rare for me to dislike anything from this poet. I enjoyed this poem, but wanted something in the middle to explain the story between the kisser of the postcard and the sniffer of the Testors.




Wet Sea Beast -
Submitted by Cal Y. Pygia (Erotic Poetry) 06/17/09
A little taste:

Beauty can show her ass
Without offense.

Seas toss, and we
Are tossed with them.

I am not uncomfortable with anatomy, but I feel like there is too much emphasis on anatomical features, it overshadows the underlying messages in the poem. This is probably just a matter of taste. I am all for buttocks and labia for seasoning, but when they are the main course in a poem, my palette is overloaded.




The Great Gerund Scandal -
Submitted by UnderYourSpell (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/17/09
oh girl, what a great way to use that trigger! And no one is going to shout out take her down

not by chance, the poems we breathe -
Submitted by Lauren Hynde (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/17/09
Interesting poem, some parts seemed a little awkward, but overall a cool look at the art of writing poetry.
This was my favorite line:

but no tongue is a verse
till it finds its metaphor

and rhymes romantic with perverse

What was yours?

It is great to see Ms.Hynde posting poetry here again!


a cantaloupe fantasy -
Submitted by ghost_girl (Non-Erotic Poetry) 06/17/09

Hey great to see you posting here g_g! You have quite the imagination! My one suggestion would be to reconsider putting an "I" in the second verse. I was totally into the garden world, but the "I imagine..." part moved me to a human narrator and her imagination, when I had already been inside. It was a little jolting, but still a fine poem!

That is all for today. There is also cum and other gooey things in the New Poems, so go get sticky! These are just my wee recommendations, if you have comments, recommendations or reviews to share publicly on this thread, please do so, everyone's opinion counts.

 

[vrosej10]

Good poems.

Ireally liked A Cantaloupe Fantasy too. A solid poem. I thought Glue by Pushkine was complex and interesting.

 

[WickedEve]

Only a few new poems today, so take a moment to check them all out.
Out of today's group, I'd say my favorite is Things in the Distance by vrosej10
Dreams of Sappho by Sapphos Sister has some good lines. I like the first couple of stanzas.

Sorry for the quickie. I have a hallway to paint. yuck.

 

[Tzara]

Friday, June 19, 2009

Nine new poems today. Two are Eve's, though not all that new (one was written in 2004, one in 2005), but they are clearly the best of the day, at least in my idiosyncratic opinion. Slow Minutes is a brief poem that has a sort of Oriental feel to it. Contemplative, but distanced. Interesting read. I like transcendental lay a bit better, probably because itza sex poem. Nice first line.

I'd also suggest you take a look at intarsia, by rubyslipper. I think it's trying too hard to be "poetic" and gets a little lost, but it has its moments. Worth a read and comment, anyways.