New Poetry Recommendations

[Cal Y. Pygia]

I think "beaten" may refer to a swordsmith's beating metal into a sword and to being vanquished, with masturbation being, perhaps, a tertiary meaning. Although I understand your sentiment and am not opposed, myself, to your view of the matter, it seems possible to see the term "beaten" as enriching the multivalence of the poem, perhaps even while, paradoxically, cheapening the whole, as it were, to some extent for the very reason that you cite. It's interesting to me whenever a single term can both gather unto itself and exude several meanings at once, as this one seems to do.

 

[annaswirls]

Hello Cal! Glad to see you here!

I did understand the multi-faceted nature of the "beating." I think my aversion to the word is personal, and I am glad to see your view as well.

Perhaps it is also the language that follows, "has been beaten
just for you many times" tends to go to the more informal-personal side ie touching ones self as opposed to the sword/vanquish angle.

I also have a hard time with "scream" because it is a rare occurance in the real world that someone actually "screams" but in writing, it is often used to over-exaggerate a response.

I really have no problem with touching oneself. It just felt foriegn in this poem.

I am really glad you stopped in this thread. I enjoy your poetry very much.

~AS

I think "beaten" may refer to a swordsmith's beating metal into a sword and to being vanquished, with masturbation being, perhaps, a tertiary meaning. Although I understand your sentiment and am not opposed, myself, to your view of the matter, it seems possible to see the term "beaten" as enriching the multivalence of the poem, perhaps even while, paradoxically, cheapening the whole, as it were, to some extent for the very reason that you cite. It's interesting to me whenever a single term can both gather unto itself and exude several meanings at once, as this one seems to do.

 

[PandoraGlitters]

Sunday Poems

Today there are seven new poems, so read them all!

Greenmountaineer's Lady Elevator Operator is a swanky poem about Aretha Franklin, which catches the imagination with imagery and narrative.

I enjoyed some of the images in Vampiredust's Remembering a 7-Eleven I once visit[ed?] but after three readings, I still do not really get a sense of the whole. This one I may need to come back to tomorrow.

Cal. Y. Pygia has some interesting and accessible poems today in her Pink Alarm Clock and other poems. Hmmnmm also has a couple today of which I found All Cooped Up to be the more evocative.

In all, wonderful reading night. I hope you all had a marvelous holiday.xx -Dora

 

[Cal Y. Pygia]

Hi, Anna,

I do check in from time to time, to see how I am doing as a poet. I also enjoy your poems. I think we can all learn from one another.

Thanks for sharing your insights and verse!

Cal

 

[darkmaas]

A slow poetry weekend followed by a quiet poetry week. It might be a good time to clean up the old quill and open a fresh bottle of ink and write a poem or ten. But if you are completly out of fresh ink...

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Annaswirls "carves" the Easter feast into bittersweet morsels with so we decided to buy the turkey. More prose than poetry but full of detail.

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Sojourn by Curiouswife caught my interest. Nice imagery and an understated theme make it worth the read.

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That's it for today. Sharpen those quills for next week.



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[annaswirls]

New Poems

Thank you to the stars of the new poetry pages: Epmd607 and bflagsst for thoughtful comments on the new poems. Truth be told, I enjoy reading your comments more than much of the poetry.

My recommendations from 4/15 and the missed 4/12

I do not quite get this one. It has promise, but to me, the pronouns are too elusive. I will try again. What do you think? I am recommending it as an interesting read. A flavor on my plate that I have not tasted a thousand times.
Still on Parole in Purgatory
by greenmountaineer©


Kept my attention top to bottom. Wile E
by hmmnmm©


I like poetry that makes me feel less than worthy. Follow the Herd Heavenward
by bflagsst©

This has promise: Bellydance
by Blushingsub3262©

I am intrigued by Cal's writing, although some feels like prose with a return key. Not sure if that is even an issue, just an observation. Of those offered, ALONE IN THE GALLERY OF PROVOCATIVE ART was by far my favorite. Poignant. Took me there and I did not want to leave.
For Girly Little Me and Other Poems
by Cal Y. Pygia©

The Life of a Transsexual
by Cal Y. Pygia©

As if I had had something to do with it.

just slayed me. Thud. I hit the ground and could not breathe for a few moments. That is poetry.

This one also got me thinking and it is good advice for anyone looking to write about sex in a way that anyone will care about (besides your lover(s) ) I do not really care much for it as a poem itself, but as a reflection, or as a creative direction, it hits the mark.

GROUP SEX

Poems about breasts
And cunts and cocks
And balls and buttocks
Become boring,
Sooner for the intelligent
Or later for the thick,
Dim, and slow among us;
True aficionados
Of pornographic poetry
Understand that sex
Cannot be the all in all;
To be interesting beyond
Itself, sex must include
Humanity, past and present;
There must be millions
Of others in a pair
Of loving couples' beds,
For sex, after all, is not about
Mere breasts and cunts
And cocks and balls
And buttocks, not at all,
But about life, and life
Includes us all, past,
Present, and future alike;
Sex is a communal affair,
And must involve humanity
To be of interest or importance
Beyond the moment and the day.

 

[WickedEve]

Thursday

16 New Poems for Thursday

I give back all your kisses by annaswirls
After James Tate's "I take back all my kisses"
Survivor: Poet's Choice Trigger #11

Many good lines in this poem. I particularly love the steeple bells run on gasoline and corn dust.

They got you because cable t.v. never sleeps.
Because the steeple bells run on gasoline and corn dust.
Because your mother spent seven years under the slow dry stylist waiting for the ringing to stop.​

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Whore by pushkine
(Spoken in the voice of a refurbished 1947 Mercury coupe.)
Survivor Poetry Contest
Trigger 18, Poet's Choice (Free Verse)

I miss

my Mary, who was widowed in the war,
and took me off the showroom floor

to be her transportation. She was a milliner
with birdlike bones

who swept my mats
religiously.​

Make sure to give this one a read. I really like it and feel like more could be done with it.

 

[Tzara]

I don't think we have a regular Friday recommendant as yet, so let me wipe the grape jelly smears of my comments over the tremulous egos of today's poets.

Only five new poems today, at least so far. On Fridays, poems sometimes seem to show up at erratic intervals throughout the day, so there may be more later.

Anyways, let me offer some comment on what's there now:

• UnderYourSpell's Behind a tin-foiled window is a rubaiyat written for the Survivor contest—a pleasant little poem that reads well, despite a couple lines where the meter seems a bit off to my ear. The subject matter is gently amusing and meshes well with the form and UYS's handling of topic. My favorite of today's poems.
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• New poet RoundingThird offers a rhymed love poem with the lovely title Caroline, of Grace. The poem itself is, for me, too reliant on fairly common phrases, but it is written with some care and goes down easily enough. Give it a read and see what you think.
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• The often irritating pushkine has a poem, if you want to read it.
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• The remarkably prolific Cal Y. Pygia gives us Foursome, a four-pack of embedded poems in various forms (free verse, sequenced mini-poems, rhymed quatrains). I always find Cal's verse interesting to read, but sometimes uneven in execution. Of today's four, I liked "Images of Shemininity" the best. It's a sequence of sometimes amusing, sometimes startling images and statements that work quite well together.
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• Human Strays by pmbluemoon is a little too polemical for my taste, but states its case clearly and well, which is the main thing one asks of a political poem. Reminds me a bit of Swift's A Modest Proposal, which I mean as a compliment.

Now, that's not many poems, is it? Why don't you go read 'em all, people?

Happy weekend, y'all.

 

[bluebell]

Saturday

I haven't seen Remec around in awhile so I don't know if he's unable to do his Saturdays anymore (I know he's pretty busy), but I'll try to check in every week to see if Saturday's been done. If not, you might get stuck with me.

I have brain haze today so I apologize in advance for not being as thorough as I usually am. And make no mistake that when I use the word "thorough" I mean "long-winded and tiresome".

There are indeed new poems today. I believe there were twelve at last count. Go dip in. There are works by some of our favorites.

There were two poems that stood out in particular for me today. In no order, the first is Sibling Rivalry by Tristesse. Like the weaker of the two locked in the described arguments, it might be easy to pass over this poem with fast eyes, but I ask you not to do that. Its corners are both rounded and spiky, and so true. Unless you are the one always winning the argument I think most of us can identify with this.
Her words are clear and neat, while also appropriately submissive:

Hers was the orderly way,
the sharper point that
pinned me to our arguments

Brilliant job. This poem is one I shall carry around in my pocket.

The second poem is Dead Meat by hmmnmm.
Another delicate sledgehammer from my friend. I read it two ways: carnivores with both two and four legs. Feathers, fur, skin. Opposable thumbs or not. Either way you read it, please do.

I was particularly impressed with the soft, unassuming rhymes (you rhymers are just making my prejudice unfounded all over the damn place, here) and the nimble language (which is a specialty for him).
I suppose the one hitch is what my mind does when it hits the words "mammalian stat". It kind of twitches, though from bad or good I cannot tell. I waver back and forth between mind twitches like that. Sometimes we need them to tell us we are reading good words and other times they are the mental equivalent to the needle jumping the sewing machine.
I will take his work either way. Greedy-like.

Unnecessary homeslice talk: peace out, y'all. Have a happy.
(And thank you to the poets who've submitted.)

 

[loganforester]

There are 12 New Poems today.

Unfortunately there was precious little that caused me to really stop and read them.

A bumpy Ride by Underyourspell is a cute little survivor contest poem that caught my interest. It makes good use of the trigger while providing a nice image.

The only other poem of interest was Sense of Motion by a new poet ImaginaryMe.

My fingers tap with the rhythm,
Pounding to the beat of the deafening collision.
And in the absence of the feeling and the sorrow,
Shock-stricken, I stand still,
Pleading with the silence for the chance I lost before.


The ending of the poem struck me as particularly poignant. Give it a read and see what you think.

 

[LadynStFreknBed]

Monday, April 20, 2009

There are 7 new poems today.

I enjoyed The Night, The Smoke, and the Tawny Port by greenmountaineer. It's a visually descriptive poem of the emotional distance that can develop in relationships over time. At least, that's what I got out of it.

I like the metaphor of Nothingness by PassionatePair, but I have to agree with the constructive criticism in the comment left by Epmd607. The poem itself is rather flatly narrative, but the closing line of the poem demands some emotion. Very good effort, my dear new poet, but you may want to go back and try to set an emotional foundation that will express your perception of ending up as nothingness.

So, those are my picks for today.

 

[darkmaas]

An aged relation in England once remarked after a rather long-winded sermon, "A bit too much value for our money." I feel the same about today's offerings. There are more poems than last week.

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Curiouswife plays with a rather nice bit of snowflake imagery but not enough seems to come of it. Maybe I'm just being overcritical. Read Flakes and then send me a blistering PM in rebuttal.

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Truth vs. Lies and the Answer by mnrendevous serves up a pageful of sophistry as poetry for our pleasure. Interesting.

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If you are feeling the urge to warm your soul with a bit of blasphemy then ramonathompson has what you need in Masturbate to Jesus and God Has Never Been Gay

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Enjoy the rest of your day.





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[annaswirls]

Here They Be: New Poems
and my humble recommendations.


Kneading Me Most -
Submitted by StiffClit (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09

My mouth slack, cracked open
smiling at the memory
of his thin, tight lips
gone plump

Dressing Room -
Submitted by hmmnmm (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09

Sexual Personae and Other Poems -
Submitted by Cal Y. Pygia (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09


And a taste of June Jazz -
Submitted by submissiverose (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09

Reach for me
Your pace was fast and your strokes were long
Reach for me
Your hands were rough and your grip was strong
Reach for me
Your passion thrived and you brought me along
Summer night sex is where I belong

Ramona's been reading the hymnal. Good lord have mercy.
Someone must like her poems, I just cannot get into them. If anyone else wants to review them, please do, I know I have only one taste in poetry.

And annaswirls has one that should definitely be passed over, please, seriously it sucks.

Now I am off to Field day! Please read, comment, make a note here of which ones you really enjoyed. Anyone can post in this thread, recommendations or reflections on the New Poems.


Submissive Rose -
Submitted by submissiverose (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
The Servant -
Submitted by submissiverose (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
The Taunt -
Submitted by submissiverose (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
You Just Found Out -
Submitted by FedoraVixen (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
Attic -
Submitted by wonder_kitty (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09

Eternal Life from One Bite -
Submitted by FedoraVixen (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
Change Your Deodorant, Oh God! -
Submitted by ramonathompson (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
I Will Swallow Your Praise -
Submitted by ramonathompson (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09

Ballad of Captain Hook -
Submitted by annaswirls (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
Egression -
Submitted by submissiverose (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09
Heaven In My Mouth Tonight -
Submitted by ramonathompson (Erotic Poetry) 04/22/09

 

[WickedEve]

Thursday

Nine new poems are posted this morning.


from the last shelf by annaswirls is a very good poem. But the first stanza is a great poem:

soon as I slid off Carla's slim
hips she did it:
banished me to
the fat jeans shelf​

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Drum Beats Me by Keroin has some interesting parts and a good tum tum ta-tum beat. This poem has room for improvement and I think it's worth reworking a bit. Give it a read. It's better than many of the erotic poems seen day after day on literotica.

excerpt:
Put your ear to the ground,
your heart on the floor.
Tum tum ta-tum
I am the drum.
I am the locomotive, chest-thumping, piston jumping, hard eight of your soul,
begging your savagery,
inviting your ignorance.
Tum tum ta-tum​

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I like the idea behind Curious Detective Agency by Curiouswife. The poem seems like a rough draft. I hope this poet revises.

excerpt:
Still I take pleasure in this knowledge
while I hold her picture to mine;
she’s lovely, but I was his one of a kind.​

 

[Keroin]

Drum Beats Me by Keroin has some interesting parts and a good tum tum ta-tum beat. This poem has room for improvement and I think it's worth reworking a bit. Give it a read. It's better than many of the erotic poems seen day after day on literotica.

excerpt:
Put your ear to the ground,
your heart on the floor.
Tum tum ta-tum
I am the drum.
I am the locomotive, chest-thumping, piston jumping, hard eight of your soul,
begging your savagery,
inviting your ignorance.
Tum tum ta-tum​

Thanks for the mention Eve! I should tell everyone that I am really not a poet. I write mostly spec fiction. Poetry falls far outside the comfort zone but I do enjoy some discomfort now and then.

I think I'll go back and play with this one, though, since a few people seem to think it has merit.

Also, I have to say that I am very impressed with the views to comments/votes ratio on my poem compared to my prose pieces. Speaks volumes about this crowd. I'll have to hang out here more often.

If you'll have me.

Thanks again - K

 

[PandoraGlitters]

Sunday New Poems Reviews

There are 37 new poems today. This could take awhile. Reserving space for the review and popping back and forth.

UnderYourSpell tackles a difficult subject in the poem Electro-Convulsive Therapy. It is a bit abstract in places but I like the description of blurriness and the maybe in the last line. Avasogently's Be Kind. Unwind. is compelling too but with the same sorts of generalized abstractions I've become more aware of since trying to eliminate them in my own work. Nonetheless, worth a read and a vote. Better still, quite moving in fact, was Perimenopausal Bebop, also by Avasogently.

Pushkine's Green Anjou is lovely. Seems to me that this should be Erotic poetry, but maybe I'm a bee. I'd also recommend Greenmountaineer's The Artist and Her Nude, despite the fact that soul and bared should not be in the same line in any poem ever, in my humble opinion, not in any circumstance.

Ramonathompson's Shake 'Em Up is certainly topical, if gruesome. Put that on an death and disaster appetizer tray with WriterDom's Damn Global Warming for maximum effect. Similarly themed but an interesting contrast in construction is ChuckEPenguin's Ghazal the Distance. Then, switch the fires to passion with Writerdom's Keroin which sort of melds the penguin theme with erotica, believe it or not, and you've got a transition to the Sappholovers' quite effective erotic poem, Female Icarus for a 'happy ending.'

Middleagepoet's got the best title, I reckon, with Her Father Painted Four Crows. Despite the 'soulful phrases' I gave it a second and third read. See if you find it that compelling! Keroin's Beak Freak Sings the Blues succeeds at the other end of the poem. I love those last two lines.

My favorites for the day are Corset by Nezach (his just chimed for me and made me want to read it out loud) and pushkine's Drakula. Take that fetish-poem-disbelievers! (Sorry.) Pushkine was on a roll today. Read everything he writes as a rule of thumb.

 

[darkmaas]

It's penguin week at our little corner of the poetic universe. Apparently we owe this to Writer Dom and our friends in metaphor at the BDSM Cafe.

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Evolution by puskin, crease by pygoscelis, Penguin by Yasashii_Kaze and Keroin et. Chuckby Essene all explore penguininity. I particularly liked Essene's use of the phrase 'Hanging languid'.

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Enjoy.




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[Keroin]

It's penguin week at our little corner of the poetic universe. Apparently we owe this to Writer Dom and our friends in metaphor at the BDSM Cafe.

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Evolution by puskin, crease by pygoscelis, Penguin by Yasashii_Kaze and Keroin et. Chuckby Essene all explore penguininity. I particularly liked Essene's use of the phrase 'Hanging languid'.

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Enjoy.




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The contest ends this Friday. Everyone is welcome! The only rules are that the poem must contain the word "penguin" and it must be submitted to Lit. Judging will be done by poll in the BDSM Cafe.

Here's the thread: Penguin Poem Contest

 

[annaswirls]

28 New Poems


Hare In the Moon -
Submitted by Netzach (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/29/09
Oh my Lord, read this. Now. My words can't describe. The last image in the poem I want to wear its ring.

Post Gastric Bypass Love -
Submitted by RogerSmalls (Erotic Poetry) 04/29/09 oh my this is the most disgusting poem I have ever had the pleasure to read! Awfully hilarious, painfully oh lord, descriptive. You really need to read this.



Sweet to the last bite -
Submitted by UnderYourSpell (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/29/09
ah she had me going!


Thumper28 has three erotic poems today. I recommend slow headed - although the last line screeched the poem to a grinding halt. She uses the term "Puppy Type Cries" - made me smile.


balance -
Submitted by tungtied2u (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/29/09



Hey, this is an average poem, but the story behind it is very cool. Those survivor triggers are a bitch, but in every topic, you can find a story that speaks to you (with the help of Google)Nimrod's Last Stand - Submitted by annaswirls (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/29/09

Tin-foil - Submitted by Tristesse2 (Non-Erotic Poetry) 04/29/09 See? Tess found a great story for the Tin Foil Covered Window trigger.


Support your local poet. Peanuts, pennies, and a little attention.

 

[WickedEve]

No More Flan for Fatty by RogerSmalls is either very humorous or very inane or both. You decide.


waste by tungtied2u
This poem is a bit of a gloomy read. But it has its moments that make it worth reading.

how much easier it is, to use a newspaper
for a shroud,
rather than read it, blanket oneself
with the grief and despair of others,
company for compost​

MoPenguin by EroticOrogeny is a good poem. The alliteration is pushed to the limit but doesn't go beyond.

 

[Netzach]

thanks so much for the positive strokes, annaswirls. I'm touched.

 

[bluebell]

Friday & Saturday

Aight. You gots me again, time to start crying.
I'll dip into Friday a little again, since we still don't have a full time reviewer (anyone? Anyone? Bueller, Bueller?).

Friday only had two new poems, and one had charm. Eating Crackers in Bed by cavu182 is rather a weirdly sweet little thing. I like the beginning, in particular. It's so vivid, and I like the feeling of intimacy you get, even though the girl isn't real.

As for today, whoa. The universe is totally making up for the fact that there were no poems last week because there were a fair few today.

If I'm being truthful, it was a bit hard to get around today's lot. There seem to be equal amounts of people hurting and also having very detailed sex. Which I suppose are normal extremes, and I feel bad for those who are having a rough time of it, but the poetry was a little meh, until I got to Hidden Places by Kokeen.
Just the sort of little gem I love to stumble upon. It gets my B of the day, for serious. Just lovely. Quiet, understated, and completely and totally itself.

Part of the reason I love it so much is because it focuses on something I've been thinking about a lot lately: places on our bodies, inside ourselves, that remain hidden or partially shaded from others. Even people who claim some portion of ownership over us (and our bodies). What it's like to be awake to that, to allow it, to enjoy it, to encourage it. Or to shut it down.

The poem leaves you with that feeling of reminiscent fingertips. The after-burn of touch by someone you WANT touching you. Or touch that came by unexpectedly and left you feeling a little bit trembly. Nothing quite like feelings that stick to your ribs. If you're heading that way, please read this poem.

Thanks everyone. Don't worry, it's over now. The kids can uncover their eyes.
Keep writing.

 

[annaswirls]

thanks so much for the positive strokes, annaswirls. I'm touched.

you are touched and talented and you are welcome. Thank you for giving me something to stroke.

 

[loganforester]

Sunday reviews.

There are only 3 new poems this sunday.

Give them a read but I really can't recommend any of them as I just wasn't feeling it. Since there are so few take a look and judge for yourself.

 

[bluebell]

I dunno, Logan. I'd say all three have some merit, though I was most partial to two of them.

Scout by Victoria_Lucas is really quite wonderful, to me. I love the almost absentminded air of it. Like she's being careless with more than just her clothes. Like catching the riveting ends of conversational snippets. Like seeing the very insides of a lure.
I think everyone should read this poem, but that's just me. I don't recall having ruling rights over the poetry community but for what it's worth, do it now.

Doll Face by our resident greenmountaineer is also worth a read. Just as the title promises, this poem is the literary equivalent to the sicky-sweet eye-popping that can be found in everyday life, and then disrupted without care.

While I face down thoughts like these
And spoon-feed doll face more of this mash.

A really enjoyable read. Goggly-eyed good.