Portrait of My Egotistical Prior Self - an Introspective Poem

[Safe_Bet]

Some people have asked why I chose to shed my prior personna. It is because I am no longer like her at all - she was a '20's something', self-centered bitch. I am now a '30's something', mommy who looks upon my kids true perfection every day.

I've decided to better explain this through a (sucky) poem:


Portrait of My Egotistical Prior Self

There were none whose beauty I did not surpass,
Those who were merely pretty could just kiss my ass.

My body was one that evoked lustful wet dreams,
It made men beg to cum and women’s twats gleam.

My skin was faultlessness, my hair like spun flax,
Lesser beings felt jealousy and deep envy, so they’d attack.

They learned not to fuck with me lest they receive my ire’s brunt,
You did it at your own peril, you impotent man, you dumb cunt.

I was ultimate perfection as seen by my mind’s own eye,
Though others disagreed and disparaged, I had no idea why.

 

[Safe_Bet]

Duh! I welcome your comments!

Yes, as a matter of fact, I am a natural blonde! How did you ever know?

 

[unpredictablebijou]

Some people have asked why I chose to shed my prior personna. It is because I am no longer like her at all - she was a '20's something', self-centered bitch. I am now a '30's something', mommy who looks upon my kids true perfection every day.

I've decided to better explain this through a (sucky) poem:


Portrait of My Egotistical Prior Self

Their were none whose beauty I did not surpass,
Those who were merely pretty could just kiss my ass.

My body was one that evokes lustful wet dreams,
It made men beg to cum and women’s twats gleam.

My skin was faultlessness, my hair like spun flax,
Lesser being felt jealousy and deep envy, so they’d attack.

They learned not to fuck with me lest they receive my ire’s brunt,
You did it at your own peril, you impotent man, you dumb cunt.

I was ultimate perfection as seem by my mind’s own eye,
Though other’s disagreed and disparaged, I had no idea why.

Well, okay, some comments.

You've got a couple of errors, like I think you mean "lesser beingS", "seen" rather than "seem," and the word "others" shouldn't have an apostrophe.

I expected this to go on longer to explain how you're different now.

But I'd suggest writing another piece, addressing this same theme without the rhyme and meter. It'll help your language flow better.

Welcome.

bj

 

[UnderYourSpell]

First word should be 'There' ....... and there is nothing wrong with being a true blonde I am one too

 

[unpredictablebijou]

First word should be 'There' ....... and there is nothing wrong with being a true blonde I am one too

Nice catch. I missed that one.

bj

 

[Anschul]

Portrait of My Egotistical Prior Self

There were none whose beauty I did not surpass,
Those who were merely pretty could just kiss my ass.

My body was one that evokes lustful wet dreams,
It made men beg to cum and women’s twats gleam.

And I think the word "evokes" should be "evoked."

Welcome from me too.