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Angeline
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Just imagine what's going on behind all those little windows! Dirty little folk arty antics.
Thank you. If I can sexualize Grandma Moses paintings for you, I feel well powerful.
I learned the terzanelle form from Eve. When I first came here, she was writing a lot of terzanelles. I had only written Elizabethan sonnets and I thought I'd try. They just seem easier to me--fewer stanzas and repetitions. I've written a lot of them. And I remember, too, that the first few villanelles I wrote, I struggled terribly. I may have developed a mindset from that.
I'm sure you already use a cheat sheet like the one I made up in the vill thread. When I write any of these "repeating" forms, I create a table so I know in advance what each line needs--that is so I don't have to remember what the line needs. It's sort of like a puzzle to solve. That's my only trick.
I can't believe I actually tried to write a paradelle. I was young and foolish then and had a "I'll conquer any form" attitude. Then I wrote a sestina.
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I would think a paradelle would be pretty simple, since it was intended as a nonsense form. But now that people are actually trying to write serious ones, um, me not go there.
I do remember reading the Billy Collins book where that first appeared and being very puzzled by it.
Joke on me, of course. As all best jokes are.
champagne1982
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I wrote a paradelle, in very poor French as well. (Wasn't that a duckysmut challenge?) Francais is the langue de naissance of the formula though, so it fits a bit easier into the pattern. I don't recommend it as an exercise for the weak of conviction, especially a public one. It's damned hard. Sestinas are easy in comparison.
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You wrote a paradelle in French?
Insert various colorful curse words here.
All right. Which toe should I lick first?
champagne1982
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Oh my goodness Uncle t-zed, no need to do the grovel thing. It is a horrid poem, in both Anglais and French. If you promise not to laugh at my awfulness I may be coerced to expose it for a few minutes ... no longer, it's nearly embarassing
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Who said I was groveling? It's a foot fetish technique thing.Oh my goodness Uncle t-zed, no need to do the grovel thing. It is a horrid poem, in both Anglais and French. If you promise not to laugh at my awfulness I may be coerced to expose it for a few minutes ... no longer, it's nearly embarassing
And paradelles are supposed to be bad. Even, or especially, in French.
Be bold, Champie!
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It's not the poem that's really bad, it's the French it's written in. With apologies to La Belle Langue Francais
Mystere d'Amour Paradelle
Peut-être c'est moi que tu aimes.
Peut-être c'est moi que tu aimes.
Sais que c'est toi que j'adore.
Sais que c'est toi que j'adore.
Qu'est-ce que c'est adores-tu?
Peut-etre je sais que tu aimes.
Comment peux j'apprendre de ta vie
Comment peux j'apprendre de ta vie
Si tu insistes c'est le mystère
Si tu insistes c'est le mystère
Si le mystère de ta vie insist c'est.
Tu peux apprendre comment je suis.
Pourquoi si je reste,
Pourquoi si je reste,
Quand mes cris perçants de coeur disparaissent?
Quand mes cris perçants de coeur disparaissent?
Quand mes cris perçants de coeur, "Pourquoi reste?"
Je devrait disparaître.
Sais c'est un mystère pourquoi,
Mon coeur insist que c'est toi que j'adore.
Comment si tu apprends de moi?
Peut-être si je restez, tu peux,
Quand c'est ta vie,
Que les cris perçants disparaissent.
Mystere d'Amour Paradelle
Peut-être c'est moi que tu aimes.
Peut-être c'est moi que tu aimes.
Sais que c'est toi que j'adore.
Sais que c'est toi que j'adore.
Qu'est-ce que c'est adores-tu?
Peut-etre je sais que tu aimes.
Comment peux j'apprendre de ta vie
Comment peux j'apprendre de ta vie
Si tu insistes c'est le mystère
Si tu insistes c'est le mystère
Si le mystère de ta vie insist c'est.
Tu peux apprendre comment je suis.
Pourquoi si je reste,
Pourquoi si je reste,
Quand mes cris perçants de coeur disparaissent?
Quand mes cris perçants de coeur disparaissent?
Quand mes cris perçants de coeur, "Pourquoi reste?"
Je devrait disparaître.
Sais c'est un mystère pourquoi,
Mon coeur insist que c'est toi que j'adore.
Comment si tu apprends de moi?
Peut-être si je restez, tu peux,
Quand c'est ta vie,
Que les cris perçants disparaissent.
Sara Crewe
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That's alright. I still didnt find av clothes or clothes for my av. I lack focus at times.
UnderYourSpell
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Are those two ladies to the right of the picture having a punch up? The one to the left seems to be reeling back
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"You gave us quite a few surprises!" is not what you want to hear from your surgeon as you wake up from surgery.
Everything is fine. I'm going back to bed.. just thought I'd check in.
Everything is fine. I'm going back to bed.. just thought I'd check in.
champagne1982
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Rest easy, Ladyn. I'm glad all went well in spite of the surprises. My surgeon told me that he was a bit discouraged that every "simple scope" he did on the day of my surgery had something more complicated than he'd planned for. It disconcerted me a bit, but all was fine in spite of his little vent in my presence.
I think that's all they were saying, and besides, once you're in a less medicated state and visiting him on your recheck day, you can ask him just what he meant by "surprise" exactly.
Good to have you back posting.
I think that's all they were saying, and besides, once you're in a less medicated state and visiting him on your recheck day, you can ask him just what he meant by "surprise" exactly.
Good to have you back posting.
unpredictablebijou
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You found it, obviously. Sorry, I must have left the cloudbuster attachment on the showerhead.
So glad to hear you're doing well. I agree that's a disconcerting thing to hear from one's doctor. surgery is one of those areas where one likes to not be too adventurous.
I'm thinking a modification on the old pilots' saying applies here. Any surgery you wake up from is a good surgery.
I am very grateful for both of you, and glad you're here.
*yawns and stretches*
anybody else enfolded in the rapture of the infinite today?
bj
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Me too.
I will be as soon as the coffee spreads out through me.
I also have a cat and a dog trying to sit on my lap because they are afraid of the thunder and lightening. Any typos are due to stray paws.
unpredictablebijou
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Spreading is important. I teach it in classes.
poor beasties! Try telling them it's just Thor at a bowling tournament.
Hi Sara! Whatcha up to, besides ducking bowling balls?
bj
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I bet your students enjoy your classes. I am sure you are an astute teacher.
I secretly think the beasties are just using it as an excuse to cuddle.
Mme. Bijou!! *kisses for both your cheeks a la francaise* Why, I am writing and reading. Wanna see what I have so far:
It's good huh?
I call it "White: The Dawn of the New Snow"
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Sara Crewe
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Thanks. It is apropos to how I feel in the moment too.
So, I realize that my fiddling with avs over the past few days might have been a most ridiculous excerice. The board kept saying downloads failed and I never checked to see if they did.
Then last night out of desperation I stuck the one I have now in thinking well how can this fail , it's freaking black and white words? Well, it said it failed again and so i said %$%$^ it and was about to sign off. When I went back to the boards the m-f-ing thing was there.
Did I mention I dont have the patience to do avs well?
unpredictablebijou
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Well you're set now, cause you have the best avatar ever.
Perhaps you just need to find something really relaxing to do for a while. Like write my 30/30 submission for today, since I'm not being really whippy with that at the moment.
bj
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Please bear in mind that some surprises are good ones though if anyone set me up with a surprise party I would swing for them
Sara Crewe
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There once was a woman named bijou
whose 30/30 poem was due
try as she might
to get Sara to bite
bijou still had her poem to do.
*cackles*
There ya go. Um, I'm just tellin' ya that El is gonna say that sucks. Or maybe, Tzara will say it sucks.
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Did someone say there was an unanniversary party in here for Angeline and EE? I've brought a cake
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn276/itsannier/Picture480.jpg
http://i306.photobucket.com/albums/nn276/itsannier/Picture480.jpg
unpredictablebijou
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That inscription on the cake looks like it may be from the Kama Sutra.
It does answer the eternal post-party question:
How'd I get frosting there?
Sara, how could that poem suck? It's in an established form, it's got assonance, internal rhyme, enjambment and alliteration.
You just like hearing El and Tz say the word suck.
bj
eta: I made up some sexy hors d'oeuvres for the party.
It does answer the eternal post-party question:
How'd I get frosting there?
Sara, how could that poem suck? It's in an established form, it's got assonance, internal rhyme, enjambment and alliteration.
You just like hearing El and Tz say the word suck.
bj
eta: I made up some sexy hors d'oeuvres for the party.
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Angeline
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We have two anniversaries. The one when we met here is in October and the one where we started living together is in April. However, I see you had a camera in our bedroom.
Sara Crewe
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Oh, well, let me count the ways..
And that is true. I am guilty of feeding people words that make me happy.
Ange, baby, don't count the friends who made bad choices, count the ones who choose now to count themselves among your friends.
I am not sure what useful thing I should do for the party. How 'bout I bar tend? No comments about foxes and hen houses either...from anyone.
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