A maybe problematic scene

[HotCosmo]

Let me explain my problem. I'm writing a story game in which the first chapter is a bunch of mini-stories talking about key moments of the young life of the player. Most of them are not problematic at all, but I have fear for two of them. The first one is the character having a crush and maybe kissing her when he is fourteen. I think I did a good job not sexualizing the issue and just showing it like what it is—a crush when you're fourteen—but it's a portrait of minors in a story that later on becomes erotic. So I'll be really thankful to hear the opinions of the other authors here to make sure that I'm not messing up. (I'm going to just show parts of the scene because there are others that are not necessary.

"Wait a second, Jake." You approach the edge of the house. One more step and you will lose the signal. Someone gets out of the car.
A girl. You look at her and your heartbeat rises like a rocket. She looks so good. Since when did she look so good?
"Veronica Majors," you sigh.
"What did you say? Why are you talking about the love of my life?" Jake says.
"I have to hang up." Your eyes are still fixed on Veronica. Since when was she so... so perfect?
...
You want to look at her, but not too much, and you don't want her to look back, but deep down, yes, you do. The other weird thing is your stomach. It's not painful, but you have a constant feeling of unease that sometimes explodes and runs through your entire body.
...
You both sit on the dock. The night is quiet and the sky is clear. On the other side of the lake, you see the lights of the festival.
Bang. The sky turns green. Bang. And blue. Bang. And yellow. It's beautiful, you can't take your eyes from it. Both your hands meet on the dock. It isn't your fault, not hers.
"It's not a decision, it's an act." Your pinky slides over hers and she turns to look at you. The colors of the sky illuminate her face and you feel the urge to lean towards her.

+ Suppress the urge
+ Let yourself go

- The feeling is too strong. You approach to kiss her.

+ Kiss her
Your lips meet and an electric shock runs through your body. You have kissed Veronica Majors, your first kiss.
~ traits += nemesis
+ Not Kiss her
You lean back and the moment passes. She looks again to the sky. Nothing has happened.

Another maybe problematic scene is when the character is sixteen years old and is having his first bi panic moment after kissing a boy.

You're sitting at the table, eating dinner with your parents. The knot in your throat is unbearable.
"How was training today?" your father asks you

+ "Good."
+ "Normal as ever."
+ "Nothing remarkable."

- That's not true. Today's training was something else. The thing that should have been the most exciting is that Coach talked to you. He thinks you're talented enough to be professional.
He even told you about scouts in the next games. That should have been the big news, not that you kissed Donald Wei in the locker room after practice.
The first time you kissed a boy, it felt so similar to the first time you kissed a girl, but at the same time, so different.
"Are you okay, {name}? You seem worried."
You feel like you should tell them. To be honest, you feel like yelling to the world this big news: You kissed a boy and you like it. Or maybe it's better not to tell them. I mean, it's your business after all.

+ "I'm okay. Just a little tired."
+ "Everything is fine."
+ "Ugh, why do you always have to snoop into my life?"
Your mother sighs in frustration. "Two more years... two more years."
+ "I kissed Donald Wei after practice."
Your parents shared a glance and a small smile. "And did you like it?" Your mother asks.
    ++ "I think so."
    "That's good," she says.
    ++ "Ugh, I don't want my parents to ask me that."
    They laugh.
    -- They keep talking about other matters. You hate your parents, they are unbearable, annoying, busybodies, but sometimes they are the coolest parents in the world.

Thanks in advance for reading and the advice.

 

[Jackie.Hikaru]

I personally wouldn’t use the word problematic to describe these scenes, but my experience submitting stories with similar scenes tells me these would not pass muster…

You can always try. Scenes that are actually problematic pass all the time.

 

[Five_Inch_Heels]

Don't mention numbers.

 

[Jorunn]

Perhaps a kiss on the cheek?

 

[cw5523729]

Don't mention numbers.

^--- this. It's established that automated tools are being used. If anything is likely to attract unwanted attention, it's numbers vs the exact wording of a kiss.