Old 02-12-2014, 07:59 PM   #26
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I'm saying it ain't stars, it's our fault: we're just lousy underlings. Now the guy's dead and we're on the run?

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Old 02-12-2014, 08:03 PM   #27
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 02-12-2014, 08:09 PM   #28
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Flicking through photographs of summer sun and flowers, hard to imagine the morass outside my window is the same place and it will come again.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 02-12-2014, 08:18 PM   #29
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Hold steady my beautiful tree. I guarded your trunk from the saw with my own. Only your roots grasping the sodden earth hold you now.
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 02-12-2014, 08:23 PM   #30
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Good Lord they've burned Atlanta, Bonnie's dead and I'll never have Ashley. You don't give a damn and I...ooh look at those green curtains.
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Old 02-12-2014, 08:30 PM   #31
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Dinner for one

A lovely evening dinner, exactly as I asked. Lobster tail, shrimp, apple pie, ice cream.

The priest prays; I walk the row one last time.
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A lovely evening dinner, exactly as I asked. Lobster tail, shrimp, apple pie, ice cream.

The priest prays; I walk the row one last time.
One wonders at your crime >>>>>>>>>> runs!!
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Blessed are the cracked for it is they that let in the light
They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 02-13-2014, 01:46 AM   #33
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We always went to the drive-in in Nancy’s car. I sat in the middle, Lisa outboard, so that I could kiss them both.

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Old 02-13-2014, 01:56 AM   #34
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Old 02-13-2014, 02:26 AM   #35
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Good Lord they've burned Atlanta, Bonnie's dead and I'll never have Ashley. You don't give a damn and I...ooh look at those green curtains.
There have been a lot of really, really good responses to my prompt, but this is the funniest one.

Mr. eyez is lucky that I am happily married, else I would come looking for you, m'dear.

Not that, of course, I'd have chance of supplanting him in your affections. Nor would I want to.

But that is funny. Well, to me.
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Old 02-13-2014, 02:57 AM   #36
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I was glad to see this thread, as I'm a fan of hint fiction. I believe the term was coined by writer Robert Swartwood, who defines the genre this way: hint fiction (n) : a story of 25 words or fewer that suggests a larger, more complex story.

I think my favorite example of hint fiction was written by Ernest Hemingway:

“For sale: baby shoes, never worn.”
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Old 02-13-2014, 03:45 AM   #37
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One wonders at your crime >>>>>>>>>> runs!!
Haha. With the last two I was experimenting with twists; I feel it's an important element (to make the prose interesting, even at this length), but I can't quite capture it yet, and I think my first one was more poetic. And then there are theognis' examples to consider, which are really, really short and still manage to set up a complete scene...

I liked this one:

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Hold steady my beautiful tree. I guarded your trunk from the saw with my own. Only your roots grasping the sodden earth hold you now.
I know which tree you're talking about, due to the bar thread, but suspending that knowledge, this serves as a kickstart to different scenes.

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Old 02-13-2014, 03:51 AM   #38
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Searching for the spring

Upward tunnel of green. The fall's cold mist brushes my sore skin. Majestic white butterflies dance through shafts of sunlight. I'll never leave this pool.

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Old 02-13-2014, 04:12 AM   #39
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Pushes me against the wall throws away my hat kisses me bites me draws blood—I hold her thigh.

"Did you kill them?" I ask.

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Old 02-13-2014, 07:42 AM   #40
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Tricky got me in

A salacious slip of the tongue; that little push made her shudder. She looked at me, unsure whether to slap or kiss me. As intended.
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Old 02-13-2014, 07:52 AM   #41
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caught between high-tide and snow-melt flood, she was late realising standing on the river's bank was not the best place to be.
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"all fur-trimmed wellies, no knickers, that one" muttered a disgruntled resident lugging sandbags; finishing her piece to camera she turned, flashed him a smile.
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she sweats year-long in a kitchen, greasy, dreaming of snow. in january, she books two summer weeks in barbados - packs sun cream, slow roasts.
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Old 02-13-2014, 08:28 AM   #45
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a recipe of words, a little of this, a touch of that. allow to rest before turning up the heat. sticky fingers all licked clean.
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Old 02-13-2014, 08:41 AM   #46
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tucked in time between books and dreams, her life seemed something of an alternate reality - one of many varied worlds she inhabited, day to day.
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a fish in a pebble in a river running bright and sweet - past, present, future; history eroded, the fish wriggles free ~ laughing, swims, leaps.
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Ok, wow. I liked the previous one (tucked in time between books and dreams) very much, but this one is really cool!
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Ok, wow. I liked the previous one (tucked in time between books and dreams) very much, but this one is really cool!
cheers, tsotha! it's a HarryHill-inspired poem
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Old 02-13-2014, 01:22 PM   #50
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There have been a lot of really, really good responses to my prompt, but this is the funniest one.

Mr. eyez is lucky that I am happily married, else I would come looking for you, m'dear.

Not that, of course, I'd have chance of supplanting him in your affections. Nor would I want to.

But that is funny. Well, to me.
Yeah well I have a crush on your digital persona, too. Always have. I suppose it's best to bear in mind that EE and Mrs. T-zed have to deal with us 24/7. A sobering thought, eh?

Did you see my James Brown American Sentence? That one really happened!

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