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This seems more like a cop-out than poetry.....a bit dumming down
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This seems more like a cop-out than poetry.....a bit dumming down
'merican Sentences : lifetimes, emotions, heartbreaks compacted into syllables ,not cop-outs
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Décolletage: a perfected reason for peripheral vision.





I know, not very poetic, but I've strained to keep looking at a woman's eyes enough times to know that it's a species true statement. Or, I guess, a Tzara true statement.

The irony in this is biological. Sharp vision and color vision are the function of cones, which are clustered primarily in the macula of the retina. Peripheral vision (everything else) is largely the function of the rods (uh huh), which "are more numerous, some 120 million, and are more sensitive than the cones. However, they are not sensitive to color."

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Big American kitsch-mobile gliding on a slow undulating highway

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A damp starburst on the sunbather’s gusset suggests she’s ready for plucking

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Big American kitsch-mobile gliding on a slow undulating highway

Auguste sent Camille mad because Claudel was a better sculptor than Rodin

A damp starburst on the sunbather’s gusset suggests she’s ready for plucking

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hey, bogus

i'm having trouble reconciling the imagery in that third A.S: starburst - i can see the radiating shape and link it with the ocean via 'starfish'. 'sunbather's gusset' doesn't have to mean bikini bottom, but that's where my mind goes with heat, sunbather, and damp. so we're talking primal as the ocean, the stuff of life (which can link back through starburst as in 'we're all made of stardust') and this then jars against 'plucking' which suggests ripe fruit (rather than chickens,lol).
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hey, bogus

i'm having trouble reconciling the imagery in that third A.S: starburst - i can see the radiating shape and link it with the ocean via 'starfish'. 'sunbather's gusset' doesn't have to mean bikini bottom, but that's where my mind goes with heat, sunbather, and damp. so we're talking primal as the ocean, the stuff of life (which can link back through starburst as in 'we're all made of stardust') and this then jars against 'plucking' which suggests ripe fruit (rather than chickens,lol).
To explain it would kill the surrealistic quality of it butters.

Nice meandering thoughts though.
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To explain it would kill the surrealistic quality of it butters.

Nice meandering thoughts though.
oh. ok.

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Wallace is a ghost strolling on my poem's horizon: what are the odds?
None, I'd say because he was an atheist, although I suspect you knew that which makes Walllace into something different than what is said. I'm not a big fan of short poetry, but if I'm correct, this says a lot more than what it says.
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None, I'd say because he was an atheist, although I suspect you knew that which makes Walllace into something different than what is said. I'm not a big fan of short poetry, but if I'm correct, this says a lot more than what it says.
I was thinking of Wallace Stevens and his work as an insurance analyst, so the "odds" was also a play on that.

I don't know how well I'm succeeding but I find this American Sentence remarkable in its flexibility. I never liked writing haiku because I didn't feel an affinity for it, but this form has really grabbed my attention.
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I was thinking of Wallace Stevens and his work as an insurance analyst, so the "odds" was also a play on that.

I don't know how well I'm succeeding but I find this American Sentence remarkable in its flexibility. I never liked writing haiku because I didn't feel an affinity for it, but this form has really grabbed my attention.
*Must NOT think Wallace and Gromit*
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You can if you want. Maybe it makes it better that way.
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