Old 12-18-2013, 05:39 PM   #1
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minimalism in poetry can be likened to the Haiku form but not as structured.
Try to write a minimalist poem where each line forms a complete thought/image with the least amount of words. No line restrictions. talk all you want and have fun.
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Old 12-18-2013, 05:45 PM   #2
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No!
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Old 12-18-2013, 05:49 PM   #3
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No.
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No?

That one "No" without punctuation needs a comma.
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Old 12-18-2013, 05:53 PM   #4
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I tried to answer as follows:
-No

But did you know that you have to enter at least 5 characters in a reply?
That would seem to limit minimalism.

Ya No?
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Old 12-18-2013, 07:32 PM   #5
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minimalism in poetry can be likened to the Haiku form but not as structured.
Try to write a minimalist poem where each line forms a complete thought/image with the least amount of words. No line restrictions. talk all you want and have fun.
Harry, half of the examples are longer than most of the stuff in new poems.
I had a thought
it died once
and then I saw you
Fuck <ambiguous swing
Deja Vu
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Harry, half of the examples are longer than most of the stuff in new poems.
I had a thought
it died once
and then I saw you
Fuck <ambiguous swing
Deja Vu
hence no dedications
..............................or predications
frigid pastel dawn
gruff voice greets
weary salutation
fuck morning
fuck camping
zippppppppp
cold piss
return to warm screams
heat me up baby
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Sorry:
Pee -->
Screams
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Old 12-18-2013, 08:51 PM   #8
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Sorry:
Pee -->
Screams
=
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now there is a thought i'd rather not think about
is it ok to think about the last line of the other poem?

you done with the les murry book?
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you done with the les murry book?
Finished Fredy/Freddy Neptune ages ago (Les changes the spelling of Freddy depending on what language it is. It annoyed me until I figured that out). I recommend it.

Now reading Virginia Woolfe. Somehow I've never read any of her writing. It's surprising me.
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Finished Fredy/Freddy Neptune ages ago (Les changes the spelling of Freddy depending on what language it is. It annoyed me until I figured that out). I recommend it.

Now reading Virginia Woolfe. Somehow I've never read any of her writing. It's surprising me.
I was always afraid...
me bad

Right now I can't read Freddy, I'm detoxing from a 2 month nightmare, doing quite well with it. It is good to see you back. In action.
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minimalism in poetry can be likened to the Haiku form but not as structured.
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Do you want to know where I went with the arrow?
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Do you want to know where I went with the arrow?
fuck was an object and not an exclamation?
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ha, counting on you, seen variations of this always amusing once you decipher the puzzle/symbolism
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A couple of days ago I posted on the describe your day in 3 words thread.
After I wrote it I thought "hey that looks kind of Haiku-ey"

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General Tso makes war
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opening soon
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A couple of days ago I posted on the describe your day in 3 words thread.
After I wrote it I thought "hey that looks kind of Haiku-ey"

Rain
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And there you have it. a single image in phonic symbols
I see a shape perhaps in a mack, slump shouldered at an imagined station.
and duck rolls, it even rhymes. welcome to the pobo Echick.
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a: white (ugly duckling to swan/winter)
b: wight (dead things with some remnants of life force)
c: all wight? (michael Barrymore)
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A couple of days ago I posted on the describe your day in 3 words thread.
After I wrote it I thought "hey that looks kind of Haiku-ey"

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so neat! really like what that does. welcome to the forum Erochic

how do pronounce your username? does the end bit sound like chick or does it have a french beret accent?
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that's novel, didn't see that one, of course I'm not a voyeur, hence I wouldn't see it he said
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