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Old 01-13-2014, 08:25 AM   #101
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My thanks to tod, Maria, UYS aka Annie, OldBear, tazz, Ash, and Cleardaynow for taking the time to comment on "Gleaning."
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Old 01-13-2014, 01:43 PM   #102
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Thanks to Ashesh9, Maria2394 and Underyourspell form comments on my poem
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Old 01-13-2014, 06:14 PM   #103
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Thank you to Cleardaynow for the kind comment on "Morse Code" and don't be ashemed of following Maria2394, one of the finest poets here and a kind and pertinent commentator
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Old 01-14-2014, 02:25 AM   #104
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What I like about this crisp poem, Neo, is that it can have many voices. I spent a career working in prisons and can easily imagine the same thoughts running through an inmate's mind. Then, of course, there are the psychiatric seiings Todski alluded to as well as therapeutic communities where at least some of the patients are there involuntarily.
Neo's comment didn't come through on the quote feature, but I agree with him on the Xanax addiction. I am horribly allergic to benzo's. They turned me into an evil cruel bitch and I didn't even recognize myself. It took two stints in rehab and 2 arrests to get me straight. I would not normally admit this, but it is the truth and I am still trying to make it up to people I hurt, and I include myself in that.

Anyone who has the problem, and it isn't a problem for everyone, but some people just cannot tolerate them. And, I was told by a doctor in rehab, that once a person stops taking them, it can take up to three years for the brain to rewire itself and begin producing GABA again. I won't bore y'all with stuff on neurotransmitters, but GABA produced by ones own brain is very important!

hugs people, be well, love each other and forgive if it is in your heart.

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Old 01-14-2014, 04:29 AM   #105
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thank you Oldbear'n Tazz for kind comments on American Sentence
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Old 01-16-2014, 05:47 PM   #106
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I must thank Maria2394 for trawling my back-catalogue and leaving wonderfully generous comments on "A Discussion about Fidelity in a Pub" and "Ruby, My Dear, Take 3"

When so much time is spent on the new, it is nice to know that some people remember the past x
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Old 01-19-2014, 06:03 AM   #107
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thanks, everyone, for recent comments/favouriting on 'why i bleed ink', 'altered state', and 'cathedral of bone'.

re. cathedral of bone:
harry, those funny coincidences!

pelegrino, glad it elevates - the music i was listening to tried to steal my heart straight from its cage/protection of ribs. the cathedral's image on screen (with its ribbed structure arcing above the nave) paired well with the arc of ribs, so they came together in this.

oldbear and tsotha - glad it surprised and pleased in equal measure
oneiria - thanks for the comment!

re. why i bleed ink:
ishtat - you have me wondering now what to do their... the 'you' was plural, which then turned to 'their' as in individuals amongst the group. perhaps i should also retitle as 'the inappropriate gift', drop that line and return the last two of the original which address the bleeding ink point. thanks for giving me a headache

tsotha - how much do we reveal in the bleedout, how much do we hide? sounds like a poem you need to write! perhaps those last lines need reinstating, re my comments to ish above.

ash - blood, ink, still messy but in this case it's the blood people are more squeamish about.

gm - meshing? i wouldn't even know where to start

re. altered state:
gm - you're right about the clunk in part one. also the damned typo that was meant to be 'flickering' of course. what the hell 'fickering' was, i dunno, lol. guess my eyes were tired. the 3rd's my favourite, too. the whole needs revisiting and revising. thanks

ash - thankyou

it also came as a surprise to me that the term mesmerising came from the other, animal magnetism, since they seem quite different in today's usage. i'm glad they originally meant the same/similar, since there's something about an open fire that easily mesmerises me with its magnetism!
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Old 01-19-2014, 11:33 PM   #108
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Thnx to Marie420 & Oldbear for favouritin' Matronly Slut & Mature Ripenin' & thank You Oldbear 'n Ishtat for kind comments
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Old 01-19-2014, 11:36 PM   #109
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Correct'shun of errata

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Thnx to Marie420 & Oldbear for favouritin' Matronly Slut & Mature Ripenin' & thank You Oldbear 'n Ishtat for kind comments
It should be Marcie420 not Marie420 , sorry for tge inconvenience .
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Old 01-20-2014, 09:02 AM   #110
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My thanks to butters for recommending "My Children, Of Course, Are Grown Now" in NPR. Thanks too for her comments as well as those from Tsotha, Ash, Cleardaynow, and Todski.

The comments were very helpful to me in that they made me think about the delicate balance between enough description and too much. Interestingly, butters' interpretation, entirely credible, fits the poem better in my opinion than the narrative I had in my mind inspired by John Hull, a British theologian at the University of Birmingham who started to go blind as a young husband and father:

http://www.nytimes.com/interactive/2...ness.html?_r=0

This is what I like about this site. When people give the writer thoughtful consideration, you gain a new perspective. I'm not dissatisfied with the poem, but it can be finessed a bit more.
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Old 01-21-2014, 04:31 PM   #111
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Thank you to Ashesh9 and especially gerenmountaineer for kind comments on "Subtraction".

greenmountaineer commented yesterday on the importance of thoughtful consideration in comments, and he certainly supplied that tonight, for which I am seriously grateful.
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Old 01-23-2014, 11:04 AM   #112
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Thanks to OldBear63 and Tsotha for taking the time to comment on "In the Duat."
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Old 01-24-2014, 09:24 PM   #113
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Thank you to Butters & Tsotha for nice comments on " pairs de Opposicion "
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Old 01-27-2014, 08:37 AM   #114
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Thanks to no one since no one commented on Bites , Ancient Hymn or Tenderness / roughness
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Old 01-29-2014, 01:48 PM   #115
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Thank you to Oldbear63 for his kind and discerning comment on "Trawlers and Drifters"
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Old 01-30-2014, 03:39 PM   #116
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Thanks to Old bear & Tsotha for comments on Bites'n Tenderness/roughness
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Old 02-07-2014, 09:00 PM   #117
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Thanks Ange and gm for reading/commenting on my poem, Anna Makebelieve. I'm not going to say if it's a dream or not!

And yes, Ange, that was a typo. I fixed it and really can't believe I missed it. That's what I get for hurrying when submitting.

Thanks gm, the extra "last" I dropped when I resubmitted my edit. I had meant for it to be there, but reading again with fresher eyes, I could see it wasn't needed to get the feel of the poem across.
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Old 02-08-2014, 05:23 AM   #118
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Although perhaps I'm biased as a fellow Northern New Englander, the passing of this poet is noteworthy. She had a unique gift.

The obituary following has several examples of her art and well worth the read.

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Old 02-09-2014, 09:00 PM   #119
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Thank you, Cleardaynow and Angeline, for your comments on "Beauty and its Beast." Your comments about the face mask were very helpful.

Thanks also to epatman for posting it as a favorite.
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Old 02-11-2014, 02:17 PM   #120
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Thank You , Demure for comment on " it goes either way ...."
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Old 02-14-2014, 12:03 AM   #121
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Thanks for the comments on 'Gratitude' hope you had as much fun reading it as I did writing
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Old 02-16-2014, 10:57 AM   #122
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Thank you Maria for your comment on my illustrated poem, "Goblin Topplers". The perpetrators in the destruction of one of the hoodoos (goblins) in Goblin Valley State Park are being prosecuted on felony charges (see link on the Wikipedia about it). The title of my illustrated poem came from locals and Utah news stations, wasn't solely my creation.
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Old 02-18-2014, 09:27 AM   #123
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thank you greenmountaineer for your comment on my poem melt and thaw, I greatly appreciate the feed back, I need to work on editing so I might as well start with this one.
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Old 02-19-2014, 08:45 PM   #124
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Sorry if this isn't the proper place, but I would like to thank Todski and Harry for bumping all those threads for me. That's a whole lotta reading for me. I wish that Mushroom of Knowledge was something I could eat and absorb.
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Old 02-19-2014, 09:36 PM   #125
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Sorry if this isn't the proper place, but I would like to thank Todski and Harry for bumping all those threads for me. That's a whole lotta reading for me. I wish that Mushroom of Knowledge was something I could eat and absorb.
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