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Old 12-31-2013, 02:02 PM   #76
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In other words - you follow a drummer...and I do not (musically speaking)
It's an interesting distinction, and one of the reasons I think commenting can be challenging. Different strokes, drums.. and tense preferences.

I had never thought about what tense I prefer to write in, now I am going to start paying attention to that. I have a feeling that I neglect the future. Next year I will not!!!

Happy new year all.
Dear Desejo, I merely meant that we have different drummers in our heads--mine is sort of a cross between Tony Williams playing with Miles Davis and Billy Higgins playing with Ornette Who's yours?

You have got me writing a poem about tenses now!

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Old 12-31-2013, 02:38 PM   #77
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Dear Desejo, I merely meant that we have different drummers in our heads--mine is sort of a cross between Tony Williams playing with Miles Davis and Billy Higgins playing with Ornette Who's yours?

You have got me writing a poem about tenses now!

Happy New Year to you and to all here
My drummer sonds like this don't tense up friday
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Old 12-31-2013, 02:44 PM   #78
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My drummer sonds like this don't tense up friday
whose is this, then?
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Old 12-31-2013, 03:22 PM   #79
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My drummer sonds like this don't tense up friday
"The Past Sure is Tense" Captain Beefheart

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U2h_avVO6kY
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Old 12-31-2013, 03:38 PM   #80
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"The Past Sure is Tense" Captain Beefheart

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U2h_avVO6kY
I have got to fix this thing. tonight's the night for music. I have a painting called drummer I can march there too miles down the road.
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Old 01-02-2014, 06:50 PM   #81
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Ashesh9, thank you for your comment on Time. It strikes a nerve, as I have viewed time as a rather hostile and destructive aspect of existence for many years. I have to agree with the imagery of a devouring force the Bhagavad Gita portrays. It feels odd to say happy new year after such a statement about time, but hope is often at odds with perception, so happy new year to you as well.

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Old 01-04-2014, 01:26 AM   #82
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Thanks Tod & Oldbear for appreciatin' Cane in Spain
Thank you Harry for commenting & appreciatin' Delicious Possibility , also thank you UYS for kind compliments for Delicious Possibility !
Thank you Desejo for smilin' @ Cane in Spain : variant
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My thanks to butters, Ashesh, MzFly, fridayam, and Anonymous for taking the time to comment on "Washing Dishes with the Dali Lama" and to butters for the recommendation.

A special thanks to Ash for noticing the typo in "Dal(a)i."
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Old 01-06-2014, 10:39 AM   #84
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GM thanx for kind comment on Realizin' Truth --A9
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Old 01-06-2014, 05:21 PM   #85
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Thank you to Ashesh9 and Desejo for kind comments on "Present, Tense" x
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Old 01-07-2014, 07:19 PM   #86
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Thank you to Oldbear63, Neonurotic, Angeline, Tristesse2 and Ashesh9 for your comments on Precious Stone ....... much appreciated
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Old 01-08-2014, 07:53 AM   #87
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cheers, annie, re majestic piracy not sure you're right about that cat suit, though maybe in another 6 months, lols.
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Old 01-08-2014, 08:22 PM   #88
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Thanks butters for commenting on my poem, Northwester!
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Old 01-09-2014, 05:39 AM   #89
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thanx to Ishtat & UYS for comments on "Martyrs arise again ..." & for Tod a great big hug for appreciation of my sentiments behind the words !!
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Old 01-09-2014, 09:30 PM   #90
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Much thanks to butters, gm, todski, pelegrino and ishtat for comments on my poem, moonstruck. It is about rehab. Xanax addiction even though prescribed is a bitch to get over. Like they saying goes, sometimes what cures you can kill you, not that I think Xani cures, it numbs.
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Old 01-10-2014, 05:21 AM   #91
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thanks, greenmountaineer re majestic piracy

i think what's going on are the cat suit and sounds that maybe usher more the image of a lara croft type to mind - and hell, angelina jolie's pretty sexy, let's face it the reality would look stunningly different, but this is a poemy thing, not real reality so i can get away with it
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Old 01-10-2014, 09:50 AM   #92
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Much thanks to butters, gm, todski, pelegrino and ishtat for comments on my poem, moonstruck. It is about rehab. Xanax addiction even though prescribed is a bitch to get over. Like they saying goes, sometimes what cures you can kill you, not that I think Xani cures, it numbs.
What I like about this crisp poem, Neo, is that it can have many voices. I spent a career working in prisons and can easily imagine the same thoughts running through an inmate's mind. Then, of course, there are the psychiatric seiings Todski alluded to as well as therapeutic communities where at least some of the patients are there involuntarily.
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Thanks for the comments on Fay Song...A9, Neo, Tazz, butters OldBear
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Old 01-10-2014, 05:43 PM   #94
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Thanks to ishtat, butters, and Ashesh for their comments in NPR about "Freud on the Stoning of Stephen" and to pellegrino and fridayam for their comments. Ash: you make a good point, but illustrated poetry has never been my cup of tea.

A belated thanks to todski for commenting on the nonsensical paradelle, "What the Hell Was That?"
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Annie, thank you for commenting on my poem, moonstruck.
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Old 01-12-2014, 01:42 PM   #96
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Thanks to Tazz , Tod & Butters for kind comments on Percep'shun & to GM & Tazz for kind comments on Ironical
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Maria2394, bless you for the kind comment on "Morse Code" I hope to hear from you and read some new work of yours soon x
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Old 01-12-2014, 07:26 PM   #98
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Btw, I noticed a comment by Tazz had been "removed by administration". Much as I hated his drivel, why remove him and not the foul comments from Anon that litter this site on poems and especially stories?
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Oldbear , sorry for delay , i just read your comment on Realizin' Truth , thank you for commentin' !
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Old 01-12-2014, 09:25 PM   #100
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Thanks to Tazz , Tod & Butters for kind comments on Percep'shun & to GM & Tazz for kind comments on Ironical
As per Fridaym's comments above : i too find Tazz's harmless & innocent comments bein' removed even after Poets have publicly thanked him for comments !?!
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