An observation

[1sickbastard]

Azure canvas
A story told
In molten copper
And hammered gold

Up on high
The colors bled
Coral pink
Bloody red

Orange, purple
Did astound
The gloaming light
As sun goes down.

[Swompgurl]

I like it!

[twelveoone]

Originally Posted by Swompgurl

I like it!

why?
no dispersion on above said poem
the key to writing is the why it effects you, followed by the next question
How?
did it do that

editing this to add, I apologize if it seems a little hard, and I certainly am not asking for a detailed analysis, nor is a simple "I like this" wrong. Just suggesting the next step.

Welcome, Swompgurl
you just met the resident prick
and survived

[twelveoone]

Originally Posted by 1sickbastard

Azure canvas
A story told
In molten copper
And hammered gold

Up on high
The colors bled
Coral pink
Bloody red

Orange, purple
Did astound
The gloaming light
As sun goes down.

Question, where is the story?

Did astound?
how, on who's say so?

otherwise nice sunset, a bit garish perhaps