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02-14-2013, 05:13 AM
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Really Really Experienced
BONNIEBREA is offline
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02-14-2013, 11:55 AM
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In a band!!
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This is very, very good. Actually the only mistake I can find with it is that I think "smidgin" should be spelled with two I's, but it's colloquialism anyhow so there isn't necessary a "correct" spelling for it. And when I have written multi-paragraph essays to authors on this site about their spelling, grammar, punctuation and language usage, your perfection shines out all the more.
Damn fine work. Keep writing. 
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02-14-2013, 03:32 PM
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Mallory Heart Surgeon.
Bramblethorn is offline
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Originally Posted by BONNIEBREA
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I liked it and gave it 5. Not a sexy story as such, but an interesting one. |
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02-14-2013, 09:38 PM
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BONNIEBREA is offline
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Originally Posted by CWatson
This is very, very good. Actually the only mistake I can find with it is that I think "smidgin" should be spelled with two I's, but it's colloquialism anyhow so there isn't necessary a "correct" spelling for it. And when I have written multi-paragraph essays to authors on this site about their spelling, grammar, punctuation and language usage, your perfection shines out all the more.
Damn fine work. Keep writing. |
I appreciate your comments, CW. I don't have an editor looking at these, or a beta reader, or even a proofreader. So things slip by, and I hope they don't take too much away from the story. |
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02-14-2013, 09:45 PM
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BONNIEBREA is offline
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Originally Posted by Bramblethorn
I liked it and gave it 5. Not a sexy story as such, but an interesting one.
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Thanks Bramble for the comment here and on the story.
I can't say I've ever sat down at a keyboard with the intent of writing 'erotica.' Too many conventions and formulas have to be observed (as with any other sub-genre: private eye story, romance stuff, science fiction, westerns, etc.). I just write literary stories that don't shy away from or euphemize the sexual interactions between the characters. So I very much appreciate readers like you who are not just looking to read about how many inches went into how wet a receptacle.
Thank you for taking the time to comment.
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02-15-2013, 03:41 AM
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Mallory Heart Surgeon.
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Originally Posted by BONNIEBREA
I can't say I've ever sat down at a keyboard with the intent of writing 'erotica.' Too many conventions and formulas have to be observed (as with any other sub-genre: private eye story, romance stuff, science fiction, westerns, etc.). I just write literary stories that don't shy away from or euphemize the sexual interactions between the characters. So I very much appreciate readers like you who are not just looking to read about how many inches went into how wet a receptacle.
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Heh. I know the feeling; I'm about to stick my neck out by posting a no-sex-at-all chapter in Lesbian Sex, because it just didn't seem appropriate to have people screwing in this chapter. I'll be interested to see how it goes - although anybody who's made it through the first 11 chapters probably has a lot of tolerance for talky stuff anyway. |
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05-09-2013, 02:33 PM
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Very well done. Nice chops.
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05-09-2013, 05:58 PM
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Virgin
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Originally Posted by BONNIEBREA
I just write literary stories that don't shy away from or euphemize the sexual interactions between the characters.
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Stroke stories written as stroke stories are boring. No matter how one interprets the word "stroke." I'd far rather read a well-written story about people which happens to contain some sex. This was nicely done.
And I think you chose well to post it in EC rather than LW. You know how the audience over at LW gets. |
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05-10-2013, 10:33 AM
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SecondCircle is offline
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Great story. A lot different from the usual you see here in several ways.
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