Old 02-03-2013, 01:01 PM   #1
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Introduction and Hello

Hello. I'm a new user to the site and an aspiring erotica author. I haven't submitted anything to the site yet, but I have written a few short pieces which I've posted to the reddit /r/eroticliterature subreddit.

Is there anyone here who'd be willing to critique the work and offer advice for improvement? Negative criticism is welcome. I've done plenty of fiction workshops IRL.

Or, post to simply say hello. I'd like to get to know folks here and enter the community respectfully. Thanks!

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May I Buy That For You?

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Old 02-03-2013, 01:34 PM   #2
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Welcome to Lit and the AH, Penny.

You would be better served in regard to the critiquing of your stories by posting them on the Story Discussion Circle thread.

http://forum.literotica.com/forumdisplay.php?f=14

Have fun here and once again, welcome.
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Old 02-03-2013, 01:41 PM   #3
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[quote=PenelopePendergasp;43216550]Hello. I'm a new user to the site and an aspiring erotica author. I haven't submitted anything to the site yet, but I have written a few short pieces which I've posted to the reddit /r/eroticliterature subreddit.

Is there anyone here who'd be willing to critique the work and offer advice for improvement? Negative criticism is welcome. I've done plenty of fiction workshops IRL.

Or, post to simply say hello. I'd like to get to know folks here and enter the community respectfully. Thanks!

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I too am somewhat new to Lit, I'm finding that navigating one's way around can be a little challenging at first but oh so worth it. I'd love to collaborate works with you. If I can be helpful then please shoot me an email at: lincolnjames173@yahoo.com. I hope to hear from you soon.
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Old 02-03-2013, 01:46 PM   #4
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A welcome for the little newbies from the good little witch.

You might want to redact that email address. I think there are rules against such things.
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Old 02-03-2013, 01:47 PM   #5
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Hello. I'm a new user to the site and an aspiring erotica author. I haven't submitted anything to the site yet, but I have written a few short pieces which I've posted to the reddit /r/eroticliterature subreddit.

Is there anyone here who'd be willing to critique the work and offer advice for improvement? Negative criticism is welcome. I've done plenty of fiction workshops IRL.

Or, post to simply say hello. I'd like to get to know folks here and enter the community respectfully. Thanks!
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I too am somewhat new to Lit, I'm finding that navigating one's way around can be a little challenging at first but oh so worth it. I'd love to collaborate works with you. If I can be helpful then please shoot me an email at: lxxx. I hope to hear from you soon.
Welcome.

You'll want to remove that e-mail address since that's against forum guidelines
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Old 02-03-2013, 02:10 PM   #6
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TE999: Thank you. I'll look over that thread and make an introduction there.

LincolnJames: I'd like to just get to know some of the regulars and get my bearings before I consider collaborations. Good luck with your work. Perhaps some other time.

EDIT: Also, thank you to everyone else for your hellos and welcomes!

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Old 02-03-2013, 02:47 PM   #7
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Welcome to our merry band of literary jabberwockies.

Put some stories up on the site and give us links to them. The Story Feedback forum might be of some use as well.
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Old 02-03-2013, 02:54 PM   #8
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LaRascasse:

OK. I'm working out how to do that now. I have an older work I could submit in .doc form. Those three links go to my most recent pieces.

I have to figure out the submissions system anyway. It may take some time and a few mistakes though.
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Old 02-03-2013, 03:16 PM   #9
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Welcome. Here are the submission FAQs to help you figure out the ins and outs of submission.
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Old 02-03-2013, 03:32 PM   #10
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Old 02-03-2013, 03:34 PM   #11
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OK. I've submitted an older work into the queue. Frankly, it's one I don't much like. And I lost the last draft. This is an earlier revision. Not promoting this well, am I? lol.

I don't have any link to the submission content though. Perhaps a mod must approve it first.

damppanties: I'll read through that FAQ. Thank you.
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OK. I've submitted an older work into the queue. Frankly, it's one I don't much like. And I lost the last draft. This is an earlier revision. Not promoting this well, am I? lol.


You might want to post the ones you linked to if you think they're better work.
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I don't have any link to the submission content though. Perhaps a mod must approve it first.
The link is to the posted story, which you can link after the story is reviewed by the site owners and posted. Will take a few days.
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Old 02-03-2013, 03:51 PM   #13
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Damppanties:

So I can resubmit material I posted at reddit over here? OK.

My favorite of them is "May I Buy That For You?" Though I have received a private critique from a trusted friend who argued that the end is emotionally weak and needs revision.

The Natalie stories are unfinished. I could post them but I think it might be better to finish a few more chapters and submit a complete work. Not sure if I could edit retroactively to fix continuity and dangling plot holes if I submit as a serial.

EDIT: Thanks NaokoSmith!

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So I can resubmit material I posted at reddit over here? OK.
Yep. You can post work that's previously posted elsewhere and vice versa. You own the copyright of your work posted at Lit, so you can post it in multiple locations.

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My favorite of them is "May I Buy That For You?" Though I have received a private critique from a trusted friend who argued that the end is emotionally weak and needs revision.

The Natalie stories are unfinished. I could post them but I think it might be better to finish a few more chapters and submit a complete work. Not sure if I could edit retroactively to fix continuity and dangling plot holes if I submit as a serial.
Yes, you can edit and resubmit work but the vote / ratings do not set back to zero in case of an edit and resubmit.
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No worries!

BTW, you can get a volunteer editor on the Volunteer Editor programme.

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Old 02-03-2013, 04:08 PM   #16
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NaokoSmith:

You might want to actually _read_ the work before making that suggestion. I suspect a retraction may be forthcoming. lol.
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