Old 02-12-2013, 10:08 PM   #1
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Unhappy Constructive Criticism

Not sure if this is exactly the best place for this thread. I nosed about in the others and this seemed best...

I feel as if my stories are coming across...wrong. As in, the ideas are in my head, but I'm getting garbage when I actually type them out. I have recently written two chapters of a story (first time for this kind of story) and I don't really care for them.

Would love some tweaking...advice...criticism...anything.

If! You are so kind as to help or lecture me (I said anything!) about what to do or where to post...be my guest.

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-perfect-team-1

http://www.literotica.com/s/the-perfect-team-ch-02
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Old 02-12-2013, 10:46 PM   #2
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