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Old 11-30-2012, 09:37 AM   #1
Eros5150
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Feedback Request for First Submission

I would appreciate any feedback for my first-time submission, which can be found at:
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-christmas-surprise

This was a renewed foray into writing, having submitted a couple of stories to the now-defunct WhiteShadow board ages ago.

Would be interested in anyone's thoughts, good or bad.

Thanks.
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Old 12-01-2012, 03:16 AM   #2
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Well written story. It comes within an inch of being a squick for me but replace the voyueristic mother with a neighbor lady of similar age and I'd have had to fap.
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