Old 11-06-2012, 03:47 AM   #1
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Warm hued dreams have faded
their now meaningless colors washed
to turn pale shades of gray
hopelessly covered by frost
Loves soulful summer breezes
as soft as angels hair
surrender to chilling winds of sorrow
stilled by distance, overcome with despair
A bond once regarded as eternal, sadly now is not
grasped by the cold hand of fate
love and happiness pay the highest cost
as one heart turns away
one hearts broken
and a destiny is lost
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Old 11-06-2012, 08:53 AM   #2
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q. why is this posted, are you looking for comments, critique?
q. what are you offering in return?

the reason i ask, is that often it becomes a less than zero sum game for both you and the responder
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Old 11-06-2012, 09:27 PM   #3
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Yeah maybe so, twelve Oh, but this is kinda cool...go ahead tell me about this poem?
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Old 11-12-2012, 05:28 PM   #4
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do i need a reason?

I was under the impression that I posted this poem on a thread comprised of poets and poetry lovers simply to share one that I have written. as for critique, I couldn't care less what you think of how it compares to works from poetry 101. But as for comment, I welcome them. Good, bad or thoughts in general.
And honestly, I posted it while being visited by the ghost of painful thoughts of why it was created.
I would like to thank you for taking the time to bother yourself
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Old 11-12-2012, 05:32 PM   #5
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why?

If interested, this poem was created the same way many are.
From the pain of betrayal and the misery of a broken heart
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Old 11-13-2012, 08:17 PM   #6
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Dave, I hope writing helped your healing. Poetry can be a great release.

I hope you read and write more poetry for a great variety of reasons.

Best wishes,
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Old 11-14-2012, 08:32 PM   #7
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Quote:
Originally Posted by davefxflhd View Post
If interested, this poem was created the same way many are.
From the pain of betrayal and the misery of a broken heart
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So, are you still Fucked up or is this a recent development in which case you're really fucked up?
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Old 11-19-2012, 04:49 PM   #8
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Well Mr. Hill, What I Am Is Just . . . Fucked
But Thanks For Asking
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