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Old 03-16-2004, 03:22 AM   #1
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Post Challenge: The Perfect Ten (v2.0)

Breathing a new life to the challenge that Icingsugar brought to us almost two years ago.

Remember the purpose. In Icingsugar's own words:
Can we find that perfect ten? A short line or two that says more than any brick sized novel on the bookshelf?

My own writting is often talkative, verbal and lengthy, spreading adjectives and adverbs like manure. Flowery speech can be nice, but It's always healthy to practice what you're less good at. I'll see if this can help me refine my expression and churn out the essentials.
So, once again.
Here be Poems.
Poetry in any freewheelin' form.
As long as they are ten words or shorter.

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Old 10-12-2005, 02:51 PM   #2
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Ten perfect words.

Such a small,
yet seemingly impossible,
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Old 10-12-2005, 02:54 PM   #3
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Old 10-12-2005, 04:08 PM   #4
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Old 10-12-2005, 04:15 PM   #5
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Don't force readers
to toss the bad apples:
edit!
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Old 10-12-2005, 11:43 PM   #6
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Don't force readers
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edit!
An old saw: Don't throw
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Old 10-12-2005, 11:49 PM   #7
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Restless tides
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Old 10-12-2005, 11:49 PM   #8
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Moonlit nights
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Old 10-13-2005, 01:23 AM   #9
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Old 10-13-2005, 08:37 AM   #10
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Restless tides
Alter sand and beaches
Leaving an oceanís trash

Driftwood, gnarled and
mangled, yet rubbed ever so smooth,
Precious.
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Old 10-13-2005, 08:51 AM   #11
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Old 10-13-2005, 09:29 AM   #12
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The perfect word
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Old 10-13-2005, 11:34 AM   #14
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Old 10-13-2005, 03:06 PM   #15
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forget the
'what ifs'
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Old 10-13-2005, 03:30 PM   #16
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stones?

meat?

apples?

sand?

beach?

driftwood?

Ahhh, yes...

poetry, indeed.
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Is true recognition
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or forever beyond
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Is true recognition
a glance away
or forever beyond
witness?

authenticity
transmutates archaic mold
past, present, future
all same as one....
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Old 10-13-2005, 10:00 PM   #19
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authenticity
transmutates archaic mold
past, present, future
all same as one....

Past, present, future
artificially partitioned,
fractured
spinning apart into
nothing...
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Past, present, future
artificially partitioned,
fractured
spinning apart into
nothing...

nothing says I am
pan flutes laugh digesting fraility
saying "dance with me"

and I say...yes..
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Old 10-13-2005, 10:28 PM   #21
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While Pan pipes
flaunt their youth,
frailty supplants
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Old 10-14-2005, 03:20 AM   #22
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so few places left to write
fewer yet to read
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Old 10-15-2005, 06:30 AM   #24
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Lightbulb

Tooting
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Lips puckered,
moistened.
Slow winded,

welcoming

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Can I

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