Old 07-03-2014, 08:43 PM   #1
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Wink Demon Pi

Good evening, guys and gals.

I hope everything is set to have a great weekend.

I've been working on Demon Pi for quite a while now, going back to part one here http://www.literotica.com/s/the-devils-number. I've gotten a few fine bits of feedback and some good comments, but as I've picked it back up after a long stretch I'd love to get some more. I want it to be a damn fun story for people to read, so the more constructive feedback, the better!

Again that's
The Devil's Number, Demon Pi Part 1 (it's up to part 16)
http://www.literotica.com/s/the-devils-number
Humor and Satire

I look forward to browsing this forum myself and trying to give some feedback on others too.

Thanks,
Zack
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Old 08-11-2014, 11:50 PM   #2
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Wow, and over 10k views for the first part of Demon Pi. Thanks folks! Likewise thanks for the good private feedback. Totally appreciated.
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Old 08-12-2014, 11:23 AM   #3
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2nd paragraph ". . . action of a man once he gained left home."
You need to edit and proofread and ask for input BEFORE you publish.
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Old 08-12-2014, 09:25 PM   #4
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Well thank you for the feedback, it is appreciated. Alas as with any amatuer writing sometimes things do get missed on read throughs. Again, thanks.
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