Originally Posted by SOMEthinBLOOMin
Hey everyone. My signature links to my first published story and it's only partially done. Feedback would be appreciated, thanks!
First, I'm only responding because your thread was stepped on.
I only read down about six paragraphs, because I won't invest time/effort into a series that isn't completed. The writing's quite good, though, and the flow of the storytelling is also good. The phrase "a $20" is incorrect. The best rendering in text is "a twenty-dollar bill." (in most cases--but not all--numbers under 100 should be written out. Similarly, later on, it should be "twenty-four hours," not "24 hours." The number rules can get tricky, though).
So, on the basis of what little I was willing to invest in an uncompleted story, I'd say, yes, keep writing and posting.