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Originally Posted by SOMEthinBLOOMin
Hey everyone. My signature links to my first published story and it's only partially done. Feedback would be appreciated, thanks!
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First, I'm only responding because your thread was stepped on.
I only read down about six paragraphs, because I won't invest time/effort into a series that isn't completed. The writing's quite good, though, and the flow of the storytelling is also good. The phrase "a $20" is incorrect. The best rendering in text is "a twenty-dollar bill." (in most cases--but not all--numbers under 100 should be written out. Similarly, later on, it should be "twenty-four hours," not "24 hours." The number rules can get tricky, though).
So, on the basis of what little I was willing to invest in an uncompleted story, I'd say, yes, keep writing and posting.
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