Longer/multiple story roommates idea

Tundi · 09-09-2013, 05:09 PM

Hey talented literotica writers. I've had this idea in my head I'd love to see someone more talented in this field bring to life.

Basically the idea is for a long story (or a series of short stories) revolving around a college-age guy who, needing a place to stay, moves in with his girlfriend and her two female roommates. The two roommates are polar opposites--one is a loud, crazy, voluptuous girl, and the other is shy, quiet, and skinny (the girlfriend being somewhere in the middle of the two).

The early parts of the story would deal with two main things: the guy living with three hot young women (which would surely include some accidental nudity/glimpses--or not so accidental on the part of the crazier roommate, who seems to take pleasure in showing off for/teasing the guy when his girlfriend is around), and getting into situations where he can't help but stare, but has to keep his cool around the girlfriend (maybe they all go swimming, or the girls work out together in the living room, or it's laundry day and they're all skimpily dressed). The other element at this point would be the couple trying to have sex but always being walked in on/interupted/cockblocked (as the girlfriend shares a bedroom with one or both of the other girls).

Later in the story, things would heat up more. The guy sees the shy roommate naked--maybe she comes in after a night out and drunkenly changes clothes without caring/noticing he's there, or maybe he walks in on her going to town on herself. The girlfriend finds out, teases him about it, and starts bringing it up during sex--getting turned on herself by the idea. This could lead to the girlfriend drunkenly making out with her roommate, or some kind of going-to-far truth-or-dare between the three of them. It all builds up to the couple having sex right in front of the shy roommate (maybe her joining them).

From that point, the girlfriend and her shy roommate become more and more attached to each other, more and more sexual with each other, actual pushing the guy more and more out of the relationship. Spurned, he finally gives in to the louder roommate's advances and has some dirty, rough sex with her.

Not sure where it would go from there, but I think this is a pretty solid base for a longer story. Hope someone is able to do something with it--please post if you do!

PerilEyes · 09-20-2013, 08:55 PM

Not sure why this was passed over, but this is a good idea! I wouldn't mind trying something.

Sean Renaud · 09-20-2013, 10:23 PM

It's got. . .potential. Okay here's the cliffnotes version of why this got so radically passed over. You have a lot of authors, myself amongst them, that for the most part if I'm going to pick up a story from here to write (as opposed to helping you develop ideas, I'm always happy to be a sounding board) I want something short and sweet. Ideally that I can handle in two or three sittings tops. A multipart story that's going to involve a lot of build up and characterization just isn't going to do well generally for that reason.

This story is fairly well outlined though I thik you'd probably be better off with his girlfriend teasing him about the louder girl first. Especially if you take the "plunge" and make her well more a little chubby. As you have it (or I interpret it) You've got Loud and crazy porn star, Average girl, and no boobs girl. Well how bout you bump pornstar in favor of a little thicker but she doesn't have any issues so she'll just flaunt her natural and large breasts and the boy tries to hide his occasional gaze. No threesome there just some teasing maybe even some slutty role play (perhaps with a cheating scene at some point or at least the loud one asking why is having her pretend when she's right there) After that I'd probably follow your script. Though if he turned down the loud one earlier she's gonna make him earn it and if he didn't then he'll be intensifying the relationship with her at the same time his girlfriend and Mouse are. Still good outline.

I'd suggest you try to write it yourself there are lots of people here (not me in particular though if you only want some little bits I can do that) who will be more than happy to help you develop your writing skills if you think they are lacking. The good news here is that ultimately the good news is that if you write a longer story the readers tend to be much kinder. Mostly cus after four LIT pages which is I think 16 regular pages but don't quote me they would have quit if they didn't like your story.

Tundi · 10-24-2013, 07:43 PM

Thanks for the input/advice. Perhaps if writers looking for inspiration are (understandably) put off by such a long story, they could create something from a smaller idea--such as taking one of these scenes and making a self-contained story out of it.

As such, a few more self-contained prompts:

1. Guy stays overnight with his college girlfriend, a C-cup, not 'crazy' but drinking, partying, extroverted girl. She shares a room with her shy, skinny, A-cup roommate, who has just broken up with a long-term, long-distance boyfriend. The three drink and play games to get the roommate's mind off of it, but the guy becomes more and more attracted to the roommate's slight figure and personality. Similar to the scene described in my first post--could lead to accidental nudity, truth-or-dare, and eventually sex while the roommate is in the room/watching/joining.

2. Same guy and girlfriend are in the girlfriend's apartment living room, watching a movie with her two roommates--the girl from idea 1, and a D-cup, voluptuous, "slutty" (or, as Sean proposed, even "bigger') girl. The couple is under a blanket and the girlfriend starts to handle the guy beneath it covertly...but unbeknowst to the girlfriend, the "crazier" roommate becomes fully aware and starts to put on some kind of subtle show for the guy--so he's watching her purposefully turn him on, while his unknowing girlfriend jerks him off. Maybe the shy roommate inadvertently exposes herself, too.

3. Same characters. Guy and girlfriend borrow the crazier roommate's flash drive for some reason and accidently stumble upon nude photos she's taken. Guy gets visibly flustered and girlfriend teases him, getting surprisingly turned on by jerking him/sucking him off as he looks at the provocative photos of her roommate. Afterward, the girlfriend purposefully puts her boyfriend and the roommate in awkward, sexual situations--maybe it even develops into a female cuckold thing, where she wants to see her boyfriend fuck her roommate.

glanglais · 10-25-2013, 09:12 PM

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Originally Posted by Tundi

Basically the idea is for a long story (or a series of short stories) revolving around a college-age guy who, needing a place to stay, moves in with his girlfriend and her two female roommates. The two roommates are polar opposites--one is a loud, crazy, voluptuous girl, and the other is shy, quiet, and skinny (the girlfriend being somewhere in the middle of the two).

The landlord is dead set against the arrangement, so the guy has to pretend that he's gay!

(Seriously, though, I like this idea.)