Writing Challenge ~ 16th - 30th May 2011 ~ Reviews and Comments

WRITING CHALLENGE REVIEW THREAD ~ MAY 2011 ~ PART TWO​

Just a few little rules for this thread:-

• This thread is for comments and reviews only. Submissions go here!

• Please keep your comments focused on the pieces posted for the challenge running from 16th – 30th May 2011 only, this is not really intended to be a thread for conversation/flirting/mayhem and so on (Sorry to be a bore!). Writers should be able to find reviews/comments for their pieces without having to trawl through pages of banter (no matter how amusing/sexy it might be!)

• Readers/Reviewers:- Please keep your comments and reviews polite and, wherever possible, positive. If you have constructive criticism or advice for writers please do give it but be polite about it! You don’t have to like everything you read but if you really don’t have anything nice to say about something then I would suggest you refrain from posting. And if all you want to say is you liked a piece and no more…that’s great too! We all know how writers like to be appreciated!

• Authors:- Please take constructive criticism as it is intended, as an attempt at improving possible flaws/problems/areas of confusion in your piece. They are not (hopefully!) personal attacks on you or your work.

• This is supposed to be a fun way to get to know new writers and potential partners, to exercise our writing brains, it’s not a competition, please keep that in mind!

• One more thing…suggestions for future prompts are very welcome and should be PM’d to me – Britwitch – as a link ideally.

Previous challenges and reviews can be found here.

Happy reading!

marauder13...awesome! That is the way I like my short stories, makes my fingers itch to try something as well...but yeah I'd rather not

I'm liking the 'siren' idea that seemed to run through these first two submissions and how differently it's been approached!!

That Song ~ Marauder13

Creepy! This was brilliant. Just enough information on the back story to peak our interest without over doing it. You amaze me sir!!

Sirens ~ fr33ks33k

Beautiful, just beautiful. The rhythm of this was gorgeous, I loved it! I almost felt like I'd read it before, it had that timeless quality to it that all good poetry should have!!

Should have read further. Sorry fr33ks33k, but now I've read yours and I loved it, I think I'll write up a little something and post it just for fun...nothing to be taken serious like you know?

But to both fr33ks33k and Marauder13, great job guys, hope others follow in your footsteps

That Song - M13

You continue to have incredible work. The banter between the two helped show they were friends, the setup was totally believable and yet had enough atmosphere to keep on your toes. Well done.

Sirens - fr33k

You've got a gift sir. Rhythm, flow, evocative wording, all very well done. Beautifully done.

Grounded - Cait

I liked this, nice little twist ending, decent amount of atmosphere and description before it. Well done, makes me wonder if the whole thing was just in his imagination or if something slightly more sinister was going on.

For Sale - Zy

Another great joke Zy, thanks for the smiles

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For Sale - Zy

Another great joke Zy, thanks for the smiles

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you're so welcome!
I like making people smile.

To The Future - DeathsKnight

The connection to the prompt is a little loose, but the story itself is good. The brief descriptions leave room for the reader to decide things for themselves. All around quite an interesting piece.

Devestated - Wideeyedone

Short, simple, powerful. I don't know if you used the ship as a metaphor, or if your narrating from the ships perspective, but either way it is quite effective. The structure lends itself to the emotions, heightening the experience. Well done.

Heh! Was trying to get the whole time travel thing going. Was busy at work and got so fed up with typing a bit and then getting interrupted every two minutes that I just gave up.

No worries DK, as I said I liked much of it.

Well I finally did this. I hope you like it.

It is over the word limit though. Actually it went way way over and I tried to cut and nip what I could but its still over the limit.

Sorry brit.

Good Samaritan's Reward - Veroe

Ironically this was where my mind first went when I saw the prompt, the wrecked ship from the original Dracula novel. I'm glad someone did this, and you did it very well. It was clear where you trimmed, but it didn't detract much from the overall piece. Overall very well done.

m13- haunting and the tension builds nciely!