Go on, this is a story but it's missing something. A cast, a location, a theme, a reason. I don't know what it's missing but this maybe you were all friends, or better yet semi-close daughters of very close friends. That way the tension is built around one of the fathers showing up, or a location. I'm kinda digging Santa's Elves but still, a theme (I got nothing), or a reason. I know the 90's were chock full of teenage daughter/cousin/niece shows up and finds family business in shambles and decides the best way to save it is to turn it into a bikini carwash/dude ranch/drive in.
Liar to 4est: Are you a cheese?