A (minor) finer point to "save me..." by wh
I intuitively wrote " skin on my feet", and avoided "foot skin". The focus should be on feet--something alive, and not on the dead skin. Also, it's important that it's about two feet. The singular form makes the whole thing more abstract, medical, not poetic. So, what do you think?
In the past many people were trying to improve on my poems, almost all of them being off the mark or even totally off the mark. They often have a formal point on their mind, like making the text shorter (typical :-) while they throw the baby out with the bath, the poetry gets annihilated.
EDIT: At this stage, my poem's English can be very vulnerable. Even at a later stage too (for older poems).
Last edited by Senna Jawa : 02-17-2015 at 09:52 AM.