Couch Fun with Mom -- Wrong Word
Was just browsing through your stories and, while reading "Couch Fun with Mom", noticed the following sentence:
"So here's the scene....me in the living room lying on the couch. The only light shining in the room was from the kitchen, which was being me. Mom at the top of the stairs wanting to show off a new outfit. Can I get any more lucky than this? "
I think you meant "behind me" on that one.
On a non-related note, I'm impressed you used the correct version of "lie". We tend to use "laying" in colloquial speech, but "lying" is correct when referring to the act of resting.
Overall, your stories aren't bad, from what I've read, they just need a bit more descriptive elements; however, the way the short sentences paint the picture make them stand out pretty vividly. Keep up the good work.