Humility, cuckold and wannabees that want to see their wives fucked creeps

nyminus

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I submitted this story in the story section and had it rejected. I don't want any of you creeps to tear it apart with your supposed intelligence. The main reason for the story was to get at the little wimp creeps that like the wife gets fucked while little drippy pricked wimp husband watch or the wife is raped by people that the moderators would love to be raped by their diseased dicks. It was supposed to be a slam at the section of people that like this shit. For the readers that believe in faithful marriages it is for you...

I was sitting down having lunch with several of my coworkers when I heard something that caught my attention. One of my coworkers, John, was saying that he thought that it was a turn on to have other men screw his wife. I couldn't believe John had just said that. His wife was named Julie and me and Sandy had actually had dinner with them a couple of weeks ago. It was when Gary, a guy that works with us and a self proclaimed lover boy, said that he would love to fuck John's wife. John said that he would love to watch but Gary said that a guy that lets other men fuck his wife has to be queer and he didn't want John around while he shagged Julie.

I couldn't keep quite and said that John and Julie should get a divorce if they felt like that. Gary said that he had much rather fuck my wife, Sandy. I told him that I had better never hear him refer to my wife again and if he saw her somewhere or other that he had better not even think of speaking to her or I would whip his ass.

This brought a lot of gaff from Gary and the other four guys that hung with Gary. They said that I was a party pooper and that they would rape Sandy if they had to. I threw the rest of my lunch away and rose all five foot ten of my height and told them that if they tried then they would be lucky to get to a hospital. I turned and left. I went and told our boss just what had transpired and he laughed it off and said that they were just stroking their egos a little. I told him that if they ever spoke to Sandy that I would take it to the big boss.

About a week later I was working on some reports when I noticed that the other guys reports were there also. I went to their offices and found that all five of them had left a half hour ago. I called sandy and started to tell her about Gary and his friends. I had mentioned what they had said after it had happened but Sandy also said that I was making a mountain of a mole hill. She stopped talking and she told me that she had to get the door. I yelled for her not to answer it until she looked through the peep hole. I was wringing my hands when I heard her say something that led me to believe that Gary and his friends were there.

I ran out of the office and the boss, Larry, tried to stop me. I told him that Sandy had better be ok or I would come after him then. This was after I found that he had let them all off for the day. I ran to my car and tore out of the parking lot. I drove fast and picked up the police about halfway home. The trip usually took thirty minutes but i was pushing the corvette real fast. I didn't pull over and signaled the cop that I was in an emergency. There was very little traffic and I knew that i would make the trip in less than half the time it normally took me. Three more cars joined in with the first cop and they tried to block me off.

I skidded up an alley and the cops ran past me. In two minutes i pulled up at my house. I could hear Sandy scream from the front yard and I grabbed a tree branch, like a club really, and ran inside. The door was locked and I took one hard kick and the door splintered. I brandished the club and went inside ready to do battle. What I saw chilled me and I screamed as I launched myself at Gary who was in between Sandy's legs slamming his cock in her. One of his buddies, Jim Wilson was trying top get his cock in my wife's mouth but she had bitten him hard. he started to rain blows on her head, cursing her and calling her a whore.

Sandy was being fucked but Jim was about to kill her. I raised the club and brought it down on his head. the thawak sound was loud as he slumped to the floor. Then I saw the gun that Gary had taken from his pants around his knees and pointed it at me. Before he could fire it there was a loud noise and Gary's chest exploded with a spray of blood.
The three other guys must have been doped up as they all came at me except for Randy who tried to shove his huge cock in Sandy's cunt. Sandy was almost unconscious. He was met by my club as I ignored the police warnings to drop it. I caught him across the face with it and I saw his nose vanish.

Strong hands grabbed me and I was held immobile. If the cops hadn't grabbed me i would have kept bashing heads. The one cop that had first started the chase told me that he understood why i was speeding the way i was. I told him that I couldn't pull over and explain things to him. He wanted to know why I thought my wife was being raped and I recounted what had taken place at work a week before. The reason that I could take the time was that Sand y had been brought here to the hospital. The doctors had ran me out of the emergency room and I had been kidnapped by the police officer, James Grewson, He made me drink some coffee.

To recap what he said is that Gary and his friends were drunk and under the influence of some drug or other. The blood work taken would tell what. Gary was in intensive care. he might die which i didn't want. I wanted the bastard to go to prison to be butt fucked for the next twenty years. Jim wilson would never gain consciousness again. I had destroyed his brain with the club. Randy Johnson was having trouble hearing the charges against him. The charges included forcible rape and attempted murder Against all the men.

I told James that Larry Woods should also be charged and he said that he would investigate that possibility. I stayed home with Sandy for the next week. She was feeling rather stupid because of the way she shushed me when I tried to warn her. Finally I had to go back to work. The office was shorthanded with all the guy's in jail waiting trial. Larry met me at the door by asking me what I thought I was doing. I told him that I was coming into work and that My wife had just been raped by members of the company that he ran.

I told him that if I ever found out that he had anything to do with it I was going to have a talk with corporate and threaten to file sexual harassment charges against them and try to have him charged along with the creeps that were in jail. He knew that I would do just what I had told him and he started to act like a concerned boss. I just looked at him and went to my office to catch up on the work I had missed out on.

Later in the day I asked him if he were going to hire people to replace the creeps. He hemmed and hawed and told me that it wasn't right to fire them before they had their trials. I told him that a trial was a forgone conclusion. I told him that my wife was raped by my coworkers and that the police were there and had seen everything. I told him that Gary had tried to kill me with a gun and that he was shot by the police. I asked him what more he wanted. I went back to my office.

That night Sandy was in a low mood. She asked me why she had placed so little value on my warnings, "If I hadn't then it would have never happened." I shushed her and said that very few wives really thought about the things that their husbands told them where other men were concerned. I said that I knew how men were and that most women didn't.I said that I was warning her because of that. "Women try to dismiss what men say about each other just as men dismiss what women say about each other." I let that sink in. I went on to tell her that we were involved in a struggle against the entire world to be married.

" When two people marry then there are people that really don't want to succeed," I paused at that."Look at it this way Sandy," I said, "people try and make it a game of who gets divorced and you have to choose your friends really carefully." I used John and Julie as an example to get her to understand."We were friends with them and then I find out that they like to play the wimp husband slut hot wife game," I told her. "We don't feel like that but I wonder if we had become close friends," I thanked God that we weren't like them, "But I wonder how long it would have been before Julie had started to find fault with how I was and try to get her to cheat on me." I told Sandy that if that would ever happen then I would divorce her and what could have been a good marriage would end up trashed aside like so many others.

I saw that she had tears in her eyes then. I asked her why she did and she told me that Julie had already tried that with her . I found out that Sandy had refused to listen to my warning because of Julie having talked to her before the incident, "I don't know what i was thinking but she said that you were cheating on me at work," Julie really started crying then, "She said that you were probably warning me to cover up my guilt." She really sobbed then and told me that she had caused the rape. I told her that Julie and John and Gary and his friends had caused the rape. I even said that Larry was perhaps responsible and officer Grewsom was investigating it.

I was angry then and told Sandy that we were going to have it out with Julie and John right then. It was around eight at night. She felt nervous and I told her that was the reason that stuff like this existed. Sandy agreed to go with me and as soon as we rang the bell, Julia came to the door. She was surprised to see us. I told her that it wasn't a social visit. We were interrupted by John coming into the living room. John started to ask me just what the hell I was there for. It seemed that all of the like minded creeps at the office had a hard on for me keeping Gary and friends from fucking my wife up.

"John you would do well to keep your mouth shut cause it's all I can do to keep from smashing your teeth in," I said, I was pretty angry at him and his wife right then. I then looked at sandy and told her that if she had something to tell Julia then she should do so. She started in on her former friend.

"Julia you told me not to listen to my husband," she started off, "you and your husband are the reason that the world is screwed up like it it. Well I didn't listen to him when he warned me about Gary and the others. I just thought it was all male ego talking but I found out otherwise. I was raped and could have been killed by the men that you think so highly of. They are sexual predators and maybe you and your pitiful excuse for a husband think they are great, they are nothing but a sick bunch of perverts. They are low class scum just like you and John are. To think that I even had you sick people in my home for dinner."

I could see that my wife was getting more and more wound up as she talked. It was at this point that Julia tried to claw Sandy's face, "You sick bitch," she screamed at sandy as she approached my wife with her sharp fingernails extended like a cat. Sandy easily sidestepped her and gave her a stinging slap across her face. That stopped Julia. She looked at her excuse for a husband, "Are you going to let them do this to me you weakling." I looked at John and told him that he was a weakling who had such a pitiful little prick, I had seen it in the shower at work. I told him that he was a weak husband just because he had a little penis and wanted her to fuck other men cause it was the only way she would ever get a decent fuck.

"Make no mistake John I am going to destroy you. The police called me today and said that they are on the brink of taking down the whole office crew," I was very angry at this wimp husband now and his itchy cunt whore of a wife. They had tried to invade my home with their sick crap and I wanted some revenge. "It's just a matter of time now before someone tells the truth. I wouldn't be surprised if Larry wasn't one of your sluts fuckers. I knew the minute that corporate sent him to take over management that he was trouble. You and," I looked at Julia like she was a piece of trash, "Your whore wife are in for a lot of trouble. You weren't just happy to do your sick sex with those low class scum that like it, you had to try and drag me and my wife into it." I looked him in the eyes and told him that i had an appointment at corporate headquarters the next day and that him and his trash would be out of a job. "If I can do anything about it I am going to run you out of the neighborhood. You can both go to hell for all I care.'

I took my wife's hand but not before she delivered another slap to Julia, "Get lost whore and take your pimp with you." We left and went home. Sandy was as mad as I have ever seen her. "What makes people like them," she asked me with tears in her eyes. I told her that I didn't know but that people like the whole trashy crew from Larry on down had brought the country to ruin. I told her that sick people liked top spread their sickness around till every one is as sick as them. I told her that a lot of sick writers on the internet were always writing sick stories that made people fall out of grace. God allows this sick shit because he gives people freedom of choice. Most people choose the wrong way. Almost everyone is filled with greed and they try to pass it on.

Greedy people as one Senator put it are responsible for the economic crisis. I say that evil people like John and Julia and Larry and Gary are also responsible. They haven't an ounce of goodness in them. The wives are like sniveling wanton whores just wanting to have as much sex as possible. Their, so called, husbands that like to be humiliated by having their wives have sex with sick alpha males who want to control and dominate other men. I want to take you and escape the world many times but I realize that by doing so, we let the evil trash win by default. There are many good people out there and it's time for them to take control.

I realized that I was crying now, I was wrung out and I felt empty. I was awakened by the ringing of the phone. It was officer Gresome. He told me that one of the secretaries at the office had used the listening that Larry had installed for his when he had a client. He would try to get both client to say something incriminating and then blackmail him for a large contract. He turned it off when there was no need for it. Cindy Walsh had turned it on and kept her own record of what went on as part of her job security, She had contacted the police with a voice record of the morning that Larry let a real drunk Gary and friends go to my house with the express orders from Larry to rape the bitch and show goody two shoes that he had better get in line,

James told me that they had Larry dead to rights and were going to arrest him that morning. I begged him to hold off till I could have a few choice words with him. He laughed and said that he had already said too much so he better get off the line. He said that he would have the warrants ready in two hours. he laughed as he hung up. I raced to get to the office and i kicked open the door to Larry's office. There was one of the interns there with him. he had her blouse off and she looked scared. "What the hell do you think you're doing," he railed at me but I cut him off with a quick punch. the young intern looked happy when i did. I asked the intern if she had seen Larry assault me where I would have to defend my self. Her answer was to take off her heels and smack Larry in the balls. I waited till she had left before I took him apart piece by piece. Oh I left him breathing for the cops who should be any minute but I told him that when he got out of prison, if he got out, that I would be waiting for him.

As it were Larry never made it out of prison for conspiracy to commit rape and neither did the others. Word gets around to the cons about rapist ans Larry and all the others were. They were used as fuck buddies till their were close to getting released and then accidents started to happen. I am sorry that I was not able to keep my threat with Larry but I heard that he and the others did not go into the other world with out a lot of pain. As for john and Julia. I fired John within minutes of when corporate me the the boss in the office. Angry neighbors descended on his house and threw bricks through all the windows. They yelled a lot and waved signs telling the creeps to leave their little neighborhood alone. The police were called but they took four hours to respond. No one knew who the brick throwers were.

John and Julia lost most of their money when the sale of their house was for less that ten percent of it's actual value. Another predator like them took most of that in commission. Oh well what goes around comes around. You fuck with good people and you get fucked up the ass. The couple did get an escort out of town as a convoy of people that protested them. with their cars decorated and letting everyone know about them followed them to the city limits. They made it a hundred yards beyond when their car blew up. They tried to say it was sabotaged but they were laughed at. They were last seen walking up the highway carrying suitcases till a cop pulled them over for being on the interstate walking. They were handcuffed and their luggage was left on the interstate till it vanished within minutes.

Me and Sandy have started a web page about predators in the workplace and get's about ten thousand new hits a day. Things have started to turn around.
 
* Did I check to make sure everything was spelled correctly?
* Please break up & fix the punctuation of your dialogue. The convention is one speaker per paragraph, so whenever someone new says something, start a new a paragraph. Also, with dialogue you include periods, commas, exclamation points, or question marks inside the quotes. The essay "How to Make Characters Talk" in our Writer's Resources section has more information on the paragraph formatting of dialogue if you have further questions.
Here is the reason given for the rejection.. Like I tried to read a story on Literotten that was so fucked up its pitiful...I have read many stories on literotten tah have been just as fucked up yet they get published...WHY? because it doesn't put down the British wimp.humility writers like mine do That's ok cause i'll jusy publish it elsewhere like Assm http://www.asstr.org/files/Collections/Alt.Sex.Stories.Moderated/Year2009/58699...So there
 
Have you considered addressing the issues stated in the rejection? A quick run through spell check would take care of most of the spelling errors. The rejection explains what is necessary to fix the dialogue issues, and points to an article that goes into more depth.

Nearly every author here has received a rejection notice at one time or another -- even those that are professional writers and editors.

Go through and address the issues for the rejection, and resubmit. Or, seek out a volunteer editor to do it, and then resubmit.

Hell, I'll make the corrections for you, and then all you have to do is submit it.

However, I strongly suspect that having it approved is directly contradictory to your wishes.

The offer is on the table, if you're not afraid of having your illusions shattered.
 
dark makes a valid point. The rejection only comments on the need to edit your story and the lack of dialogue - not content or breaking house rules.

With its bulletin boards and public comments, Lit is a more 'social networking' site than others. If you truly want a discussion on the points you cover, rework and edit the text and resubmit. From what I know, asstr is not the place to have a debate.
 
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