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Old 07-25-2014, 03:53 AM   #1
Flidarjosh is offline
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Requesting feedback on first story (Incest)

I humbly request feedback and/or constructive criticism for my first submission on Lit.

It's the first real story I've ever written and, considering that english isn't my first language, I'd like to get some opinions on it (grammar, word choices, content, etc.).
The story is in Incest/Taboo and about brother-sister romance, 16,000 words long.

Link here: http://www.literotica.com/s/all-fun-and-games

Thank you very much.
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Old 07-26-2014, 03:29 PM   #2
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I don't have time to read this right now, but took a quick peek. Your score is very good and out of the 29 comments I only saw one troll and no one is taking him seriously. Good number of favs/views/comments, I'd say it did very well here and those numbers are certainly encouraging of more stories from you.
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Old 08-26-2014, 01:37 PM   #3
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Really good first

I read your story in its entirety. I gave it a 5 star rating. I did find a few errors in grammar but nothing to worry about. This story could use another chapter or two. Keep up the good work.
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