Ardeche
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I'm not sure if this is the place to post this, so apologies in advance. I recently typed up a fantasy e-mail to my partner. It was my first time and it proved VERY effective for him (but he's biased!). So I was wondering if I could get some feedback, as well as constructive criticism, before I submit it as an actual story. Any advice on how to improve my writing will be very much appreciated. Thanks!
p.s. Summary; WM and BW lightly exploring for the first time a Master/Slave experience.
THE STORY:
Let's indulge in a fantasy...
You leave the bar. I'm waiting for you in a nearby hotel. You've left explicit instructions on how to prepare for your visit. According to your instructions; the room is dimly lit with candles. The music is turned on, but low enough that words are indistinguishable.
I am kneeling at the foot of the bed, with about an inch to spare. My dark brown skin glistens from a generous application of lotion. I have my braids let down like you want. I have on a short, black, thin strapped babydoll, with no underwear. I have a matching black pair of high heels on. My eyes are blindfolded and my hands are restrained behind my back with a black scarf.
You walk in the door. I tense with anticipation and whisper softly, "Master?" You don't respond, but I hear your footsteps coming closer and closer. I smell the scent of your perfume. I feel a light tracing of your fingertips across my back. I feel the warmth of your breath on my ear as you lean in and whisper, "Hello F@#k Doll...are you ready for your Master?
My arousal for you is beginning to take over. I gasp "Yes Master...I am ready." and you chuckle softly on hearing the tremor in my voice. I feel your presence right in front of me and realise that you are standing in between me and the bed. I'm trembling, awaiting the next move. It's taking to long. I want my Master to start using me for his pleasure.
"Master...", I say. "Shhh! Do not speak unless spoken to!" you bark at me. You direct me to sit up straight on my knees, so I am in a position to kiss you easily. You lean in and gently part my plump pink lips with your tongue. You taste like Merlot. Kissing me softly, sucking on my tongue and all of a sudden you bite my lower lip hard. "That's for speaking out of turn."
The pain is minimal and swiftly replaced with an exquisite pleasure. I am yearning for more and leaning into you as best as I can with my hands bound together. You can tell that I'm intoxicated by you and you push me lightly away. "Master please....please let me taste you" I plead. I press my thinly veiled breasts into you, rubbing my luscious hard brown nipples across your chest. I kiss your neck, your face, and your lips.
"Enough...stand and show yourself to me" you say gruffly. I stand up so you can assess your F@#k doll. My nipples are clearly pushed against my scanty attire. My hips are softly moving in small circles, because of how sensual I feel. Standing close enough to you, so you don't have to stand up. Slowly, so maddeningly slow you reach out to me. Using your right hand you run your fingers up my thigh, stopping just short of my pink slickness.
You go further up, caressing my stomach and waist; taking time to appreciate the contrast of my dark skin against your white hand. Up the middle of my chest, resulting in a soft "Ooh' from me. Up and up you go, past my collarbone and neck. Rubbing your index finger across my lips, letting me suck on it. "In the mood to suck?" you ask me. Vigorously, I nod my head in agreement.
Stopping abruptly, you wrap your hand across my throat. "Tell me what you want" you urge me. Awed in the presence of my master, I whisper shyly "I want to taste you." This doesn't please you and your grip becomes even tighter. "Do better than that...or else" you threaten. Determined not to disappoint my Master I take a deep breath and let it out. "I want to suck your cock, so deep and hard that I feel you in the back of my throat. I want you to fuck my mouth. Leave me gasping and salivating from the force of your thrusts."
You release my throat and lean in to roughly kiss me, as a sign of approval. You hold my face steady with both hands, as our tongues duel in ecstasy. Your left hand leaves my face to caress my shoulders; going lower till your fingers flutter over my full brown breasts. Fondling and caressing my breasts makes me moan in delight and then pain as you pinch each nipple hard. Your right hand pulls on my braids as you pepper kisses over my neck and chest.
You gently slip of the straps from my shoulders, while supporting me at the same time. My breasts are freed and trailing across your chest. You tell me to nibble and lick my breasts. I can't while my hands are bound behind me, so I ask you to help. You lift my left breast up and I flick my tongue over my dark hard nipple and bite till it hurts. I do the same with my right breast and I sense how much it thrills you from your sharp intake of breath.
"Ready to suck, F@#k doll?" you ask. Without even responding I drop to my knees instead and tilt my head up in euphoria at the knowledge that in a minute I will taste my Master's scrumptious cock. You make me wait, knowing it drives me crazy. You resume your position at the foot of the bed but stay standing.
You place your hands on my shoulder, to help brace me from the onslaught of hard throbbing cock that I am about to receive. I lick my lips, making them nice and wet. I feel you moving closer and closer and for a second I wish my hands were free so I could grab your ass and devour your cock already. You offer me just the tip at first. Moving away each time I get a lick. The teasing is wreaking havoc on me and the next time I push my head forward and triumphantly swallow you about halfway. "Tisk tisk!" you say and then pinch my left nipple so hard it stings. "Don't misbehave doll."
You continue to torture me and I'm trying my hardest not to misbehave. Finally you give me every inch of you. Starting slow and deep, you go further and further until I can't take it. I sense that you want it nice and slow. I use my tongue and lips to savour every inch of you...licking and flattening my tongue with each stroke of my mouth. Licking up and down the shaft with my plump soft lips, I am intoxicated by your scent and your taste, so much so that I feel a trickle of my juice run down my thighs.
You take my face in your hands, and I know that you are about to face fuck me relentlessly. I take a deep breath and get ready. Your pace quickens, your thrusts gets harder. My saliva is dripping out of my mouth and falling unto my exposed breasts. Behind the blindfold, my eyes are tearing up from gagging on your cock. You don't stop because you know how much I like it. I'm writhing on my knees, grinding my pussy on my heels, working my self into a frenzy as I know I will soon taste your sweet cum.
I know my Master well and I can tell from your groans that you are close to the brink. I work my mouth faster and deeper, using my tongue to massage all over your shaft. I can barely recover from each violent thrust...and yet I love how rough you are with me. You are close so close. To catch my breath before the grand finish, I pull my head back and release you from my mouth with a loud plop. I spit on your already well drenched cock and capture you in my mouth once more.
I'm rewarded for my efforts with a massive groan and a final thrust from you. I can't wait to taste every drop of you, and you don't disappoint. A flood of sweet cum comes shooting out of your cock and straight into my mouth. I'm trying to swallow but it's so much. Cum is spilling out of my mouth and unto my chests and breast. I know how the sight of your creamy cum on my dark skin turns you on, so I'm happy with this. You shudder violently and with one last thrust empty your cum in and on your F@$k doll.
"Well done my F@$k doll" you sigh to me and I'm reeling from your pleasure and the mini-orgasm I was able to give myself from rocking on my heels. "See how beautiful you look with my cum" you say, as you remove my blindfold. And indeed the contrast is a beautiful sight. I tilt my head down trying to lick every drop from my chest and to assist with this you unbind me. My wrists hurt but I don't mind. I cup both breasts together, sucking up all the cum and spit on my tits and nipples.
"Wait a while...Master needs to recover. What ever shall we do next F@#k doll?" you ask, and a big grin appears on my face as I settle down at your feet to tell you what I would like next..."
The End.
p.s. Summary; WM and BW lightly exploring for the first time a Master/Slave experience.
THE STORY:
Let's indulge in a fantasy...
You leave the bar. I'm waiting for you in a nearby hotel. You've left explicit instructions on how to prepare for your visit. According to your instructions; the room is dimly lit with candles. The music is turned on, but low enough that words are indistinguishable.
I am kneeling at the foot of the bed, with about an inch to spare. My dark brown skin glistens from a generous application of lotion. I have my braids let down like you want. I have on a short, black, thin strapped babydoll, with no underwear. I have a matching black pair of high heels on. My eyes are blindfolded and my hands are restrained behind my back with a black scarf.
You walk in the door. I tense with anticipation and whisper softly, "Master?" You don't respond, but I hear your footsteps coming closer and closer. I smell the scent of your perfume. I feel a light tracing of your fingertips across my back. I feel the warmth of your breath on my ear as you lean in and whisper, "Hello F@#k Doll...are you ready for your Master?
My arousal for you is beginning to take over. I gasp "Yes Master...I am ready." and you chuckle softly on hearing the tremor in my voice. I feel your presence right in front of me and realise that you are standing in between me and the bed. I'm trembling, awaiting the next move. It's taking to long. I want my Master to start using me for his pleasure.
"Master...", I say. "Shhh! Do not speak unless spoken to!" you bark at me. You direct me to sit up straight on my knees, so I am in a position to kiss you easily. You lean in and gently part my plump pink lips with your tongue. You taste like Merlot. Kissing me softly, sucking on my tongue and all of a sudden you bite my lower lip hard. "That's for speaking out of turn."
The pain is minimal and swiftly replaced with an exquisite pleasure. I am yearning for more and leaning into you as best as I can with my hands bound together. You can tell that I'm intoxicated by you and you push me lightly away. "Master please....please let me taste you" I plead. I press my thinly veiled breasts into you, rubbing my luscious hard brown nipples across your chest. I kiss your neck, your face, and your lips.
"Enough...stand and show yourself to me" you say gruffly. I stand up so you can assess your F@#k doll. My nipples are clearly pushed against my scanty attire. My hips are softly moving in small circles, because of how sensual I feel. Standing close enough to you, so you don't have to stand up. Slowly, so maddeningly slow you reach out to me. Using your right hand you run your fingers up my thigh, stopping just short of my pink slickness.
You go further up, caressing my stomach and waist; taking time to appreciate the contrast of my dark skin against your white hand. Up the middle of my chest, resulting in a soft "Ooh' from me. Up and up you go, past my collarbone and neck. Rubbing your index finger across my lips, letting me suck on it. "In the mood to suck?" you ask me. Vigorously, I nod my head in agreement.
Stopping abruptly, you wrap your hand across my throat. "Tell me what you want" you urge me. Awed in the presence of my master, I whisper shyly "I want to taste you." This doesn't please you and your grip becomes even tighter. "Do better than that...or else" you threaten. Determined not to disappoint my Master I take a deep breath and let it out. "I want to suck your cock, so deep and hard that I feel you in the back of my throat. I want you to fuck my mouth. Leave me gasping and salivating from the force of your thrusts."
You release my throat and lean in to roughly kiss me, as a sign of approval. You hold my face steady with both hands, as our tongues duel in ecstasy. Your left hand leaves my face to caress my shoulders; going lower till your fingers flutter over my full brown breasts. Fondling and caressing my breasts makes me moan in delight and then pain as you pinch each nipple hard. Your right hand pulls on my braids as you pepper kisses over my neck and chest.
You gently slip of the straps from my shoulders, while supporting me at the same time. My breasts are freed and trailing across your chest. You tell me to nibble and lick my breasts. I can't while my hands are bound behind me, so I ask you to help. You lift my left breast up and I flick my tongue over my dark hard nipple and bite till it hurts. I do the same with my right breast and I sense how much it thrills you from your sharp intake of breath.
"Ready to suck, F@#k doll?" you ask. Without even responding I drop to my knees instead and tilt my head up in euphoria at the knowledge that in a minute I will taste my Master's scrumptious cock. You make me wait, knowing it drives me crazy. You resume your position at the foot of the bed but stay standing.
You place your hands on my shoulder, to help brace me from the onslaught of hard throbbing cock that I am about to receive. I lick my lips, making them nice and wet. I feel you moving closer and closer and for a second I wish my hands were free so I could grab your ass and devour your cock already. You offer me just the tip at first. Moving away each time I get a lick. The teasing is wreaking havoc on me and the next time I push my head forward and triumphantly swallow you about halfway. "Tisk tisk!" you say and then pinch my left nipple so hard it stings. "Don't misbehave doll."
You continue to torture me and I'm trying my hardest not to misbehave. Finally you give me every inch of you. Starting slow and deep, you go further and further until I can't take it. I sense that you want it nice and slow. I use my tongue and lips to savour every inch of you...licking and flattening my tongue with each stroke of my mouth. Licking up and down the shaft with my plump soft lips, I am intoxicated by your scent and your taste, so much so that I feel a trickle of my juice run down my thighs.
You take my face in your hands, and I know that you are about to face fuck me relentlessly. I take a deep breath and get ready. Your pace quickens, your thrusts gets harder. My saliva is dripping out of my mouth and falling unto my exposed breasts. Behind the blindfold, my eyes are tearing up from gagging on your cock. You don't stop because you know how much I like it. I'm writhing on my knees, grinding my pussy on my heels, working my self into a frenzy as I know I will soon taste your sweet cum.
I know my Master well and I can tell from your groans that you are close to the brink. I work my mouth faster and deeper, using my tongue to massage all over your shaft. I can barely recover from each violent thrust...and yet I love how rough you are with me. You are close so close. To catch my breath before the grand finish, I pull my head back and release you from my mouth with a loud plop. I spit on your already well drenched cock and capture you in my mouth once more.
I'm rewarded for my efforts with a massive groan and a final thrust from you. I can't wait to taste every drop of you, and you don't disappoint. A flood of sweet cum comes shooting out of your cock and straight into my mouth. I'm trying to swallow but it's so much. Cum is spilling out of my mouth and unto my chests and breast. I know how the sight of your creamy cum on my dark skin turns you on, so I'm happy with this. You shudder violently and with one last thrust empty your cum in and on your F@$k doll.
"Well done my F@$k doll" you sigh to me and I'm reeling from your pleasure and the mini-orgasm I was able to give myself from rocking on my heels. "See how beautiful you look with my cum" you say, as you remove my blindfold. And indeed the contrast is a beautiful sight. I tilt my head down trying to lick every drop from my chest and to assist with this you unbind me. My wrists hurt but I don't mind. I cup both breasts together, sucking up all the cum and spit on my tits and nipples.
"Wait a while...Master needs to recover. What ever shall we do next F@#k doll?" you ask, and a big grin appears on my face as I settle down at your feet to tell you what I would like next..."
The End.
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