Old 01-20-2015, 04:49 PM   #1
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I'm working on a story where Thomas takes his girlfriend Rebecca on a cruise with his sister Caitlin and her boyfriend Jacob. While on the cruise, Rebecca dumps Thomas and goes off with Jacob. Rebecca and Jacob have a great time on the cruise that Thomas and Caitlin paid for. Later, Rebecca regrets her (blank) of Thomas. Betrayal? Abandonment? Leaving? Dumping? I can't think of a word that seems to match the situation.
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Old 01-20-2015, 04:54 PM   #2
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Later, Rebecca regretted forsaking Thomas.
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Old 01-20-2015, 05:20 PM   #3
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Exploitation, or "felt guilty about having used Thomas", perhaps. Although those don't feel quite right either. 'Exploitation' would be a good fit if she'd allowed him to buy tickets while already knowing she was going to ditch him for Jacob, but it doesn't work quite as well for a "changed her mind later" scenario.
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Maybe something along the lines of "trivialization," although it might take more than a word or phrase to pinpoint in context. Might have her do some soul searching on shunting him aside and denigrating who he is and what he's done for her.
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Old 01-20-2015, 05:29 PM   #5
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Exploitation, or "felt guilty about having used Thomas", perhaps. Although those don't feel quite right either. 'Exploitation' would be a good fit if she'd allowed him to buy tickets while already knowing she was going to ditch him for Jacob, but it doesn't work quite as well for a "changed her mind later" scenario.
She changed her mind later. She had dated Jacob long before and hadn't known that Caitlin was going to bring him on the cruise.
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Old 01-20-2015, 06:54 PM   #6
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Larceny, defraud, scam.

I might go with something more colorful, like "step on his dick," or "treat like a bitch."
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Old 01-20-2015, 07:10 PM   #7
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Later, Rebecca regrets her (backstabbing) of Thomas.
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Old 01-20-2015, 09:35 PM   #10
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betrayal jumped to my mind even before I read it. What about dismissal? In the sense that she dismissed his feelings.
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Old 01-20-2015, 09:37 PM   #11
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How about unintentional dismissal? Perhaps...careless dismissal...
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An idea came to me while I read all the suggestions. Why don't you post the story and leave a blank for that word, then a note asking the readers to fill it in.

You'd get a LOT of suggestions from the trolls.

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Old 01-21-2015, 01:34 PM   #15
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I'm leaning towards "forsaking". I'm looking for a word that combines that she dumped him while continuing to benefit from their relationship. It's not that far from the situation described in The Human League's "Don't You Want Me". I came up with a word last night, didn't write it down and have now forgotten it.
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Old 01-21-2015, 11:10 PM   #18
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I'd keep it simple 'using' sticks in my mind.

While on the cruise, Rebecca dumps Thomas and goes off with Jacob. Rebecca and Jacob have a great time on the cruise that Thomas and Caitlin paid for. Later, Rebecca regrets using Thomas the way she did.
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I'm working on a story where Thomas takes his girlfriend Rebecca on a cruise with his sister Caitlin and her boyfriend Jacob.
While on the cruise, Rebecca dumps Thomas and goes off with Jacob. Rebecca and Jacob have a great time on the cruise that Thomas and Caitlin paid for.
Later, Rebecca regrets her (blank) of Thomas. Betrayal? Abandonment? Leaving? Dumping? I can't think of a word that seems to match the situation.
regrets her insensitivity towards Thomas
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