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Old 01-02-2016, 08:52 PM   #1
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January 2016 Challenge: See, Say, Read, Write

In this challenge, you are to write a poem, read a poem (i.e. record yourself reading it and send a link of the recording to me), or both. To submit a poem, PM the text to me. There are no restrctions on theme or form (other than the standard Literotica content restrictions), though certain readers may opt not to read the poem if asked. Preferably, the poem will be new work, but if you'd like to submit an older poem, feel free to do so, though the poem should be your own work.

Who reads (records) the poem is the author's choice. The author may read the poem him- or herself (in which case, include the link to the record in the PM in which you send the poem to me) or may ask that someone else (or multiple someone elses) read the poem. The author can request a particular reader, though that reader may decline for whatever reason. The author may request that the poem be read by a reader of a particular gender, in which case I will semi-randomly assign the poem to someone of that sex, who also may decline (in which case, I'll pick someone else). Or the author may simply request that the poem be read by anyone willing, in which case I will semi-randomly assign it as per above. Readers should PM me the links to the recording.

Once I have the poem and all of the recording links, I will post these in the poem thread, as has been typical for our recent challenges. I will not be identifying the poem's author to the potential readers nor post the author's name when I first post the recording and poem, though I will identify these later in the month.

So far, there are fourteen potential readers:
  • AlwaysHungry (no hobbits, unicorns, or Neil Young references)
  • Angeline (no Twilight or 50 Shades of Grey references)
  • champagne1982 (with some reservations on content)
  • greenmountaineer
  • GuiltyPleasure
  • HoneyAdored
  • legerdemer
  • Lyricalli
  • Remec
  • Sinseria
  • todski28
  • Trixareforkids
  • Tzara
  • UnderYourSpell
Please place any questions or comments in this thread.

Happy New Year to everyone and be creative.
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Is there a deadline, as such, for getting the poem to you?
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Is there a deadline, as such, for getting the poem to you?
It's a January challenge, so I could accept poems through the end of the month, though if you want someone else to read your poem, I'd have to have it sometime before the 31st. More practically, I would expect most of the activity for this challenge to occur over the first two or three weeks, so sometime in that time frame would perhaps work best.
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It's a January challenge, so I could accept poems through the end of the month, though if you want someone else to read your poem, I'd have to have it sometime before the 31st. More practically, I would expect most of the activity for this challenge to occur over the first two or three weeks, so sometime in that time frame would perhaps work best.
Okay, that's about what I thought...so, have you poems by, say, the 21st at the latest so as to have a week for you to send it to potential readers and have them be able to record and send it back to you.

Sound reasonable?
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Okay, that's about what I thought...so, have you poems by, say, the 21st at the latest so as to have a week for you to send it to potential readers and have them be able to record and send it back to you.

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Yes. That depends, of course, on whether you request a particular reader and that reader's availability and willingness to record, etc.

But in general, yes, that's reasonable.
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Old 01-04-2016, 05:46 PM   #6
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Yes. That depends, of course, on whether you request a particular reader and that reader's availability and willingness to record, etc.

But in general, yes, that's reasonable.
Coolness...now to just come up with something new without writing to a theme...*looking about* have we got a thread of poetic plot bunnies around here somewhere?


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Old 01-04-2016, 09:43 PM   #7
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Well we're off to a great start!

GM, I listened to your piece with me mudder, her comment "His breathing was perfect, you could feel the little goldfish breathing with him." I agree. Your voice, timing and breath add depth to what, when read on the page, seems like a simpler, cheeky, piece.

You've set the bar high
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Well we're off to a great start!

GM, I listened to your piece with me mudder, her comment "His breathing was perfect, you could feel the little goldfish breathing with him." I agree. Your voice, timing and breath add depth to what, when read on the page, seems like a simpler, cheeky, piece.

You've set the bar high
Good catch, Trix. Pardon the "Fish Story" pun, but we all get up in the morning and breathe. That's worth something right?
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Hmm, I believe Mr. Mousse was written by Champagne.

Yummy reading as always Champ. If it wasn't you, Tzara or someone made an excellent matchup.
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Good catch, Trix. Pardon the "Fish Story" pun, but we all get up in the morning and breathe. That's worth something right?
Better than the alternative.
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Hmm, I believe Mr. Mousse was written by Champagne.

Yummy reading as always Champ. If it wasn't you, Tzara or someone made an excellent matchup.
I agree that the reading was a masterful match to the poem, but the hint muse whispered the name of a different poet as the one who penned it... and I think I may be right.
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The initial 2 entries set the bar rather high, as in limbo bar an inch off the floor.

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Hmm, I believe Mr. Mousse was written by Champagne.

Yummy reading as always Champ. If it wasn't you, Tzara or someone made an excellent matchup.
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I agree that the reading was a masterful match to the poem, but the hint muse whispered the name of a different poet as the one who penned it... and I think I maybe right.
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The initial 2 entries set the bar rather high, as in limbo bar an inch off the floor.

Well, the thing about reading poems in this way, it's not a competition. It's important to pace, you may think you're dragging ass, but really, your speed will be fine as long as you remember, to breathe.

Thank you for the compliments, too.
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Well, the thing about reading poems in this way, it's not a competition. It's important to pace, you may think you're dragging ass, but really, your speed will be fine as long as you remember, to breathe.
I thought that the slowness was very effective with sensual content of the poem -- although I thought you could have lingered a bit longer on "swoon." You triumphed on the closing lines.
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MMMMMighty Mouse iis mighty fine and Trix's smooth Southern drawl warms my cold Northern heart.
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I love hearing the different voices but no clue whether the reader wrote it or not. Each reader owns it.
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I love hearing the different voices but no clue whether the reader wrote it or not. Each reader owns it.
In the case of GM's poem, he is specified as the author. I am assuming that with the others, the author is a mystery.
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This is my fav challenge to date, thanks to all the participants so far.
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hehe the reads are so damned good I am scarred to even attempt one :P any pointers for us newb readers?
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hehe the reads are so damned good I am scarred to even attempt one :P any pointers for us newb readers?
Yes, duct tape is a great way to prevent major embarrassment for us hillbilly folk with no teeth.
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heh got enough duct tape to share there buddy?
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hehe the reads are so damned good I am scarred to even attempt one :P any pointers for us newb readers?
To paraphrase Mae West - just open your mouth and speak.

It was my first try at this format too, one advantage is that you can rerecord and learn from your mistakes before committing. Sigh, if only life was like that.
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To paraphrase Mae West - just open your mouth and speak.

It was my first try at this format too, one advantage is that you can rerecord and learn from your mistakes before committing. Sigh, if only life was like that.
heh only if :P lol I would have so many restarts it wouldn't be funny :P
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hehe the reads are so damned good I am scarred to even attempt one :P any pointers for us newb readers?
Have you ever read stories aloud to a kid? That's how I approach my readings. I think of them as stories, pacing the reading and adding inflection to try to bring the character of the piece to life.

LOL, you should hear me read actual kids stories, they're a ton of fun.
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