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Old 08-23-2013, 06:09 PM   #1
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Teach-in .... a choice

Because you are becoming so adept, for this teach-in you will have a choice. To rhyme or not to rhyme (or even both)

1. Tritina
Poetry form similar to the Sestina, but considerably simpler, as there are only three repeating words. It's a 10-line poem, consisting of three tercets and an ending line. The last words of each line in the first tercet are repeated as the last words of each line in the other tercets, in different orders: abc cab bca. All three words appear in the final line as well, in the original order. All lines should be of a common meter or length.

First, grant me this conceit: that your body
Lives as perfect metaphor, perfect blend
Of draftsmanship, of brushwork, pigment, paint

That even Botticelli couldn't paint
In Birth of Venus. True female body,
Idealized as Sex and Love in blend,

Fused to archetype of form. To that blend
Add charm, wit, cleverness—then try to paint.
No art, no skill, captures such a body.

That body blend with mine. Coat me like paint.


2. Triolet

Short French poem, with 8 lines in length, turning on only two rhymes and including two refrains: ABaAabAB. Every line has the same metrical length.

Around the house the flakes fly faster,
And all the berries now are gone
From holly and cotoneaster [a]
Around the house. The flakes fly! – faster
Shutting indoors the crumb-outcaster [a]
We used to see upon the lawn [b]
Around the house. The Flakes fly faster
And all the berries now are gone!
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Old 08-23-2013, 06:14 PM   #2
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Just promise me I don't have to sneak my name in this one.
Only if you do both
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If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
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Being owned by a Cat

She sleeps in places forbidden
just in but now wants to go out,
when wanted always stays hidden
she sleeps in places forbidden.
Hunts wildlife in the swidden
would rather just lounge about,
she sleeps in places forbidden
just in but now wants to go out.
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If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-23-2013, 06:21 PM   #5
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Just promise me I don't have to sneak my name in this one.
lol. a question... what are the stresses on cotoneaster?
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My questing tongue

Who can deny the sweet allure of chocolate
Tantalising taste buds on my questing tongue,
Rain teasing droplets trickled on each breast.

One waits balanced atop a nippled breast
Gentle suction satisfies my lust for chocolate
Removed by this the slowest curling tongue.

Your mouth reveals the tip of a pink tongue
A move to lips transfers from your breast
Succulence is shared of darkest chocolate.

Chocolate coated tongue unveils a breast.
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Old 08-23-2013, 06:24 PM   #7
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lol. a question... what are the stresses on cotoneaster?
I have no idea what you mean.
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lol. a question... what are the stresses on cotoneaster?
I read it as cotoneeee aster

BTW it's by Thomas Hardy
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But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Being owned by a Cat

She sleeps in places forbidden
just in but now wants to go out,
when wanted always stays hidden
she sleeps in places forbidden.
Hunts wildlife in the swidden
would rather just lounge about,
she sleeps in places forbidden
just in but now wants to go out.
Sweet! Filled with music and cat-ness. Now I shall attempt a triolet--well after I get to a bit of cooking first.
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I read it as cotoneeee aster

BTW it's by Thomas Hardy
Omg! He found me out! I don't have every poem in the world ever memorized and parsed!
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I really like this triolet by A.E. Stallings.
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Not in Kansas Triolet*

A All they could see were striped stockings and shoes:
B A house had plummeted out of the night.
a Wake up the in-laws and break out the booze!
A All they could see were striped stockings and shoes.
a (Follow the yellow and don't stay to schmooze--
b the monkeys are fools, the trees are uptight.)
A All they could see were striped stockings and shoes,
B a house had plummeted out of the night


*I kept the rhyme scheme up cause it helped me.
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Not in Kansas Triolet*

A All they could see were striped stockings and shoes:
B A house had plummeted out of the night.
a Wake up the in-laws and break out the booze!
A All they could see were striped stockings and shoes.
a (Follow the yellow and don't stay to schmooze--
b the monkeys are fools, the trees are uptight.)
A All they could see were striped stockings and shoes,
B a house had plummeted out of the night


*I kept the rhyme scheme up cause it helped me.
Applause this is one of my favourite forms
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But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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Applause this is one of favourite forms
Thanks. I have written a few before, I think. But this is the first one in years.
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Oh, I've done one of these a long time ago for my birthday poem. I'll have to see if I posted it here in the PoBo. It was horrible!

ETA: Couldn't find it. You're all so lucky. I remember the title though, "Twenty-Six Licks Triolet". It was a spanking triolet! haha
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Oh, I've done one of these a long time ago for my birthday poem. I'll have to see if I posted it here in the PoBo. It was horrible!

ETA: Couldn't find it. You're all so lucky. I remember the title though, "Twenty-Six Licks Triolet". It was a spanking triolet! haha
Hmm...is there a special term for plot bunnies when they apply to poems?

Twenty-Six Licks Triolet

Another birthday had come and we bent
her over our knee; She'd turned twenty-six.
I used my hand; a paddle would make a dent.
Another birthday had come and we bent
over backwards getting the invites sent
out, even though none of her friends were chicks.
Another birthday had come and we bent
her over our knee; She'd turned twenty-six.

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Oh, I've done one of these a long time ago for my birthday poem. I'll have to see if I posted it here in the PoBo. It was horrible!

ETA: Couldn't find it. You're all so lucky. I remember the title though, "Twenty-Six Licks Triolet". It was a spanking triolet! haha
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Hmm...is there a special term for plot bunnies when they apply to poems?

Twenty-Six Licks Triolet

Another birthday had come and we bent
her over our knee; She'd turned twenty-six.
I used my hand; a paddle would make a dent.
Another birthday had come and we bent
over backwards getting the invites sent
out, even though none of her friends were chicks.
Another birthday had come and we bent
her over our knee; She'd turned twenty-six.

Speechless ................
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The way Five Senses has been moving lately, I'm not sure this one got the right exposure.
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Can you hear them? The crickets
play such a lonely, mournful song
that still tastes sweet in my mouth,
Can you hear them? The crickets
remember when it went south;
even touching your hair felt wrong.
Can you hear them? The crickets
play such a lonely, mournful song.

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The way Five Senses has been moving lately, I'm not sure this one got the right exposure.
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Can you hear them? The crickets
play such a lonely, mournful song
that still tastes sweet in my mouth,
Can you hear them? The crickets
remember when it went south;
even touching your hair felt wrong.
Can you hear them? The crickets
play such a lonely, mournful song.

This is very good. Moving, which is not something I expect to see in a triolet. You've given me a new way to think about them.

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Oh, I've done one of these a long time ago for my birthday poem. I'll have to see if I posted it here in the PoBo. It was horrible!

ETA: Couldn't find it. You're all so lucky. I remember the title though, "Twenty-Six Licks Triolet". It was a spanking triolet! haha
Somehow this makes me think Eve was involved.
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Motown Tritina

When I tell you everything is alright,
theme is but a dream and don't be uptight--
dharma laze and praise the day. Outtasite.

Drove your red Mustang, we were outtasite
tires screaming wind and it was alright
on the mountaintop I had you uptight

against an oak pushed close and uptight,
moving like the leaves bare and outtasite,
rapping you in song until it's alright.

Baby you're alright. Uptight. Outtasite.
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Yes I know it rhymes but I wanted to use those three words. I also skipped a beat in one of the lines because it sounded better overall to me that way. Oh and special thanks to Stevie and Wilson.
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The way Five Senses has been moving lately, I'm not sure this one got the right exposure.
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Can you hear them? The crickets
play such a lonely, mournful song
that still tastes sweet in my mouth,
Can you hear them? The crickets
remember when it went south;
even touching your hair felt wrong.
Can you hear them? The crickets
play such a lonely, mournful song.

I did see this and thought you had pre-empted me
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If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
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Motown Tritina

When I tell you everything is alright,
theme is but a dream and don't be uptight--
dharma laze and praise the day. Outtasite.

Drove your red Mustang, we were outtasite
tires screaming wind and it was alright
on the mountaintop I had you uptight

against an oak pushed close and uptight,
moving like the leaves bare and outtasite,
rapping you in song until it's alright.

Baby you're alright. Uptight. Outtasite.
______

Yes I know it rhymes but I wanted to use those three words. I also skipped a beat in one of the lines because it sounded better overall to me that way. Oh and special thanks to Stevie and Wilson.
Don't think I've seen a rhyming one before , you're a trendsetter
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
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If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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Don't think I've seen a rhyming one before , you're a trendsetter
Or a cheater.

I just couldn't resist those three words. I realized that, for me, the easiest way I could start it was to come up with the last three words first and then start writing. And what can I say, the three words that popped into my head were part of a Stevie Wonder song...
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Or a cheater.

I just couldn't resist those three words. I realized that, for me, the easiest way I could start it was to come up with the last three words first and then start writing. And what can I say, the three words that popped into my head were part of a Stevie Wonder song...
I always start with the end words first (the same with the Sestina) place them in their proper places and then write to them!
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If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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