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Fibonacci

I have to write at least one for a challenge that's coming up, so who'd like to suffer...um...create along with me?


A fibonacci is a poem that follows the Fibonacci mathematical sequence for syllable count per line.


0+1=1
1+1=2
1+2=3
2+3=5
3+5=8
5+8=13
8+13=21
13+21=34
etcetera....

You can see how your poem could quickly get unweildy, which is why six lines has sort of become the standard


For the 6-line poem that means:


1 syllable for first line
1 syllable for second line
2 syllables for third
3 syllables for fourth
5 syllables for fifth
8 syllables for sixth

I'm gonna try. Feel free to jump in.
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Old 08-13-2014, 08:05 PM   #2
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the moon
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golden, a pendant
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Old 08-13-2014, 08:07 PM   #3
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Cham
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can write more
than six of these freak
ing lines. Whatsamatter with her?
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I have to write at least one for a challenge that's coming up, so who'd like to suffer...um...create along with me?


A fibonacci is a poem that follows the Fibonacci mathematical sequence for syllable count per line.


0+1=1
1+1=2
1+2=3
2+3=5
3+5=8
5+8=13
8+13=21
13+21=34
etcetera....

You can see how your poem could quickly get unweildy, which is why six lines has sort of become the standard


For the 6-line poem that means:


1 syllable for first line
1 syllable for second line
2 syllables for third
3 syllables for fourth
5 syllables for fifth
8 syllables for sixth

I'm gonna try. Feel free to jump in.
If you can bring a natural (fibonacci sequences are common in nature), philosophical or mathematical reference into your poem, (since many of the great mathmen of the past were philosophers) this makes you need to work a little harder than simply counting syllables would..

Doesn't the fibonacci usually progress to the 13 syllables by the 6th line? >> goes to look it up. Nevermind. LOL I answered my own question.. you're right, 6 lines 8 syllables.
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If you can bring a natural (fibonacci sequences are common in nature), philosophical or mathematical reference into your poem, (since many of the great mathmen of the past were philosophers) this makes you need to work a little harder than simply counting syllables would..

Doesn't the fibonacci usually progress to the 13 syllables by the 6th line? >> goes to look it up. Nevermind. LOL I answered my own question.. you're right, 6 lines 8 syllables.
I want to try one that goes up to eight and then back down to one. Where is everyone? Get in here and try this you slackers!
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Old 08-13-2014, 08:18 PM   #6
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She's
a
perfect
show preening
fuscia petals' edge
to pout a lippy kiss at me.

edit:

She's
a
perfect
bloom preening
fuscia petals' edge
to pout a lippy kiss at me.
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Oh gawd counting syllables
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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I
am
and therefore
I think I must stink
at this. Alas, my poem is crass
and I wanted a beauteous
image to grab you,
but like smoke
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She's
a
perfect
show preening
fuscia petals' edge
to pout a lippy kiss at me.

edit:

She's
a
perfect
bloom preening
fuscia petals' edge
to pout a lippy kiss at me.
maybe tongue instead of edge? or tongues? also, are we doing this right?
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my
shell
cracked
when spirals
weakened with waves
and surf wash'd my curves out to sea
tide pull'd me back here
to shorelines
scoured
by
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my
shell
cracked
when spirals
weakened with waves
and surf wash'd my curves out to sea
tide pull'd me back here
to shorelines
scoured
by
time
*Snaps*

Here's an explanation of the form by the guy who created it.
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mayhem or
madness, leads to
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and ultimate failure.
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They say a smile is a gift which is free to the giver and precious to the recipient.
But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
If at first you don't succeed....skydiving is not for you ....
If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
....But I, being poor, have only my dreams, I have spread my dreams under your feet,Tread softly because you tread on my dreams.......
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maybe tongue instead of edge? or tongues? also, are we doing this right?
I think so. Hypatia loves this form and she's shown me a couple of her's at the regular readings.

I'm using apostrophes to show how I slur my words and clear up the syllable count questions that may arise from my uses of -ed endings. If it's wrong.. lol we'll just tell the crowd that rules are for highways and prisons.. so get off my path!
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ZA-VA-RA-KA-TRA-NE-MI-A

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Zavarakatranemia.


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pessamist!
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ZA-VA-RA-KA-TRA-NE-MI-A

Sweet
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Zavarakatranemia.


Zavarakatranemia = https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ii88v3wxrr8
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pessamist!
Well I was right, I've done it wrong already!!
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But giving the finger is free, too, and I find it more personal and sincere.
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If you don't pay your exorcist .... do you get repossessed?
I shall always decide not to decide, unless of course I decide to change my mind.
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The
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dip in the
mattress where your head
lay turned to the right side, so I
turned that thing around and now I
can snuggle into
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LOL! Quit yer bitchin and try another!
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Scream
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Nothing to see
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You can't change fate, so don't even try
If you change line 3 to "Nothing seen" (or something 3 syllables) it is a perfect fib!
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Scream
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Scream
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I love the way scream works with door because it makes me think of a screen door.
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I love the way scream works with door because it makes me think of a screen door.
Ha, I didn't even see that but now that you've pointed it out, it gives it a better picture than I originally had. And that is why I love these threads. New views on my own and other's work.
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